"Goodbye" New Track .. Drop Links

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  1. Jaiz

    Jaiz JaizMusic.com

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    Hey Guys I'm back after a bit of a hiatus from this site. I made a few new tracks, but I didn't wanna post them on here cause I liked the tracks lol But I was still going through an experimental phase with my voice and style. But I finally think I have gotten back to my natural sounding voice and style once again. Feedback would greatly be appreciated. Thanks :)

    "Goodbye"
    http://www.soundclick.com/bands/songInfo.cfm?bandID=11660&songID=5797492

    Hit up my new thread http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=1070564
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  2. ceson

    ceson ....Ceson Wordz

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    peepin..beat was good quality wise n all that,but didnt do much for me.voice was coo..delivery was ok...came off alil awkard at first but it was coo as the song played.
    hook was ok..did the do...quality was pretty nice...clear vocals,no complaints..

    overall this was ok...u did ya thing..props...`1
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  3. Tony B

    Tony B New Member

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    iight, flow's a little simple. content wise, for this kinda track you needed to be more original with it simply cuz the topic's been done many times. beat's coo, nice n smooth, hooks' coo as well but not really catchy. quality's good on this, you got a good voice for this but just switch up the rhyme scheme a bit cuz after a while this track got kinda boring. not bad though, keep droppin
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  4. Money's Worth

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  5. Jaiz

    Jaiz JaizMusic.com

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    word elevate
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  6. Nasty Chopz

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    beats kinda deep, too depressing for me lol..the essssses are kinda sharp, might wanna use a desser on this...where u from, what kinda accent is this?? flow is good, u holdin it... hooks aiiiight man. quality could be better but its straight..
    overall this track was aight homie stay up
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  7. wreck1

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    accent seemed weird at first, but as the song went on it wasnt even noticable. the beat was mad depressing but decent. flow was ok. nice concept. lyrics were good. hooked seemed like it was missing some emotion. it sounded like you were attempting to get emotional but you didnt want your mom to hear you from the next room. overall pretty decent track.
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  8. littleslimlocc

    littleslimlocc New Member

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    VTZ got some ill beats - this one fits you real well - like how you rip it up for awhile without the snare (and on the hook) - yeah, this shit is nice, sounds like ya gettin back closer to your natural voice - diggin it - this is good pimpin homie

    keep it movin!
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  9. E. Fate

    E. Fate Guest

    Holy shit, Jaiz is alive...and sounding like a white Pac
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  10. Jaiz

    Jaiz JaizMusic.com

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    Wow not enough emotion for ya in the hook huh? I disagree but that's cool. LOL @ ur little 'you didn't want your mom to hear from you from the next room'. What do u think I am 16? That Would mean I've been dropping on this site since I was 10 :p Anyways thanks for the feedback
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  11. wreck1

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    didnt mean it literally, it was just an example. ill take another listen and see if it comes out to me in a different way
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  12. homicidal thoughts

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    Beat is dope... sounds like syndustry beat...i liked it untill it dropped.. the build up was sick too

    lrically you doing what you do my dude.. everything is on point.. this shit would be dope with diffrent drums when they drop.. ruins the song for me

    good job..justr dont like that certain part of the beat

    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=1061483
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  13. Jaiz

    Jaiz JaizMusic.com

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    word thanks
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  14. Jaiz

    Jaiz JaizMusic.com

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    elevate ^^
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  15. Fiya Fleye

    Fiya Fleye iLLeSt EyECoN

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    This is definitely a hot track

    You used VTZ's beat exactly what it's for...to express yourself
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  16. Jaiz

    Jaiz JaizMusic.com

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    thanks a lot man
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  17. Mr.BYTCH KILLA

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    Man that a nice ass smooth track....it makes me think.....then u Stressing some Super Real Shyt.....Thats what the fuck Im talking about....Yall inspire me with shyt just like this.....Man that bytch Jamming.......Keep doing the dam thang....B.K.

    Just keeping it Real.....Stay Up Pimp....You got the Killaz Respect.....

    Im still banging yo sounds.....its tight playa......

    Close my day dream then I Fantsize....B.K......
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  18. stryk9

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    you have a wierd accent (where ya from) so as somsone said there is a bit of sibilance with the s's. That said, this track is pretty polished, i liked the beat and your approach was pretty fresh. The flow didnt swithc up a ton but i liked it and its straightforwardness worked for the topic. maybe include more specific details that set this relationship apart from others. This was pretty nice. You pronounce your words a bit wierdly, not sure bout it but it sounds fine.
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  19. DRUG.

    DRUG. Registered Felon

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    this was really nice.

    flow-hit the snares niceley, unique voice, real smooth flow
    delivery-was nice, breath control was good
    quality-was good, condenser quality good mixing
    lyrics-deep shit...some just pour your heart out shit, which i looooveeee



    dope shit

    rtf?: http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?p=14975961#post14975961
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  20. Ruff Huff

    Ruff Huff Rapper/Producer

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    i thought it was pretty raw... smooth likable shit
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