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Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by Mind~$oul, Oct 19, 2003.

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  1. StubbilyMug

    StubbilyMug DayorDollar Records

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    ya you're a moron for looking into the piece -especially reading past the first half
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  2. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Stubbily it's ok man, i said it was just something i wrote just for fun. It wasnt nothing serious, so dont take it serious...lol
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  3. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    Feme beat me too it, cause I was sure nuff gonna quote you on that shit...Based on a true story :lol:
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  4. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    u act like u knew what was happening...shut the fuck up....u must have read some of the replies to the piece at the begining...take your chunky ass back to where you came from....
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  5. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    we try as much as possible to not clog up the threads in this forum.....and we very rarely have any problems.....your presence is welcome here, i saw that you replied to a lot of pieces with in depth replies, but dont come in and just act like an ass....

    and it WAS a good piece so yeah it is quite obvious that you didnt read it.....

    oh and dont disrespect mind soul again......cause, well cause i said so.....
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  6. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    ^^^I said so too, cause umm...it will be justified...
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  7. StubbilyMug

    StubbilyMug DayorDollar Records

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    o no, ya i completely understand. hell thats why i actually scanned the rest. i thought it was cute too. no disrespect if thats what you're feelin. my apologies if thats how it came off, but my honesty can make me bad with that.


    its just hes the type a dude that says some bullshit he dont know what hes talkin about-or maybe he does, just he dont really get shit as well as he wished he did
    or the "i like this piece keep postin" or "I really felt this shit. I can relate to it. stay up" bullshit
    maybe not but -thats what kind of mood im in so fuck it

    what happened to honesty or constructive criticism?
    ya: im an asshole
    love me

    femm- shut up

    o and back to faggot -
    1.) i dont read replies to peoples works before i comment on it
    2.) i'm glad you like my avatar idiot
    3.) i regret wasting this much time on you already, but i feel this may be a place i'd like to go out of my way to be understood
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  8. Tilted Saga

    Tilted Saga Peter Parker@

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    Haha, i liked this. nice comical finish'
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  9. Speedy Gunzalez

    Speedy Gunzalez Awareness is my Alias

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    I enjoyed this. I somewhat anticipated a "twisted ending," but I didn't get it would end like that.

    This piece flowed together nicely which was also accompanied by some good descriptive lines.

    Good job playa
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  10. ~S*T*A*R*M~

    ~S*T*A*R*M~ Goddess

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    [color=ffcc99]Yeah you had some nice lines! That ending tho! lol it made me smile. Good work =)
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  11. noitanofnI

    noitanofnI Infonation

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    funny holmes, never seen you in a joking mood, way to switch it up^^^^Infonation's back>>>>>One
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  12. Lil'Dragon

    Lil'Dragon [nOw iZ tHa TyMe tO AkT]

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    Tell ya what, i never saw that ending coming, and i usually do see a hint or trickle of the twist along the way. But despite the humour u injected into the piece, ur development along the way was spot on. i was feelin ur word choice and structure.
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  13. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    exactly lol -- i was like wow look at malik writting such a sexy poem. the feel to it was great but the end made me laugh ^
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  14. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    Yeah, most definetly a piece worth reading. I liked how you intertwined a kind of deep sensuality with explicit sex. Both lessening and increasing both values at the same time.

    Well that's what it was for me. I do this quite often. Mainly through parody these days. For my own reasons. My own dark reasons...*bursts into deep echoing laughter*...

    But yeah, i dug it.

    ...resp...
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