~Evolve~

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    I posted this piece a long time ago, before must of you even started postin here. It isnt anything serious, just a lil funny poem. Hope you enjoy



    let
    two hearts
    evolve...

    as one
    together
    me
    you
    shall stand tall...

    nothing
    will ever
    come between
    us
    our love
    is too strong
    for
    anything
    to break
    us
    up

    lets
    make love
    until we sweat
    oceans...
    both
    bodies
    sticky, icky
    bed mattress
    soakened...
    let me
    taste
    your sweetness
    drink
    your wetness
    until you shower me
    with your
    sensuality
    multi
    multi
    multi
    sshhh baby dont
    scream...
    cause it's more sexy
    listening to you
    breathe deep for me
    innnn
    ouuut
    the sound
    of
    esctasy...

    let two hearts
    evolve

    as one
    together
    you
    bonnie
    me
    cylde
    you
    juliet
    me
    romeo
    until death do we part
    engraved in
    our tombstone...

    your beauty
    too
    intricate...
    for a
    god to
    duplicate...

    cupid whispered
    elegance...
    was her middle
    name...

    pouring
    honey on
    your
    honey
    skin tone
    arousing
    my manhood
    each
    time
    you moan

    until suddenly a
    ring comes from
    the
    phone
    and you say
    "baby you gotta go!"

    i ask
    why?
    she says
    "my moms on the way home"

    let
    two hearts
    evolve

    damn heffa
    gave
    me
    blue balls!
    test
  2. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    SON!!!! NOW THIS IS CREATIVITY,lol, ohh wow, lol...I am diggin the shit outt of it though, off the hook...Wow, makin me wanna right...To be honest though, the title drew me in because evolution is one of my favorite subjects, but this was still just as pleasing to read...Anyway, Funkadelic, lmao!!!
    test
  3. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    Ha nice twist at the end, for real i was so into this piece nice "re"-drop

    stay up, much love, peace
    test
  4. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    cupid whispered
    elegance...
    ^^^
    i liked that

    this was really sexy and the ending [funny]
    test
  5. the Guy with a Pen

    the Guy with a Pen a Svan Production

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    lololol...
    a funny piece... with some real good parts in it.. my favorite were:

    "your beauty
    too
    intricate...
    for a
    god to
    duplicate...

    cupid whispered
    elegance...
    was her middle
    name..."


    and of course... the ending.. lol

    good repost.
    test
  6. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    yeah thats what i liked too......
    test
  7. marc antony

    marc antony It's all about da ass....

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    <<<<<<<<really needs to get laid now......grt drop.....
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  8. eatemup

    eatemup New Member

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    [funny] this shit was tight liked this here LOL
    test
  9. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    OMG!!! I'm reading this all into it and shit...the style was good...i liked the way you broke the words and stanzas down and shit...it made it easier to read and follow...but u know that....thas polly y u did it....but anywho...im reading this shit...and im like damn this is aight...this is some deep shit...and then i get to the end...and jus took me to a whole nother place that i cant even describe...shit was tight tho...loved it from beggining to esspecially the end...

    mad love
    test
  10. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    man shit

    i didnt see the end coming at all...nice to see some shit like this from u....very different from what i'm used to seeing
    your beauty
    too
    intricate...
    for a
    god to
    duplicate...

    wow at that

    think thats one of your best lines.....

    good shit man

    UP
    test
  11. Nebulaz

    Nebulaz fear God, not man

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    tritto
    test
  12. Dark_Angel

    Dark_Angel Dark_Angel

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    "cupid whispered
    elegance...
    was her middle
    name..."

    here i was thinking all romantic then you ended it like 'what!' lol, nice peice though, very creative...certainly had a twist in the end after all the build up
    test
  13. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    thanks for showing love

    This was based on a true story
    test
  14. StubbilyMug

    StubbilyMug DayorDollar Records

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    haha i was skipping down because i didn't want to finish the bs... then i caught it
    test
  15. mavrik...

    mavrik... Lyrically Transparent ...

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    ha ha ha ... nice. almost making me sweat man ... but not quite lol. form was pretty nice on it ... the ending was funny. good post.
    test
  16. StubbilyMug

    StubbilyMug DayorDollar Records

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    test
  17. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    [funny] youre too much
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  18. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    u expect him to read your piece and u aint even read his...smh
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  19. StubbilyMug

    StubbilyMug DayorDollar Records

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    i can smell bs and im honest
    shit happens dude
    test
  20. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    wtf are u talkin about
    test
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