East: 5. Kon$piracy Vs 12. White-Eyez

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  1. Nebz

    Nebz R.I.P. Point Game

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    5. Kon$piracy Vs 12. White-Eyez

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  2. White-Eyez

    White-Eyez Breed of iLLness

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    lol

    konspiracy?

    goin max
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  3. Kon$piracy

    Kon$piracy ```````````

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  4. Kon$piracy

    Kon$piracy ```````````

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    re-live the 44 minute LA shoot out/attempted bank robbery ..

    having lived the life I lived, there was no God to me
    I never gave a fuck, mastered slaughtering and robbery
    no one was stoppin me, many clerks been layed out
    I say fuck work... resort to the easy way out
    stay blastin techs, burn walls with missiles
    best believe, my connects were off the hizzle
    "whats the dizzle" said my boy, he's top of the rank
    I told him I've been scheming to hit up Hollywood Bank
    it wasn't easy, we got maps, blueprints, and managed-
    to get no sleep for 3 days, doin bullshit like planning
    we got zooted and damaged braincells useless for standing
    talkin bout, "if we mess this up, truth is we vanish"
    so today I woke up, got outta bed ready to kill
    ready to turn my money bag from empty to filled
    the setting was chill, I got prepared to lock shit
    ready to pop clips, hold it down wit my accomplice
    with body armor snug, automatics in the trunk
    we left confident, I knew my dawg would blast to get it done
    we got pumped, listenin to Rock n Roll
    when we got there, it was on when he said "lock n load"
    with the plan in affect, he announced at the door
    that "all you little fucks better get down on the floor"
    it was clowning galore, we got the dollars and bounced
    to our surprise, outside there were cops all around
    on the mic one said "put your guns down, its over"
    I raised my pistol and put a round in his shoulder
    immediately they fired heat at me repeatedly
    but the only thing gettin damaged was the scenery
    I popped my trunk, shit started gettin nasty
    my AK dropped this one pig, and demolished his chassis
    I shot at anyone, Black, White, Asian, or Mexican
    I didn't even question shootin a pedestrian
    the cops had hot guns, but my vest was hotter
    I sprayed randomly, even hit a helicopter
    it was mayhem, gun shots, blood, car alarms,
    fire, smoke, screams, and an armored car
    I got in my whip, & told my mans to get in
    but it had so many problems I didn't even know where to begin
    it was fair that we split to meet up afterwards
    but the cops had passed the word that there was a massacre
    I ran this guy for his truck, that mother fucker
    he secretly took the keys out, and when I got in it didn't putter
    my mind stuttered, I felt like I had smoked too many ounces
    cops pulled up, in a dime I was surrounded
    I was out of it, shit now didn't seem good
    after a breif shoot out, I caught a round in my foot
    as I fell to the ground, I tried to wake up
    this couldn't happen to me forreal, but there I layed numb
    after being assaulted violently, the pace of my heart-
    fell drastically, those weapons were state-of-the-art
    my fate has been marked on the road, puddle of blood
    my path only consisted of rubble and slugs
    and here I am in this ambulance, in a bandaged trance
    hearing EMS sayin I actually stand a chance
    honestly I feel I got exactly what I deserved
    but I wonder, where are the usual comforting words?
    they're lucky I can't get up, this gets to me
    'cause these mother fuckers are definately neglecting me
    paramedic on CB radio: "he's stable, but on life support"
    "pulll the plug?!?"....Hold Up WTF!!! "oook sir, mission abort"

    heart monitor: beeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeep
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  5. White-Eyez

    White-Eyez Breed of iLLness

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    You open your eyes, but it's pitch black. You try to move your arm and legs to stand up but you can't. You are trapped inside a container that only allows you enough breathing air. Suddenly, you feel a cold shiver slowly run down your spine, and you feel the cold air upon your face, as if someone is breathing on you. You are not alone in there..

    Expand.


