For those who are gone.... part 2

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  1. AlmostFamous

    AlmostFamous U got a problem?

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    can a mod please sticky this one as well

    I plan on posting this on the regular

    kind of a throwback idea
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  2. AlmostFamous

    AlmostFamous U got a problem?

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    I finally found your first piece!! lol

    damn this was so true, meaning true to what you feel

    good job, mad props for this piece



    This is my first time that im postin in here, so cud i get sum honest feedback plz...


    Still finding it hard to see your face
    No longer able to hold your hand,
    I want to show you love,
    I want to feel your skin, your soft cheeks,
    But it’s all gone now,
    I lost the love of my life,
    And never am I gonna get it back,
    Wishing how much I could hold you, wishing I could touch you, this shit weren’t meant to be.

    I got all this love,
    And its all for you,
    No one else comes close,
    You’re my hearts desire,
    Lets find a way to be together,
    Don’t fight what you know is true,
    I understand that you’re hurting,
    You don’t want a young one,
    But I’m all grown up now,
    In to this big world,
    And I wanna share it wit you,
    Wishing how much I could hold you, wishing I could touch you, this shit weren’t meant to be.

    I gotta fight this feeling,
    Time to move on, damn,
    You think its that simple,
    But it isn’t,
    Four years long I been hurting over you,
    But not anymore,
    Tired of thinking of you at night,
    Tired of telling my friends how much I care about you,
    You don’t want me,
    And I want you,
    I still wish I could hold you, wish I could touch you, but damn, this shit weren’t meant to be.

    I’m letting go,
    Doing what you wanted me 2 do,
    Finally seeing sense,
    Seeing you for who you are,
    And not for who I wanted you to be,
    There’s a long road ahead of me,
    But I gotta finish it, gotta keep walking,
    Even thou I think I'm in love with you I’ll never tell you,
    One day, you may turn around and tell me how much you love me,
    And tell me how much you wished you could hold me, touch me, but you even knew, that this shit weren’t meant to be.

    I remember trying to stop myself from falling,
    But it’s harder than what u think,
    You gotta learn to love some one else,
    Coz you aint the only one,
    I aint got long, you got mad years ahead of you,
    Mad years to fall in love with someone else.
    No more crying,
    You aint worth my tears,
    So I’m saying goodbye,
    That’s right, goodbye
    One day, my love will haunt you, until that time, I think I still love you?
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  3. AlmostFamous

    AlmostFamous U got a problem?

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    he's in retirement now!!

    his very first piece on the realm

    hope you like



    Tell me...




    Can you tell me how to live without u?
    Can you tell me how to go on without thoughts of u?
    I tear thinking of ur absence in my life,
    A glimpse of u is all I need to delude this strife.

    My skies are so dark without u here,
    My heart yearns to hide away somewhere far.
    Tha pain of losing u is draining me of all,
    Could u hold my hand and evade my downfall?

    I’d sacrifice my all for this heart,
    But my soul bleeds at this distance u built.
    Wish I could smother ur heart & take away tha pain,
    Seems like my love for u is in vain,
    I’ll be lucky to hear ur voice once again.

    I’ll caress ur thoughts till tha end,
    And wish forever we were god send.
    I crave to hold ur memories now,
    And fade away into tha crowd somehow.

    These words do injustice & fail to express my love,
    You’ve taken it all away, like a graceful dove.
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  4. AlmostFamous

    AlmostFamous U got a problem?

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    he's in retirement now!!

    his very first piece on the realm

    hope you like


    shit I accidentally posted this piece twice, my bad


    Tell me...




    Can you tell me how to live without u?
    Can you tell me how to go on without thoughts of u?
    I tear thinking of ur absence in my life,
    A glimpse of u is all I need to delude this strife.

    My skies are so dark without u here,
    My heart yearns to hide away somewhere far.
    Tha pain of losing u is draining me of all,
    Could u hold my hand and evade my downfall?

    I’d sacrifice my all for this heart,
    But my soul bleeds at this distance u built.
    Wish I could smother ur heart & take away tha pain,
    Seems like my love for u is in vain,
    I’ll be lucky to hear ur voice once again.

    I’ll caress ur thoughts till tha end,
    And wish forever we were god send.
    I crave to hold ur memories now,
    And fade away into tha crowd somehow.

    These words do injustice & fail to express my love,
    You’ve taken it all away, like a graceful dove.
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  5. AlmostFamous

    AlmostFamous U got a problem?

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    MISSKEYdaQUEEN
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    a total of 25 replies!! wow and she only hit it up 6 times with her own comments...

