"Essence Of My Creation" By Alex Hornby aka TuNed RooT

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  1. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Essence Of My Creation
    By Alex Hornby aka TuNed RooT

    This Texture Of Vibrant Ruins Under Our Aurora,
    Buries Our Eyes Under Lids To Create A Screen Of Shade.
    Characteristics Of Nature Unfold Our Substance Of Life,
    Leading Us To Cheers,
    For Emotional Heartbreak And Aches May Fade.
    --
    The Stretches Of Grass Look Of Blooming Childhood.
    That Vestige Of First Steps,
    So, It May Mature Into An Image More Beautiful.
    Our Hands Flourished Over The Straw Tips,
    Just As They Stood.
    --
    Wind Impacts The Features That Held The Look Of Exultance.
    This Affect Created My Own Crimson Blush,
    As If The Woman That Was My Growth Of Life,
    Touched My Face With Compassion And Love,
    No Lust.
    --
    Even Though This May Be The Earth,
    As I See It, Yet Not The Earth For Others.
    It'll Still Live On Through My Soul Of This Disguise,
    Through My Thought And Of My Words.​
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  2. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    beautiful use of language here alex......i liked how you described the grass in the second stanza....."Our Hands Flourished Over The Straw Tips,. . ."nice line.....
    "Wind Impacts The Features That Held The Look Of Exultance.
    This Affect Created My Own Crimson Blush,. . .".....<<thats a nice line too......You make things your own if you know what i mean.....nice piece lil man.....
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  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    damn boy, imagery was fire. I liked the last part the most. Brilliant work

    one luv
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  4. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    [funny] did anybody ever tell you, that you look like that boy jamie that was on the making the band shit with p diddy?
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  5. Infonation

    Infonation Info for the Nation

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    I liked that piece, I know now I have a lot of people to look up to in the poetry forum. All of y'all come with some hard skills. I'm sorry if I could'nt understand some stuff, y'all are deeper in this game than me, but i'm looking for understanding, everyday I write. ^One
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  6. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    lmao...yeah u do......[funny]

    i cant wait until pt II comes on

    but anyways

    this was dope.....lovin your style man...its so damn neat...i couldnt imagine writting a piece this smooth....let alone all of my pieces...u my friend are a poet.........lovin what your bringing to the realm..nice solid piece like always...keep doing ya thang
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  7. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    wonderful from beginning to the end... the imagery was on point, u used the right words to say the right things... wonderful thru and thru.
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  8. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    LOL @ the replies. On the real Nephew, you do have a way with words and seem to know what to say and when. Still waitin' on the joint from you that screams out "Dear Bitch who won't Let Shit Die...."
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  9. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    ^ It's coming, heh..

    Anyway, much love for the feed so far! Get at me with some more, please..
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