Fate Shimmers - The Illiad

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  1. Mr. Sam

    Mr. Sam New Member

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    http://www.myspace.com/decarabas

    It's the first track on the page.

    my life lay dormant, unsupported as an orphan
    immortal organs, son of goddess and swordsman
    had vision of warships, beach heads and stormin'
    reachin' shore in hoardes, forward toward the horsemen
    reinforcements come swarmin' over orchids
    a line forcin' through fields of battered corpses
    we're the fourth corps cornered and exalted
    lighting the funeral pyres with our torches
    breathless first, could see my death since birth
    blessed at worst, i learned to respect the curse
    cuz you know bloodshed has been my deliverence
    militant from the day i was dipped in the river Styx
    the lifeless eyes of Isis made the difference
    my fate shimmers in shifting sands in the distance
    this is my mission, you've warned 'em to late
    i am the warrior who's storming your gates

    midnight in the garden, off the harness in the darkness
    descending, then stepping softly over parchments
    swipe the chalice, creeping slowly over ballasts
    and turn the guards to shards with god-like malice
    our souls will await, warlords spoken of hate
    an army massing for me to open the gates
    if you've crossed me it's my sword that you've bled on
    i serve Agamemnon, my vengeance is dead on
    hallow eyes, i was born to swallow life
    and walk the earth while i'm followed by Apollo's eyes
    the seers prophesized, this is Achilles' urn
    and i've spilled my blood to watch the city burn
    these arrows are salvos guided by the pharoahs
    and watch my life fade to black under sparrows
    gasping for life, my presence leaves my brethren
    but my name lives a thousand years in legends


    >Myrmidons and lions, heed my voice
    >other men conquer, we destroy
    >for a face so sweet it makes a fleet deploy
    >i am Achilles, standing on the beach of Troy

    >Myrmidons and lions, heed my voice
    >other men conquer, we destroy
    >for a face so sweet it makes a fleet deploy
    >i am Achilles, standing on the beach of Troy
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  2. CeSektion

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    SICK TRACK... i love that little chant at the end... i am Achilles standing on the beach of troy... i left you a message on myspace... get back at me about that track (if ur down)
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  3. Mr. Sam

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    thanx for the feed...

    ...up...
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  4. Mr. Sam

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    Damn, is there no love for original shit that's not about guns?

    And how many cats on RM don't bother to return links?
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  5. Enigman

    Enigman PIG LORD

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    this was really cool

    thought ur flow coulda been sharped... ur timing was slightly off in some cases but probably not enough for the untrained eye to notice

    i thought alot of ur mutlies were pretty forced though which was :(

    but yeah u delivered welll... mad props for doing a song on this concept - good beat to use aswell

    for the most part this was cool ur lyrics were mad descriptive so i really got a feel of what u were saying... that shit u wrote was poetic - it painted pictures in my mind thats much respect cuz its a hard thing to do

    but yeah i definetely enjoyed this song and was a breath of a fresh air cuz theres alot of cheap soundign bs going around on here that ive heard today - this was classy

    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=924637 if u can checkit out plz
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  6. Mr. Sam

    Mr. Sam New Member

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    edit: wrong thread
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  7. tampas_illest

    tampas_illest New Member

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    sup DC, this was nice. i think the slower flow is good for this track it helps place emphasis on the syllables.
    hollow eyes, i was born to swallow life
    and walk the earth while i'm followed by Apollo's eyes

    beat worked nicely on this track too. vocals came off a lil bit sounding like enginear. liked the end lil hook effect.... shit was nice.. you on the come up fahreal.

    by the way this is focuz
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  8. Mr. Sam

    Mr. Sam New Member

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    much thanks for peeping, focuz. you got way to many aliases, man. hah. and good luck running the audio shit on fs, hopefully it gets more poppin' there.
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  9. ceson

    ceson ....Ceson Wordz

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    this was coo...deep voice..flow was on point i liekd tha lyrics..it sucks that myspace downs the quality but this was good...beat was coo..depressed typa joint...vocals was clear enough but i kno how myspace do songs so i cant really judge those...overall pretty good..nuffin really bad to say...keep it up...

    thx for the feed....
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  10. fuck_a_nella

    fuck_a_nella New Member

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    dope dope beat, I like the lyrics too, my type of shit word up, the delivery was cool your voice is something like aesop sometimes, the flow was aiight but i like the lyrics complex sit content and topic dope, creative, the phone effected part was nice but coulda upped the volume a lil bit there, i like the ending word up straight joint man, really enjoyed this, thanks for the feed, one
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  11. Mr. Sam

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    thanks for listening, fellas. up
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