ex girlfreind....how u been

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by Sparky tha troublesum, Nov 18, 2004.

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  1. Sparky tha troublesum

    Sparky tha troublesum kamikaze

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    'pac taught me everything I know/trust nobody and you don't have to "let go"/lookin for love in all the wrong places/strange faces and my disgraces/people telin me im just a white racist/f**k this i blaze this/toke nuts and erase this lifeless soul cos it aint got no home/wishing to god i could release this from my dome/used to spit nuts so cryptic/then nuts broke my heart and ripped it/no time for some deep metaphor/cos i cant take this pain no more/dont want a life caught up in hate/kamikaze-i ride alone to my death/steady dreaming what could have been until my final breath//

    replies appreciated cheers
    test
  2. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Think this is more of a rap...[dunno]
    test
  3. absolute zero

    absolute zero Among the living

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    toke nuts and erase this lifeless soul cos it aint got no home

    .....you sayin you toke nuts?

    seemed like a rap to me too

    but oh well

    God Bless
    test
  4. Sparky tha troublesum

    Sparky tha troublesum kamikaze

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    ah the nuts thing-i pasted it from another site and when u write shit it replaces it with"nuts".........hmm good idea rite?
    test
  5. UGene

    UGene New Member

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    look at the other poem you posted, and the response i gave applies to this also .. except i feel that this piece shows the topic more and expresses your point of view a little bit better .. like i said before, keep writing and you will elevate
    test
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