Horse Tranquilizers: A Story

Discussion in 'Open Mic' started by stick stickly, Nov 9, 2010.

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  1. stick stickly

    stick stickly New Member

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    Yo, so i wrote this sitting in class, killing time. let me know what you seriously think, dont sugar coat it i need to get better. thanks

    Try to unwind your mind have your wavelength align with mine/
    let me remind you that the tingling down your spine is fine/
    it's designed for you to have a good time; you're getting high/
    good, now relax and fall back into the couch/
    never mind what i was talking about/
    if you have a hear attack and start foaming at the mouth like a Guiness stout/
    ima be out faster than a gay man at boy scouts/
    but seriously, you should be fine dude/
    it's not a crime to use horse tranquilizers if no one finds you/
    just shut your eyes and imagine you can fly/
    and if you're gonna try, start on the ground outside/
    I overheard you slurring your words/
    you seemed concerned...something about dropping a turd?/
    fuck dude, i would have prefered you did that in the bathroom/
    this is ubsurd, ima have to get up and slap you/
    how fucked up are you man? do you need a bed pan?/
    I can give you a hand if you want to sit on the can/
    and by the way, chill out with the Raisin Bran/
    Smells like shit in here ima turn on a fan/
    thats a blade man, watch you fucking hand/

    doesnt really go anywhere, that much i know, but let me know what you all think even if you hate it just tell me why. thanks
    test
  2. Chase Murda

    Chase Murda hostile enviroment

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    this is a nice ass flow right here i havent saw this tight of rhyme flow in a minute
    test
  3. Radical Sun

    Radical Sun New Member

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    I can't really rhyme so I don't know what's good or bad but I thought this was ok.
    Reminded me of old slim shady going on about drugs and what have you and what not.
    test
  4. stick stickly

    stick stickly New Member

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    Yeah I've been listening to his first two LPs non stop lately. There's no doubt he's a heavy influence; eventually I hope I develop a more unique sound but I just used it as a jumping off point
    test
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