    Anyone know wtf happened to her?



    They Call Me The Queen- Slam piece for Sunday



    This is my closing piece in the Slam I'm participating in on Sunday!! It's going to become my signature piece....Hope you like it!!!



    They call me the Queen.
    I am here before you a standing result of the kindling process of gold
    Still incomplete
    But this heat has branded me into something with divinity
    You can here it when I speak.
    Rising from oppression from 400 yrs of being abused
    Raped, beaten, clowned, and used
    Smacked, degraded, and confused
    But amazing grace
    They call me the Queen and I hold that title with pride
    It won’t be denied
    It aint a status thing
    or a vain mental exaltation of fictitious sorts
    My belief in it is who I am and who I am coming to be
    See those miserable people can’t make me join in their company
    I was held down as a child from those who could not see my beauty
    or refused to acknowledge due to their own insecurities
    I grew up as different when I was actually unique
    I grew up with extreme self doubt I dare never compete
    But I didn’t realize that I was a winner off rip
    Until God gave me poetry
    Those of what you experience from my lips
    Day after day I reflect on the written word that has become my salvation
    Memories of hard times
    I look back on my rhymes
    These words I write are therapeutic
    This is the way I must win
    My blood scars are the permanent black ink stains imbedded in my skin
    I take the battle in my mind and combat it with the pen
    Carcasses of fought battles left in the wind
    They call me the Queen
    If royalty intimidates you
    I’ll take a step back from my throne for a second
    just to make you at ease
    But ultimately the reality you will have to see
    I can’t deny whom I truly am just to appease
    I’ve gone through too much in my life to have to compromise to please
    I have brought four gods to this earth
    and everyday with my words I choose to give birth
    too fresh minds
    that were once confined
    in limited mentalities
    and frigid state of minds
    I have helped you come to full term
    I have labored you with a lyrical foundation that is firm
    And this is why I am who I am
    This is why you know who I am
    This is why they know who I am
    They call me Queen.
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  6. AlmostFamous

    AlmostFamous U got a problem?

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    piece was very confessional... lol


    I am an adulter
    But it is beautiful
    It is the most sensual, non malice thing that I can do.
    It is something done just for me

    My eyes bleed guilt
    And my body screams freedom
    ‘STOP’ tickles on my tongue
    ‘YES’ is what is translated
    I am confused
    Yet I continue
    On a journey for an answer
    I never wish to find

    A smile comes across my face; every quirk about him that makes him better than reality
    And a tear rolls down my cheek; every time I see my husband in his eyes
    I choose to smile rather than cry
    And take that moment home

    I knowingly lie to myself
    ‘This will never happen again’
    But that moment is too strong; that smile a permanent reminder
    Worn regardless of the season
    Will not be washed away

    My tongue tastes of his essence
    Each breeze from the wind is his hot breath stealing my power
    He is everything I do, think or say

    The familiar touch of my husband makes me shiver.
    And he tries to steal the one thing I have to myself
    Uncover my secret

    I don’t love this man
    I love what this man does for me
    I don’t want this man. I want the control he has over me
    And I go back
    Praying to extract his secrets; that takes my breath away, I wish never to get it back.

    I realize I want to dissect him
    Transfer his good, his heavenly
    Into my husband
    Because I love him


    But love is not enough
    My body knows this, my mind follows
    And he agrees

    I am an adulter
    I embrace it;
    It is beautiful.
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  7. AlmostFamous

    AlmostFamous U got a problem?

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    KIng Tony and Mocha_licious
    February 23,2004
    One of the best collaborations, imo done on this site


    ******Collab of King T and Mocha_Licious******



    The depths of my mind

    ***King T is in the color green & Mocha licious in the other color***

    Step through the door of my mind
    Beware of the darkness u will find
    Pain, hurt, and madness galore
    Assaults u the minute u open the door

    Allowing seduction to begin inside my mind
    Unconscious to terrifying and absolute shame
    Bitter hate drips and spills like water all over
    Saturating and surrounding your soul


    Thoughts deep within the shadows hide
    True feelings kept locked up inside
    Uncover the secrets trapped in my brain
    Discover the darkness that makes me insane


    Hideious creatures roam this gray matter
    Skeletal graveyards containing illicit secrets
    Keep digging until you find my real map
    Define this labyrinth before you are lost


    Enter cautiously, pause and stand still
    Try to catch a glimpse of the sorrow I feel
    Listen for the resounding echo of deep regret
    Constantly reminding me of what I long to forget

