Formula Black

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by Infonation, Jun 6, 2003.

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  1. Infonation

    Infonation Info for the Nation

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    E=Mc squared, can't compare, this formula is rare.

    Composed of an African descent of people, with wooly mammoth like hair.

    Are lair are the dark public housing projects, with puke green dark stairs.

    Flickering lights, 3-legged chairs, and night-long bus fairs.

    Step into a public place and get blue eyed long stairs.

    Blue eyes don't care, so I say that life's not fair.

    Can't we share the world, we built it together with both wear and tear.

    Look at me and see me as a person my brother.

    Not as a thing, or pigment, dye, or color.
    test
  2. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    I'm feeling how you painted the image for me of what it may seem like for you. Nice imagery, as I basically just said, that was your best aspect. Plus, you have somewhat of a developing skill within the poetry aspects, just elevate within metaphors and similes and you'll gain my full attention, completely. Overall, this was a pretty damn good piece, keep it up, mos def. My blessings..
    test
  3. reload

    reload New Member

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    Yo I liked that! Mad props on this.
    Keep writing and posting.
    Peace.
    test
  4. L-M-INT

    L-M-INT New Member

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    TYTE ISH...... KEEP IT UP
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