E-Stablishment Vs Writters block crew Battle 1 of 2...

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  1. Oracle3301

    Oracle3301 New Member

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    E-stab Vs Writers Block

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    best of 5 for the crew battle....wins
    or first crew to 3 wins....



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    J Rocca Vs madpoet
    Topical Battle


    Rstl rules apply...
    First to 5 votes wins...
    PICK YOUR TOPIC HERE

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  2. Madpoet

    Madpoet why is this so short....

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    Check..I am postin in a min
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  3. Madpoet

    Madpoet why is this so short....

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    1. you've lost your memory, you wake up in a small room on the floor,

    there's
    an abundance of candles burning, you can practically taste the wax

    and sulfur,
    you stand up to look out the window to only become afraid cause there

    stairing
    back at you is total darkness, expand...


    Darkness inhabits my eyes to pervade lies
    Cries fell hollow and I grew to despise
    Everything and from it all I took my tax
    Awoken and found myself shook..wit a taste of wax
    Sulphur on my tounge stung -N- my ears rung
    The jury was out on this one and when I finally spun
    Around I realized I was layin on a dirty bed
    head feelin like a ton of lead -N- majorly underfed
    Blood trickled from my finger I was in a daze
    A phase where the haze seemed to go on for days
    Endless plays of torment then I saw a window
    It was the only one though so I approached it slow
    Tippey toed my way over for a sneak peek
    But what I would see would leave my knees weak
    Nothingness for miles..no muscle strength in my jaw
    Goose bumps raised on my flesh..thuis was gettin raw
    The blood from my finger flowed much more
    Showed more gore as type O flowed on the floor
    Fear sunk into my chest and festered
    It grew near and became a pest and pestered
    Sequestered to become one with my lonely soul
    Looked into the dark hole for all the answers it stole
    Heads gonna roll when I figure this out
    Someone payin a toll for what this about
    I started to should but then got scared
    My heart was bared and my nostrils flared
    I hear a voice 'MUAHAHAH YOUR GOING INSAAAAANE!!!"
    "cHAIN EVENTS OF THE SANE..YOUR GOING TO KNOW PAIN"
    "WELCOME TO YOUR HOME MINION..WELCOME TO MY LAND"
    Then I felt a pain..making it unable for me to stand
    The upper hand went to the man I could not see
    "And just Praytell may I ask do you want from me"
    "YOU..YOU ARE HERE FOREVER..YOU ARE NEVER LEAVING"
    "YOU GET TO SEE BLACK SPACE TURN INTO YOUR FAMILY GRIEVEING"
    Decievingly I thought he spoke but it was to be true
    What did I do to you?" but even before I knew
    A cackle and laugh carried a vibe and evil wrath
    It seperated the room in half -N- made a path
    It leads to candles burning even more bright
    The voice said "BETTER START LEARNING TO LOVE THE NIGHT"
    "YOU WILL PAY FOREVER FOR WHAT YOU DID"
    "FOR GLORIOUSLY MURDERING AND RAPING THAT LITTLE KID"
    "BUT YOU WONT REMEMBER WHY THAT'S WHAT MAKES IT SO SWEET"
    "IN THE END WE ALL HAVE A MAKER TO MEET,BEAT,UNSEAT AND DEFEAT"
    "NOW YOU CAN BE WELCOMED TO AN ETERNAL HELL"
    My life was then tossed down an infernal wishing well
    The blood on my finger a reminder I pay tribute
    Pay the cost to the ultimate boss of Ill refute
    My name is J Rocca and this is could be you..gory
    A murderous tale with no glory..but at least it told a story...
    "
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  4. J Rocca

    J Rocca New Member

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    Envy-a feeling of grudging admiration and desire to have something possessed by another


    The Voicemail​


    YOU HAVE ONE NEW MESSAGE………

    yes, hello….how you doing…..BRO how’s it been
    see you’ve made another sequel of how to fuck up my LIFE again
    with a star CAST, and you sitting in a seat entitled “Director”
    while I’m in the BACKGROUND yelling “cut”, my eyes trying to catch hers
    but when I finally do it’s not quite the same, can’t IMAGINE HOW I FEEL
    had her hooked and sealed until you came into the deal
    oh this shit is real, this is not some KIDDIE prank
    so take notice of my warning and cancel out of this date
    or your fate, which rest at my HANDS, will reluctantly stand
    don’t test me or death will be homeward bound for the palm of my hands
    like a game of truth or dare, the outcome is uneven, never fair
    so I dare you to see the truth, double dare you to meet her there

    The Date​


    Well it’s been about a week now, and tonight’s the big night
    Caterpillars evolved into butterflies, taking me into flight
    Parents ecstatic that finally I’ am dating, pops tells me he’s proud
    Moms all hugs and kisses,she walks in, the house increasingly grows loud
    We step out, grin on my face….heartbeat matching my pace
    She glances over at me and says I know this quiet little place
    Dazed and confused, I go anyway…..my armpits start to slowly get wet
    Turns out my night of passion would be one I’d soon regret
    Want to forget, I look at my phone and the light pattern blinks are repeated
    She reaches over for it and I hear, one message deleted
    Wonder who it was?, oh well they will probably call me back
    Drop her off at home and then hurry to my shack
    Smelling like pussy, I pray that nobodies at home
    Pull my keys out of my pocket and all I feel is a blow to the dome

