fickle

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  1. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    solicit my values
    sell my soul
    life demeaned
    lost control
    traded in my name
    deferred all blame
    i've read your judgement
    tho my decision remains
    but there is no place to leave
    and no place to go
    no spirit to roam
    and no house my home
    the path was paved
    and the road was wide
    the journey so simple
    each step to distance my pride
    worthless to regret
    wishes, there are none
    wanton to replace beauty
    whats done will remain done

    fickle for my betrayal
    fickle for each weak thought
    fickle for my existence
    turned my back on all that was taught
    test
  2. Lyme

    Lyme Guest

    vague yet complete..
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  3. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Quite depressing on how you say you lack this, lack that, lack everything, basically. Describing a fickled type meaning here, somewhat. I thought this piece was a bit short and took maybe only a couple minutes or so to read (I like to read them very closely). Nice way of ending it, I felt, but it ended suddenly, it seemed. Overall, good work with this one. My blessings..
    test
  4. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    you can almost hear it spoken- lots of emotion and i think the line seperated is a really strong line^
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  5. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    i can feel the depressed mood in this...almost a bitter undertone to me it seemed. one of those things that didn't need to say a lot but the blunt truth w/o pretty words to say all that needed to be said.
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  6. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    yeh, was written awhile ago, i believe with more of a feeling of emptiness rather than depression...maybe they the same thing? i dunno, anyways, thanx for peepin
    test
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