Hey whats up Poets

Discussion in 'Writer's Block' started by PisceanzDream, May 17, 2005.

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  1. PisceanzDream

    PisceanzDream xPisceanx

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    Whats up poets? I'm new to the board. Im not trying to battle nobody I just want to get feed back on how I can be a better poet, down the bottom is one of my latest poems so if its not a bother hit me up with some feedback ok? ~PisceanzDream~

    I’ve never been the type to go crazy over a *****
    But I’ve never had anything as good as you
    Or at least that’s what I think now
    I may come off pressed, but please believe me I’m not
    I’m used to bein spoiled and getting what I want
    I’ve seen you a few times and you haven’t tried to jump my bones yet,
    It’s something about you, I must admit
    It’s like bug, and I’ve been bit
    I’ve looked for love and at one point of time I thought I found it
    But now I wanna know if what I think is love, really is love
    Cus I figured that if what I think is love, really is love
    I wouldn’t be in search of more
    Nevertheless I wouldn’t have found you, feel me?
    I’m a confused little soul, and I’m young
    I know people say I’m too young to find love or I’m too young to know what love is
    But I wanna know, they aren’t me they don’t know what I know
    It’s kind of funny, how I’m tryna figure out what love is, but in the midst I found you
    Coincidently your lookin for love too,
    Spending time with you makes me feel all cozy inside
    I get a feeling with you I don’t get anywhere else, is that a sign
    Could it be that the love you want, is the love I got?
    Or could the love you have be the love I need?
    I’m not the rushin type, so you got good points tryna feel me out
    I’m just tryna move on with you and advance with you.

    We shared a kiss, one thing you taught me was
    You can tell how the person feels about you through the kiss
    Well was my kiss telling you enough?
    Cause I’ve been hurt before so all my feelings are a bliss
    You get to know some, but you don’t get to know all
    I’m a secret kind of chick so what you know is what you get
    But to advance to the nitty gritty of my feelings you gotta be willin to take me on a whole individual not as a big breasted 17 year old you see in front of you
    I honestly feel that you see beyond my 36 DD’s and see the real me
    That’s what some people fail to do
    You made a good impression on me, and a good one on my heart for some reason
    I guess that’s a start, just know this
    I’m feelin you I really am, I’m willing to build something with you
    That is, only if you let me
    So answer this,
    Are you ready for me?
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  2. Innocent beauty

    Innocent beauty New Member

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  3. Poetickz

    Poetickz The Humble One

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    wrong forum...someone move this to realm please
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  4. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    not bad not bad. I'm not going to assume you're a beginner in poetry but with writing (serious writers for that matter) there is always learning, growing. Peep the Poetry Realm.
    -Welcome as well.

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  5. Åffliction

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    Post it in the realm and I'll hit it up.,
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