    Drenched in hate and hungry from this misery
    Understand the mercy given and grace bestowed upon me
    Remeninsce upon memory bliss once glistening
    Forever reminding me of when I was once sane


    You will find no happiness here in the dark
    Not a single ember, not one dying spark
    Completely conquered by the horrible pain
    There are only days filled with clouds and rain


    Look around at my so -called life inside this dark shell
    Unimpressive as hell living within a prison cell
    Manic depressive thoughts swim in and out
    Every other minute is consumed by thoughts of death

    View the scars from the wounds to my soul
    Witness the difficult struggle to maintain control
    Be bombarded with all my doubts and fears
    Don’t drown in the well that supplies my tears


    Sit down and watch my life unfold as a movie
    Commenting upon evidence u have found out
    Ulcers have swollen my inner organs
    Acidic membraniac linings lashing out


    Step through the door to my mind
    No darker place u will ever find
    Insanity and madness are what lay in store
    The minute u enter through that door...


    (King T i loved collabing wit you..lets make this a beginning...always Mocha)
    __________________
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  8. AlmostFamous

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    RealMS
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    who is still around and writing more and more.....


    -Undissolved-



    Undissolved
    2.27.04

    Going our own ways,
    My heart still beats love for you
    And even when you all of a sudden act hard,
    I know it’s a front to pretend
    ‘Cause being in love doesn’t bring change of heart overnight,
    But if its your way of saying you gotta go,
    I’ll get over my heartache trust me,
    Just know in order for that I ain’t gonna cry.
    Went to lean on beside you,
    Didn’t care 2 look up at me and return the smile
    Instead you kept your head faced the other way,
    That cold look I’ve never seen from your eyes before,
    But I knew something was up all the while
    You probably would’ve said the usual “Man stop trippin’,”
    Well I must’ve been trippin’ hard
    When I finally open up my heart to someone, not just anyone, but someone, YOU,
    He decides to push away beyond stars
    Had me sittin down thinking with such an awful frown
    That’s when another noticed the difference,
    Approaching me to ask politely what was wrong
    That’s when I saw,
    I don’t need to fill my heart with more than I can handle,
    So if you wanna leave like that,
    Make sure on your way out
    You close the door
    I had it open for you,
    Now it seems I just let in bad weather,
    That used to be my sunshine after rain,
    Now I’m on my path, on my Own,
    And I ain’t gotta cry,
    You know why?
    Things will be better.
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  9. Madnick

    Madnick Modern Laureate

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    Nice I'm feeling this hopefully I will be on it. But in a long time from now.
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  10. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    Yeah buddy--nice to see somebody is actually taking the time out to go back in time. MissKey is still around though. And I'm not MIA! lol jp. I still remember writing that-damn I don't like it. Big transition. You need to delete that, quit embarassing (sp?) me AF!

    :thumb: overall
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  11. AlmostFamous

    AlmostFamous U got a problem?

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    you didnt like it... lol

    well for all it counts i did and that worth something!!
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  12. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    ^I can bring back that day I wrote it and how I felt, not the greatest feeling. A stubborn stage of mine, and it was dumb because it was just me assuming things when nothing was there in the first place to assume. I see I wrote that sometime this past month, last year lol, and when I think about it it shows how much I grew in this relationship. Lol, its still the same one-that's what trips me out. Anyways-I'm glad you like it. Better yet, sign your name next to: "Written by" for this piece lol--

    -Much Love
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  13. AlmostFamous

    AlmostFamous U got a problem?

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    thats coooool

    "a stubborn stage of mine"

    im glad one female can admit it!! lol

    just joking

    You need to help me to spread the word about this post so others that havent even read this work, can read it for themselves

    throwback style....

    Famous
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  14. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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    wow lol wasn't expecting 2 see my name or my work in this thread. i'm just passin thru takin a look at how the realm and everythings evolved. haven't been in here in a minute
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  15. AlmostFamous

    AlmostFamous U got a problem?

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    you need to stick around king t

    Remember me.... tooshort21 aka shadygrady

    go back a ways...
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  16. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    I might write something and put in my siggy about this, throwback poets/poetry.
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  17. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    ^yeah what a great concept...collection of the classics
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  18. AlmostFamous

    AlmostFamous U got a problem?

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    We need to find a way where all of us can come together and really kind of dedicate all the throwback artists
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  19. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    Thanks ! it's always awesome to go back ....
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  20. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    sorry gonna unsticky it.....but yo if you re-up and reorganize this and the other one by Xero in one thread I'll restick it for you thanks
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