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  1. Macabre

    Macabre via Fatality

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    I see footprints painting the ground
    And all the past predators running amuck
    Even the trees are shaking in their roots
    Because you’ve lost your cocky strut

    So now you prey on the weak
    And even the strong have a need for sleep
    I can still hear yesterday’s dying echo
    As blood protrudes from a once peaceful beak

    I fear those claws will become my prison
    Oh how I miss those winged nubs
    And I still see traces of that perky tail
    In the one you lug through the mud

    Yes, the fear will always be prevalent
    But it’s sorrow that overwhelms and prevails
    For it is I that must bear eternal damnation
    For plucking the feathers from your slimy scales​
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  2. I'm not quite sure what this is about. Maybe it's about a terradactyl.
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  3. Macabre

    Macabre via Fatality

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    Ha, close.

    I was watching a show about how a dinosaur could be produced with the reverse engineering of bird DNA, and I thought it made a nice metaphor for turning rather innocent, peaceful people into uninhibited assholes. My hope was that this could be applied to drug addicts, prostitutes, cult devotees (think the Manson girls), or just people that have been fucked up by your influence.
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  4. Sun_Flower

    Sun_Flower Bluez By Loves Eye

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    Its an interesting piece from a bird's eye view. The recreation and slaying of the innocent is very wide to put in a piece like this very unique I can say I did enjoy the read. At first I was like wow, but when you gave your insight of what it states i got a better look at it. Very different.
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  5. Macabre

    Macabre via Fatality

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    Thanks.

    and yeah. I definitely go overboard with the sci-fi and surrealism from time to time, especially when I write quickly in a 'connect the dots' manner as I did here.

    Not that I'm complaining, because this turned out exactly as I had hoped.
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  6. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    Been awhile I read poetry...I enjoyed reading this, read it twice. My thought on this was something along the lines of the rich robbing the poor-this was written very well.
    I need to start writing again. & thanks for reading mine too
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