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  1. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    I lied to everyone about everything, expect me.
    I say im not tired when i am, I say im hungry when im not, i tell people what they wanna here and never say what i am actually feeling.
    I let the lies pile up, like bricks on a wall until i cant see out and no one else can see in.
    I make a plan to escape, i become someone else, put on a disguise and i climb over the wall and no one reconizes me .
    I feel powerful , i can get people to do what i want them to do.
    But i go to far, I get lost and i don't recognize myself.
    Take of the disguise, I give away the power
    I give up the control, i retrace my steps, go back to the wall and i take it down brick by brick.
    I bury them to mark the place.
    I strip away all the lies, until there are non left.
    I remember the person i left behind. I claim the confidence i was missing.
    I envision the person i want to be, tell everyone the truth but everything, especially you


    sorry but that monologue was from go-go girl, it was so hard i hadda post it
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  2. Mikaella Ocean

    Mikaella Ocean Well-Known Member

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    It's good, but it wouldn't hurt to articulate and tighten up your grammar..
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  3. Shadow

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    seriously?
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  4. Mikaella Ocean

    Mikaella Ocean Well-Known Member

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    yes?

    why, how do you feel about it Shadow?
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  5. L u c y

    L u c y (Administrator) SWERVE

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    pretty damn good.
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  6. Shadow

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    he didn't write it?
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  7. Mikaella Ocean

    Mikaella Ocean Well-Known Member

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    well that adds up, I still stand by my 1st reply tho in general when it comes to his writing..
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  8. Shadow

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    M.O needs to drop a poem
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  9. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    i didnt write that, but it was such an hard monolougue i wanted to post it i knew people like lil lucy could appreciate it! sup girl-girl, i guess i made alot of people mad on RM and all they do is hate on all my posts now, i guess thats what happens when u make fun of them and they cant defend them selves via a verse so they leave hater comments.. haha
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  10. TACOMA253BRNRZD

    TACOMA253BRNRZD New Member

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    u always was on that deep shit
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  11. L u c y

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    Don status
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  12. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    supa mod(ette) status!!
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  13. mr.rip

    mr.rip New Member

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    lol its still good
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  14. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    sup famalam! ^
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