EAST: 3. Insane Villian and Infinite Truth -VS- 10. Shrug and Street Po

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  1. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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  2. Insanevillian

    Insanevillian STILL in CHARGE

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  3. ConstantFlows

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    Yeah we're done so post and we'll post
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  4. Insanevillian

    Insanevillian STILL in CHARGE

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    BOOM!!!

    The Devil Inside...

    Part 1: Bakersfield, Ca. 1993


    Staring Into My Daughters Eyes I Realize I Taught Her Lies...
    My Fingers Fought Her Thighs Helping Her Practice Her Mothers Cries...
    Another Guy Wouldn't Be First To Leave Her With A Flexed Hymen...
    My Lips Touched Hers, She Giggled, My Dick Wiggled In Excitement...
    She Was Tight Man, But That's What I Expected From A Five Year Old...
    I Muff Dived For Gold, My Tongue Touching Everything Alive, Her Soul...
    She Survived The Whole Five Inches Of It, The Meanest Penis...
    I Was So Proud Of Her, I Even Taught Her How To Clean It...
    I Love Her I Mean It!, But Now I Wish I Would Burn N' Die...
    And Im Glad She Stopped Me, Telling My Wife What She Learned From I...

    Part 2:San Quentin Penitentary 2001

    My Quiverin' Lips Taste Tears, Locked up In This Prison For 8 Years...
    Now im The Fuckin Bitch, Suckin' Dick Even Though I Ain't Queer...
    I'm a Saint Here, At Least You'd Think So The Way My Knees Are Scraped Up...
    If I Could Talk Shit, I'd Probably Have My Asshole Taped Shut...
    "Don't Scrape Slut!" Common Words Word By The Molester in Prison...
    I'm Due To Get Out Next Year But I'd Rather Rest Forever From Livin...
    It's A Given, My Wife And Daughter Hate Me, Why Should I Live?...
    Learned My Lesson, Ill Meet Smiff N' Wesson 4 The Sake Of All Kids...
    Actually I'll Take Off my Wig Here, Hang Myself Out To Dry...
    I Put The Noose Around my Neck Crying, Cuz I'm Bout to Die...
    My Mouth Is Dry As I Prepare To Take Flight Off The Top Bunk...
    Before I Jumped A Guard Screamed, "Hey Guy, U Better Stop Punk!"...
    Drunk Fropm Illusions Of Death I Shouted, "Leave Me Alone Dog!"...
    He Said, "Hey Buddy, U Should At Least Recieve This Phone Call"...
    Above All Other Things, Someone Is Actually Giving Me A Ring?...
    Sweaty Fingertips Clutched The Reciever, What Will Fate Bring?...
    "Hey Daddy!!! After All U To Me, The Lord Has Taught Me Forgiveness...
    Meet Me On Thanksgiving," And Thats When I Decided To Keep Livin'...

    Part 3:Bakersfield Ca. Thanksgiving 2003

    I'm Out Of The Pen, Now I'll Be Able To Redeem My Heart Soaked In Sin...
    I'm Broke Again, But My High From This Is Better Than Any Coke Or Gin...
    I Spoke To HIM, With GOD Behind Me I Knew My Soul Beam N Rally...
    Until I heard A Familiar Voice Beside Me, Screaming In The Alley...
    NOOOO!!! Two Men Tag Teaming Sally, Mistreating Her, Beating Her...
    My Baby Girl Was Gettin' Getting It From Both Ends, More Meat In Her...
    Not While I'm Meeting Her!!!, I Grabbed My Blade By the Hilt...
    I Would Save My Guilt, By Making Sure This Parade was Killt...
    My Knife Spilt Their Blood, I Treated Them Like Old Slave Men...
    These White Cave Men Raping My Daughter?... They're Some Brave Men...
    Their Heads Cracked The Pavement, Then I Wrapped Her In My Arms...
    Liquid Swelled Her Face, And Then She Hit My Like I Slapped Her Moms...
    My Face Mapped Her Palms, " Baby, Please Dont Hit Me Anymore"...
    And Thats When She Thanked Me, For Teaching Her To Be A Whore...

    "Thanks Alot Dad!!! Those Guys weren't Raping Me, Those Were My Customers...!!! I Just Wanted To Show U That I Learned What U Taught me To Do... Now...

    Poof!! Be Gone!
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  5. Shrug

    Shrug Street Poet

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    Shrug/Ben

    Street Poet/ Uncle


    "Ay its ben, meet me at Almaden and Powell dude,
    My dad and I fought about school, he's still shoutin stout rules..."

