[Haven't posted an audio in a year, will hit you back] HR ft. Fedarro - See You Smile

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  1. Higher Rhymes

    Higher Rhymes Active Member

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    First off, I don't know if this will sound a bit too bubblegum for some of yall, but it's cool regardless. I had a lot of fun making it.

    I haven't been able to record for over 9 months and I was HUNGRY the entire time so expect some more tracks from me soon.

    I jacked Freq Beatz instrumental with a hook on it and made it hotter, hope he don't get mad at me though..
    I'll just delete it if I get flack for it.

    anyway here's the lyrics:
    v1[HR]
    I used to be okay, now I'm trippin again
    I got a good girl but she got a girlfriend
    I'm looking for a bigger fish to fill that void
    So until further notice, I'll be on a "fishing trip"
    Cuz it's rediculous it's getting me confused
    "Armstrong", but I never had control over you
    yeah I cheated first, but you cheated times two
    I guess trust is one thing that never got through
    Now we breaking up and making up again, it gets harder
    The oasis that I'm chasing doesn't make it into water
    I was fooled.. by a mirage so now I'm catious
    but its cool, cuz you lose some, im back where i started

    Hook[Fedarro/HR] X2:
    Baby I just wanna see you smile
    I'm nothin' like ya man, he aint the right one for you
    I can lay it down, I'm everything you need
    SO wont you come and run away with me?

    V2[HR]
    You think it's easy? I aint tryna be selfish
    But I gotta look out for myself just a little bit
    I took a breather but it's eating me alive every minute
    Of my misery, I started but you finished it
    Times change and people grow and that's cool
    but I've made a few mistakes I can't undo
    if you can't learn to deal with em
    just go ahead and leave
    cuz i dont need no skeletons in my bed too
    they in my closet and they haunting me
    already thinkings thats it's possiblly
    the worst scenario to be in
    reality is steady getting to me
    you got a "million dollar mouth" saying "talk is cheap"
    and i wont answer or communicate
    you put the lime light on me
    so now every day is like im center stage
    so what's the deal with ya feelings and ya habits
    i'll be getting mine
    you grillin cuz you just can't stand it

    Hook[Fedarro/HR] X2

    V3[HR]
    I was lost but I'm found again
    and there you go, taking arguments to town again
    Don't be so astounded, I finally found out
    --that you're a square and your sides will never round out
    and I just wish you would "shape up"
    cuz I can tell you draw your eyebrows in
    but you cant "make up" your mind?
    You dont want me in your life, then fine
    I dont wanna be a part of this broken cycle
    Cuz you know that I know that i am the truest
    --I could take away the clouds when the sky isn't blue and
    Time heals all wounds, I'll be better soon
    Picture us picture perfect as a bride and groom
    But I'll never change my opinion
    --Even if for a second I thought you were really on
    Come to find out, everything is really not
    what I thought, we get along but we can't really bond, no!

    Hook[Fedarro/HR] X2:

    Enjoy
    http://www.soundclick.com/bands/songInfo.cfm?bandID=351828&songID=5686786
    HR ft. Fedarro - See You Smile
    lo-fi URL: http://www.soundclick.com/util/getplayer.m3u?id=5686786&q=lo
    hi-fi URL: http://www.soundclick.com/util/getplayer.m3u?id=5686786&q=hi

    Thoughts Comments? Negative, Positive, quality? wanna know it all.. holla
    test
  2. amorphouz

    amorphouz New Member

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    Alright... right off the bat I like the vibe of the track. The verses are way too plain. Some overdubs, b.g. vocals, adlibs, whatever would help. Another thing is breath control. You take breaths in odd places and kinda break the flow of a few lines and it throws everything a little off. I thought the 1st verse was good but the second verse lacked lyrically and you didn't have quite the same punch. Third verse is similar to the second, in that it lacks punch.

    All in all, this could've been better but since you haven't recorded in a while I think you'll knock some of that rust off and up it on your next tracks.

    check the link when you get a chance...

    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=1056951

    Peace
    test
  3. Higher Rhymes

    Higher Rhymes Active Member

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    I was trying to get that effect of "bounciness" I guess I forgot to breathe hahaha!
    Thanks for the feed man, hitting ur link as I type
    test
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  7. tenlientl

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    sup, fam. you got dope lyrics, man. pretty dope song.. but i dont know if its me. i think the flow doesnt suit the delivery. u know what i mea? but thats just me.

    and i know it might be outta your control, but the hook was too long. it shoulda just been x1, not x2.

    overall. pretty dope. i wouldnt mind hearing your new shit.

    holler http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=1056284
    test
  8. Higher Rhymes

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    Thanks for the reply homeboy
    replied to your thread

    BUMP THIS UP
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  10. homicidal thoughts

    homicidal thoughts New Member

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    this was cool

    Flow was awkward.. Maybe should have tried punching it and your verse sounds real dry, Could have used some more adlibs

    other then that good track
    test
  11. 2Xtreme

    2Xtreme a.k.a. Mad Static 4:14

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    This was a good track. But yea, the flow sounds a bit choppy at times, something in which I've had problems with in the past. Your verses could use a bit more emotion, your vocals sound a bit or monotone or robot-like, plus, adlibs couldve helped as well. But other than that alone, this was good, the chorus is definitely something that will get the ladies in the mood. Keep it up homie, and return the favor.

    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=1057087
    test
  12. Blues

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    the hook is real polished...

    so it's a let down once the verses start....you DO have potential...you have a basic grasp on rhyme scheme and flow...but your delivery is very monotone and boring..and your lyrics are very plain....also..you need to work on your breath control.....something that helps me is spitting verses while jogging...people will look at you wierd but it dont matter...it helps expand your lung capacity...i can spit about 7 bars before having to take a breath now..


    return the favor..
    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=1051016


    Blues
    test
  13. Higher Rhymes

    Higher Rhymes Active Member

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    Jumpppppin Jumpin
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  14. Higher Rhymes

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    upp one last time
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