HIDDEN HOPE...please critique, I will peep your soon...it's been a minuten

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by MISSKEYdaQUEEN, Jul 10, 2003.

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  1. DaJackle

    DaJackle ThoughtS ProcessinG

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    haha you know this piece speaks to me, I got my phone pick-pocketed from me the other day...all that lost data and having to get it all back, but I didn't let the thief get into my heart and mind. The short lines are ok, it didn't really help me well the emotions though. And I did read some cliches in there too that can be replaced with a better image. Stay up
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  2. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    Feeling the style. And i'm loving the flow. Faith is most certainly "a key to life."
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  3. PR STATUS GFU

    PR STATUS GFU Under The Influence

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    i'm loving this, good shit.
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  4. MờήŚŦẫ®

    MờήŚŦẫ® I'm That GOOD...

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    where have you've been?
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  5. anonyMISSme

    anonyMISSme New Member

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    RAWr then plenty i've read.. and guess what, i understood the idea.. and ur emotions were felt.. mmmm.. i need to stop giving away that damn password!
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  6. Look im Gangsta

    Look im Gangsta New Member

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    this was shit.
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  7. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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  8. retts

    retts BlesseD

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    interesting.. i like it.
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  9. NKRYPTYK

    NKRYPTYK New Member

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    Its been a min since i read poetry . this was relaxing even though its a keystyle
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  10. Bhitiah

    Bhitiah Powerful Scriptures

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    I <3 you!!!! It's nice to read something from you..
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  11. Deaf Def

    Deaf Def Tha WordSmith

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    That was tight, especially for a keystyle! Lovin it
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  12. Spitblaze

    Spitblaze New Member

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    This is decent creativity was on point
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  13. BLACKANGEL

    BLACKANGEL Angelic Professor

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    *snaps*

    Beauty resides here listen
    music feeding the brain
    God healed body and soul
    with nourishment like rain

    My fav lines in the whole piece...
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