Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by IAmDonoTg, Apr 20, 2013.
I love me some spoken word - thank you for posting
hey you've gotten alot better since the last video i peeped..
one feedback i have is that sometimes you seem to pause too long.. pausing for effect is great, but at some points it becomes awkward..
Word, appreciate the feedback. I'll take it into consideration in the future.
Yeah, I agree. Aside from a few too many awkward pauses, it was a decent listen. Keep doin' what you do!
The ending was not strong even though it was the only part truly emphasized... The imagery could have been better, you had me in the middle of the piece, but you came off. Keep describing, keep the imagery up. Don't use such as restrictive rhyme scheme, if it's going to crush the strength of your piece.
This was very good, love your word play, nice mic presence as well, good story, I enjoyed!
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