    BOOM! omg BOOM omg BOOM omg

    The Light,
    Refuses to Luminate, as my body begans to shake with hate
    I lay, Unable to move.... Voices Screech as shadows open the gate
    Afraid, They Pick up my corpse, as im pondering in confusion
    Retribution? It Couldn't Be..And these shadows Must be an illusion
    I try to scream but nothing came out, Cold drips of water
    Are dripping down my spine, as It deviously gets hotter
    Until it burns, and i urn wanting to turn away
    Come Azriel, I didnt awnser in fear of what to say
    All the sudden i feel precision incisions transplanted in my head
    am i dead, I lay steadily in this uncomfortable Bed
    Hurting now, I try to move, but am paralized
    I cry but drips of blood come out my eyes
    I must be dead, is this heaven or hell
    And what is this box im trapped in, it had devil details
    I flash back to my eager days, days of solomn
    Days were you wanted to kill, The Days with stardom
    Parton, My wife says...I said go to sleep now Betty
    she ignored me, "want a glass out water" as i pull out the machette
    Steady, Not knowing what the outcome will be, I
    Cut my wife into peices as I took her life
    Die! My son said to me, Huh? "what did you do to mommy"!
    Nothin bobby, go to your room your being naughty

    I come back to reality, This must be hell I said
    Ouch! I yell words of wisom rush through my head
    I wass connected to another life, another beings
    I turn my skull. and see this creature, this alien scheme
    Weaker and weaker i get, the pain rushes
    Down my neck, Autopsy's Schreech, as the leader clutches
    What am I! am I an expirement, if so Why
    And why, cant i move, and Why wont you die
    I evily murk As inagurations are stated confirimin im alive
    Whew, I thought i was dead, As i look over n see my son cry
    Help me daddy! Help me Daddy! help me daddy! Help me!
    I run, Yes i Moved! but my son was an image peddily
    Idiots i yell, i got my sences back, It's been a while
    Since ive smiled, but now i feel relive in denile
    Trile? Oh no, the Shadows are coming closer
    I run but am trapped in the cell, like a cave to a boulder
    Moulder? is that you from t.V i see
    The truth is out there My son, It's Easy just believe
    Wtf? is skully doing here, now i really am confused
    This is to wierd, i utterly shake to choose


    Wake Up Daddy! It's Moms first day of work
    Huh?! Im alive, My son begins to Jerk
    Hurry hurry! You have to drive her there
    Ok Bobby, "mommy's doin here hair"
    Betty What a Wierd Dream i had last night
    What Happened? I was trapped Inside
    Nevermind, Just go to work and i'll tell you later
    Ok Honey, You dont want to be late for your first labor

    She turns of the light, I open my eyes, I see the shadows
    Im suddenly striked...
    Help me, I say but she walks away Eager sad thoough





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  6. prophetional

    prophetional hokey muh-fuckin' pokey

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    my vote goes to kon.... i liked both story's, but con's put me there a lil bit better then white's.... more vivid artistry in my opinion... big ups to both though.
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  7. Nebz

    Nebz R.I.P. Point Game

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    Up over Ns's
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  8. Strike2

    Strike2 Man Meets Creator

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    well even tho I am not realy certain bout to whut ends whites verse leads...I'm pretty sure its structured and flowed better...the story line wuz easier and better to follow and made me wanna read on

    so vote white
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  9. Kon$piracy

    Kon$piracy ```````````

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  10. Atheist

    Atheist Storyteller

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    Vote: White.

    Honestly? His story kept me more interested. Kon came more predictable and a lot of his shit seemed missing. I don't know why, and I'm sorry for this short vote, but I just thought it was totally one sided.
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  11. J.Christ

    J.Christ Registered User

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    Vote - White Eyez

    Neither came to well at all. But White held the story better while Kon seemed to struggle pretty bad. Wasn't that great of a battle.

    Straight battle.
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  12. White-Eyez

    White-Eyez Breed of iLLness

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    3-1 thx for the votes homies
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  13. bigKEN

    bigKEN Hoosier Daddy??

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    vote- Kon

    Kon- had good flow, good imagery, emotion could have been better and the story could have been focused more on a better ending than the long, drawn out gunfight

    White-eyes- verse was rather incosistant with flow and complexity. Imagery was alright, but I have no clue what you were trying to tell. The story seemed to have some voids in it.

    vote- Kon

    easier to follow story, better structure, and more enjoyable verse
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  14. White-Eyez

    White-Eyez Breed of iLLness

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    3-2

    thnx for vote
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  15. genitalwartz

    genitalwartz New Member

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    vote-eyez

    i donno...i didnt like the topic of kon's verse that much...which could be the reason im voting against him, because everything seemed so bland.

    whites wasn't bad, but it wasn;t good.

    so i'm giving white the vote

    vote-white
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  16. Gummo

    Gummo New Member

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    either could have used a better twist or somethin, seemed like kon's wasnt as complete as whites, white had a decent verse, nothin spectacular.. but very well good enough to take the win, not a bad battle but surely not one of the best.. nice work tho, keep itup..

    vote: white
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  17. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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    WHITE EYes upsets... and moves on!
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