    His unbadgered friend ran over with astounding speed
    down the street, heart racing at a pounding beat
    dragging around his unshoed bruised feet,
    running being something he doesn't do usually
    slowly tingling his body becomes construed with heat
    showing grace he slowed his pace and crossed the street
    as he approached the place he expected to spot Joey
    he jogged with speed to where he aught to be.
    lost off in thought, the corner of his eye never saw the Honda Odessey
    He flipped and spun, a hit and run,
    Lifes gift is done as the car ditched and gunned
    leaving faster than the arriving haste
    A fine tuned pace faster then Bens mind would race
    As he tried his best to memorize the plate
    ....2-o-o-7-5-s-8

    the next day with his optimism crumbled
    he calls to talk to his uncle with lost ambition bundled
    He answers. his thoughts often fumbled as he described
    what happened that last heated night,
    and asked to see the light of why steve is in a coffin fiending life.

    "Damn boy, the shit some will do, if only I knew how to comfort you...
    can you identify the car or driver so we can thumb them jews?"


    "Yeah I wrote his number down but its in my other pair of pants"

    "Well squash this daring ant, remember if he tries to care, he cant,
    Mistakes should never be left unpunished
    its what the consequence of reckless dumb fun is
    and though its something none would wish
    i was in a similar situation as a young dumb bitch"

    "What happened if you don't mind me asking?"

    "A time of life i was blindly basking in wild, free actions
    specifically car looting with your dad as watch
    one night I found a brand new jag still hot
    it was badly parked, unlocked with the keys inside
    being the smart ass I was i felt free to ride,
    basically inclined, I even pressured Pete to drive
    I had gloves but your dad never seemed to mind
    The car was so much fun in our detouring trip
    we began arguing about returning it
    until our disagreement caused a friday bind
    on highway nine as a light post made our crime wave shine
    we ditched the car, unscratched stupendously
    neglecting the fact there was only no evidence of ME
    I deserved the wrap, but i never manned up and defended Pete
    so contend this cheat by seeking justice endlessly"

    Then Ben raced to the Pig Pen to give them the plates and description
    a conniption encouraged by advice from his dad's vice and conviction

    "the guilty will get their due sentance" said the booming leutentents head
    "But we need evidence before having it presented Ben'
    I wanted this case to crack in so with abrasive action
    I began to explain what happened.

    I was lounging when my door frame starts tappin.
    the police made themselves known and felt
    reluctantly I opened my home to them
    figuring everything was going swell
    just some questions about how I consoled young Ben
    my bright days are over and my stars are lit
    My nephew claims I mauled and killed an honest kid
    his best friend created the dents on my cars front lip
    I knew Pete had borrowed it, but instead I took karma's sorrowed bliss
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  6. MeNTiLL PoET

    MeNTiLL PoET Nahlidge

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    [hide]Vote - Villain & Truth

    I liked both drops. Just came down to personal opinion. Villain & Truth`s just hit me more. A fucked up ass story. And I thought the message was deep. Both were well written. I thought Truth & Villain`s flowed more smoothly story wise tho also. [/hide]
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  7. SteveThaGreat

    SteveThaGreat Zeus

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    damn...

    insane villain and infinite- your piece was absolutely incredible in my eyes. verse of the week worthy. i had to re-read the first segment like 5 times cause i couldn't believe what i was reading. the flow was perfect, the story line kept me captivated from the first line throughout and i was thoroughly impressed with virtually every concept of this piece. great job.



    shrug and street po- your piece was cool. some of the wording seemed forced for example "daring ant" is just akward. it's a weird adjective to use with ant because it seems like the metaphor is complimenting and insulting the subject simultaneously, that's wasn't a really big deal but it was just an example...


    anyway, my vote is for insane villain and infinite truth


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  8. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    [hide]I thought Insane and Truth took this easliy....that piece was amazing...the story had me buggin...and the flow and content was on point surpraisingly the whole way thru....it seem to capture an essense and tell a believeable story....cold blooded

    shrug and po to be real honest I couldnt really get into your piece...I TRIED believe me I tried....I'm more of a poet head and you guys had the more poetic side to the battle but I just couldnt get into your piece...I dunno....I dont even remember anything from it while at the same time the images from insane truths piece is vivid

    feel me?[/hide]

    vote will also be up for discussion -Pent
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  9. Dikembe Mutombo

    Dikembe Mutombo New Member

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    [hide]well....

    shrug and street po had a good idea with this story about the stolen jag and the kid dyin and all that fun stuff, it was a pretty clever twist to the topic they chose. Some of the rhyme schemes were a little stretched and I had to go over some lines a couple times to make them read better to myself. Content wise, not bad...good effort

    IV and Inf Truth obviously have worked well together before, I could hardly tell the difference between the 2 writers within the story. I honestly found it to be quite cliche'd in some parts, particularly the dude wantin to off himself, although I can't blame him for being a prison bitch lol. Anyways, I like the twist at the end, the girl whorin herself out because her Daddy taught her to be a whore. It kinda went quickly, missing some key details but it was a good more consistent and better structured piece.

    vote = IV and Inf Truth[/hide]

    vote may not count, will be up for discussion -Pent
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  10. Atheist

    Atheist Storyteller

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    [hide]Insane and Infinite:
    Well it's obvious this piece was just by Insane only... I know that because I've read it before. However, you chose the right week to recycle because as from next week, or in the upcoming weeks, recycling is going to be no more. so fuck it, let's just talk about the verse. I thought it was pretty decent, and I always love how you divide your stories into 'chapters'. You move effortlessly from scene to scene, mainly because of your crisp flow and, albeit slightly basic, rhyme scheme. It all fits nicely together. The story itself was okay, I thought the way you worded the italic ending was a bit camp, but other than that, I enjoyed the direction you took it in, and it was a flip on the 'like father ,like son' cliche, since this piece focused on a father and his daughter.

