Fireworks freestyle

Discussion in 'Open Mic' started by clova, Jul 3, 2010.

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  1. clova

    clova New Member

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    isn't it funny how things work...
    you do good but your heart still hurts..
    you lookin for a reason to push through..
    but standin on the ledge wantin someone to push you..
    you're tired of all the talking and people being phoney..
    wanna go back to you and your dad eatin shoney's..
    you feel the walls closin in and its hard to breath...
    everything foggy and its hard to see..
    how did you reach this point to where nothing makes sense..
    find yourself speakin under false pretense...
    why does it seem like everyone just pretends..
    where does all of this mess come to an end..
    where do you go when its all fake..
    how do correct whats been a mistake...
    how to take a second when you don't have one to give..
    how to you remind yourself to just live...


    hopefully i will have my stuff set up again so i can record this...leave feedback and i'll do the same for you......
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  2. clova

    clova New Member

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    got tons of views and no feedback...once again this place is stupid....
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  3. dsp2k5

    dsp2k5 Dime Sack Pimp

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    I like it ... Im a sucker for the deep ones though .... the flow was nice but I think the content was better, but I think that is the point here.
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  4. clova

    clova New Member

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    word...thanks for peepin it son and for the feedback...
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  5. Ace the Prophet

    Ace the Prophet A Prophet to the Game

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    What up man? seems cool. readin this from my phone so it's a bit condensed, but overall i liked it man. got some good shit in it. flow could be better but since you wanna record this i'm sure you make it fit well on the beat. i like this though man. keep it up. 1
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  6. Carter Cruz

    Carter Cruz New Member

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