From Poetry ... *Please Peep*

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  1. Jen Li

    Jen Li New Member

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    from the darkness of poetry I emerge, a step at a time
    leaving lightning and thunder in a swirl of emotions
    Words intertwined like ivy and roses Combined within me, as i put forward my thoughts.
    Through a vortex of painful ideals, tainted with blood of a decaying heart I am condemed to a wreck, a mass of flesh peeling from bones, cells separating from each other, only to compact and re-connect while rhymes continue to pulsate through a mind contorted to a will.
    in the path of tears, angels re-assemble broken parables, but like shards of glass there will always be missing pieces, missing pieces of me and my truth
    That Can be found incased in my tomb of thoughs
    Chains of lies and deceit bind me, hold me back, though my willingness to succeed finds the weakest link
    from the darkness I emerge, a step at a time
    leaving lightning and thunder in a swirl of emotions
    My Style is reckless mixed with Grace
    My thought process revolves on an axis around my heart like the earth around the sun.
    My truth explained through shaded visions of worlds created with sentences
    For now my imagary is complete,
    so no more to these words that i speak
    test
  2. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Deep shit. You write with such great imagery

    one luv
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  3. Jen Li

    Jen Li New Member

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    thanks for the feedback yo
    much appreciated
    test
  4. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    This has been a definite read and I'm surprised only one has left feedback. I believe you came with true metaphorical statements and they all had real meaning behind them. The poetic devices and aspects all came together to join in this piece. Word usage explained and detailed your thoughts. Complex, yet self-explanatory at time. To a reader, the vocabulary was so intense, that would be the only reason, they wouldn't follow what was being said. This has influenced me to read some more of your work, mos def. My blessings..
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  5. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    "Through a vortex of painful ideals, tainted with blood of a decaying heart I am condemed to a wreck, a mass of flesh peeling from bones, cells separating from each other, only to compact and re-connect while rhymes continue to pulsate through a mind contorted to a will."

    I loved the whole thing but...I really loved that part!!

    This is a deep piece. Excellent job!!
    test
  6. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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  7. Jen Li

    Jen Li New Member

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    thanks for the feedback guyz
    its much apreciated
    test
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