    I'm Out Of The Pen, Now I'll Be Able To Redeem My Heart Soaked In Sin...
    I'm Broke Again, But My High From This Is Better Than Any Coke Or Gin...
    I Spoke To HIM, With GOD Behind Me I Knew My Soul Beam N Rally...
    Until I heard A Familiar Voice Beside Me, Screaming In The Alley...
    NOOOO!!! Two Men Tag Teaming Sally, Mistreating Her, Beating Her...
    My Baby Girl Was Gettin' Getting It From Both Ends, More Meat In Her...


    Decent, but the last couplet could've been worded much better. However, as this was recycled, I'm guessing it's slightly old. I don't remember exactly when I read it, but it must have been some time ago.

    Shrug and Street:
    Wow, first thing I noticed about this piece was the flow. It was absolutely fantastic and fluid, and just read off the tongue so easily. Also, the content was pretty damn good as well. The way you went from dialogue to narration and back again was amazing. You both changed up effortlessly, making this a delight to read. I found the story gripping, and I really liked the idea of karma that you included in the end. I also enjoyed how the son was getting a bit of revenge on his uncle for not admitting his role in theor car jacking. That was a nice touch.

    lost off in thought, the corner of his eye never saw the Honda Odessey
    He flipped and spun, a hit and run,
    Lifes gift is done as the car ditched and gunned
    leaving faster than the arriving haste
    A fine tuned pace faster then Bens mind would race
    As he tried his best to memorize the plate
    ....2-o-o-7-5-s-8


    and...

    A time of life i was blindly basking in wild, free actions
    specifically car looting with your dad as watch
    one night I found a brand new jag still hot
    it was badly parked, unlocked with the keys inside
    being the smart ass I was i felt free to ride,
    basically inclined, I even pressured Pete to drive
    I had gloves but your dad never seemed to mind
    The car was so much fun in our detouring trip
    we began arguing about returning it
    until our disagreement caused a friday bind
    on highway nine as a light post made our crime wave shine


    Both were standout sections. Overall, this was a great read, and I'd like to thank both of you for showing up. However, I believe that Shrug and Street took this one because, all in all, they had a more gripping story; it was fuller, more polished, and was entertaining to read. Insane had a nice verse too, but I just thought he could've had a better ending because when I came to it, it was a bit of an anti-climax. Very enjoyable match up here though, fellas, and I enjoyed reading it. Good work.[/hide]

    the fellas above need to hide their votes.
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  11. Insanevillian

    Insanevillian STILL in CHARGE

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    i voted on all four battles
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  12. Annihilation

    Annihilation CLAUS HOUSE

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    IV

    That shit was hilarious

    She Survived The Whole Five Inches Of It, The Meanest Penis...
    I Was So Proud Of Her, I Even Taught Her How To Clean It...

    and the meat in her while im meeting her line i fell on the floor haha, flow and scheme and the creativity and writing were off the hook, funny, predictable but an enjoyable ride nonetheless.

    Shrug Po

    this was alright but pretty predictable and compared to IV it was a simple flow and scheme and entertainment wise it was alright but i found myself forcing to finish it and uninterested in neither character nor plot, it failed to grip me.

    IV's verse had better scheme, flow, was more enjoyable, and even tho both were predictable and each well written, IV's held my attention and provided more entertainment with alot of laughs.

    Vote: IV (IT show nextime u absentee fuck)
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  13. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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    IV, nice shit man. I heard this was recycled, but regardless of that, it was well written and moved nicely with the narration and transitions from sequence to sequence. The crime of passion scheme was thought out and not just placed in weirdly, but built up with character development. Good shit, nice verse man. I guess you had to do this round by yourself.... still did a good job though

    Shurg and Street, this was well detailed and the narration was nice as hell. The dialogue was well done and gave great character development between the two and the car incidents faced by both. Flow was good and the creativity was on point too. This was nice, would of liked to see both of you in the league cuz this well portrayed and you're both obviously good rap story tellers.


    Gotta go with IV on this one with a more interesting story.


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  14. Pent uP

    Pent uP I'd Like to Fight Ten Men

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    IV and Inf Truth Win
    try not recycling next time buddy
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