    The Revelation

    “Wake up you bitch, it’s time to meet your maker”, ringing through my head
    scrambling for memories of what happened, “Am I dead”
    “No your far from that, and no you didn’t have too much to drink”
    “I left you the option of life or death, and you chose the wrong link”

    “What are you talking about, I really am clueless, Oh lord in heaven”
    “the signs are in the message on your phone there was seven”
    see in the game of LIFE, you couldn’t IMAGINE HOW I FEEL

    always the KIDDIE in the BACKGROUND, you know the deal
    remember the CAST you put on my HAND, it was you and no other
    and what hurt me even worse was the fact your my BROTHER

    What why are you doing this, i always have treated you nice
    truth or dare, was i ever existing at anypoint of your life
    TRUTH, i always cared for you, i'd be empty without you in my life
    well answer this for me, how does it feel to get laid out not once but twice
    8:00 NEWS:

    In local news today a local teen by the name of Jaquan Brown was found shot two times in the head at a local park. Police say that his murder was a very puzzling one b/c the victim seemed to have known his killer. The case is still being investigated at the current time. If you or anyone has any information that might help call 404-312-0879.....
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  5. J Rocca

    J Rocca New Member

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    uppin for votes.....
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  6. Madpoet

    Madpoet why is this so short....

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    Uppin fior votes..
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  7. J Rocca

    J Rocca New Member

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    rise bitches
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  8. The Original

    The Original New Member

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    nice drop fam
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  9. J Rocca

    J Rocca New Member

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    thanks uppin
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  10. WarLoKK

    WarLoKK www.espbeats.com

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    This was pretty coo.. I'm not much of a topical head, but I gave this one a read here..

    Poet:
    I liked your style.. Definitely something that flows easy to audio, the flow was on point.. Could use a bit more multis - rhyme a few words together at the end instead of just one or two.. Not bad though feelin it, loving the story..

    Rocca:
    Coo shit too.. Could've been longer.. The 8:00 news was kinda corny though.. The conversation part was dope, but I didnt really like the story.. I didnt get into it as much as I did Poet's story..

    Nice shit from both of you though.. But simply, Poet kept me more interested in his story..

    Vote = Mad Poet
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  11. *uLTiMaTe*

    *uLTiMaTe* Got Beats?

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    Jrocca-
    your verse had chapters that meshed together perfectly... But.... (theres always a but)....... I couldn't grasp your flow the whole time.... evertime i got into it..... it became uncomprehendable........sorry!

    Madpoet-
    Your verse was Loooong but if you would have wrote a bad story i would have had to say [fu]!!! BUT DAMN you wrote a great verse that was like you.........weird!!! BUT you got a talent therefore..........

    Vote=madpoet

    GOOD JOB BOTH.......i think yall should rematch just for the hell of it........
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  12. Ion Metatron

    Ion Metatron I Punch Faces 4 Fun

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    J Rocca= I was Feelin' that Story even though the Flow Fell off at some points I looked at it as a rhyming Story because not every one is a Ion Metatron wit the flow :) But the story was Ill cause i was wondering how the brother would be envyin' the other. The end was a Great conclusion to the Begining & I felt like I finished watching a Quick Movie of sorts. The only thing I can say that I didn't like is tha fact that I kinda Expected that the Brother would do something to the other so it kinda Spoiled the twist at the end..

    Mad Poet= Story started off ILL.. Nice Vocab ILL Literay tecniques really Brought me into that little cell with the Character... the Story Developed even more in the Middle & the flow was rather FullFilling..
    Yet..(And there's always a Yet:)).. You Ended tha Story EXTREMELY poorly..
    How'd tha Charactor wind up in Hell?... Who Killed him?... Why'd He rape the kid?... Why doesn't he Remember any of it?... All those questions Plagued me after your verse..

    Vote=J rocca

    Every story has a Begining, Middle & a End.. The Begining should Set up every event that will happen to effectively Ingage the MIDDLE which is used to reach the Pivot point(Climax) in the Story & the End Wraps up ALL loose ends & events that took place in the story. With out a Good Ending your story is like the 2nd Matrix movie.. Unfinished.

    Thx for the read tho fellas :)
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  13. J Rocca

    J Rocca New Member

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    2-1 poet, we need more voters like this...lol
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  14. Madpoet

    Madpoet why is this so short....

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    So you say..
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  15. speak easy

    speak easy Tits dont hop they bounce

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    vote= madpoet
    DO I HONESTLY HAVE TO EXPLAIN MYSELF........
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  16. J Rocca

    J Rocca New Member

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    yes you do
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  17. Madpoet

    Madpoet why is this so short....

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    LOL.....3-1 uppin
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  18. Madpoet

    Madpoet why is this so short....

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    Rocca I enjoyed your verse no lie, but this go round mine was better...
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    vote=madpoet
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  20. Noib Da Mutt

    Noib Da Mutt New Member

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    wtf@this old ass shit...
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