Golden Goddess (Spoken Word)

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by IAmDonoTg, Apr 20, 2013.

  1. IAmDonoTg

    IAmDonoTg Member

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  2. L u c y

    L u c y (Administrator) SWERVE

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    I love me some spoken word - thank you for posting
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  3. TheInkwell

    TheInkwell New Member

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    hey you've gotten alot better since the last video i peeped..
    one feedback i have is that sometimes you seem to pause too long.. pausing for effect is great, but at some points it becomes awkward..
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  4. IAmDonoTg

    IAmDonoTg Member

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    Word, appreciate the feedback. I'll take it into consideration in the future.
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  5. Hambunctious

    Hambunctious New Member

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    Yeah, I agree. Aside from a few too many awkward pauses, it was a decent listen. Keep doin' what you do!

    -Ham
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  6. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    The ending was not strong even though it was the only part truly emphasized... The imagery could have been better, you had me in the middle of the piece, but you came off. Keep describing, keep the imagery up. Don't use such as restrictive rhyme scheme, if it's going to crush the strength of your piece.
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  7. IndigoSoul

    IndigoSoul New Member

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    This was very good, love your word play, nice mic presence as well, good story, I enjoyed!
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