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  1. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    When I lay and think, in my bed at night,
    the day you'll arrive, seems nowhere in sight.
    I toss and I turn, dreaming of you,
    opening my eye's... checking if my dream came true.
    It didn't, again, and a tear starts to roll,
    weeping quietly... my pillow I hold.

    Many sleepless nights I've prayed for you, my love.
    God touched my soul from heaven above
    He's answered my prayers for my bride to be.
    I've never felt this lucky, God did this for me.
    That's a question I asked each and every night.

    He must think your special, Joy, and I know he's right.
    No other has made me feel so complete,
    my whole life was lived, just so we could meet.
    All these thoughts and more going through my head.
    I fall asleep not worrying, but dreaming of you... instead
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  2. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    "my whole life was lived, just so we could meet."

    That's true, we live for someone and someone lives for us (to all those >> KNOW THIS!) I felt as if this was more, like you had asked her to marry you and she said yes? That's just something I got from this, that it was an 'engagement' type piece, that you could write, after you have just been labeled a 'fiance'. Anyway, a great approach of 'love', yet work on imagery and metaphors a bit more. It helps to expand your feelings and definition of the real meaning you're trying to get at. My blessings..
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  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    decent piece, easy to read. Emotions were strong and to the point. Nice job. And welcome to the realm, hope to see more from you

    one luv
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  4. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    very sweet, a lot of emotion in this....had some nice really heart touching lines in it. very nice..i liked it.
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  5. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    nice lil piece u got here...rhyming was nice...heartfelt piece...

    UP
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  6. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    Stuck a bit too rigidly to the rhyme scene i think...

    ...but saying that, it really dannae matter. It was a very heartfelt piece that i would say had a great personal depth to it. I dig ya niche, most def...

    ..resp..
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  7. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    welcome to the realm! :) nice piece... hope u stick around!
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  8. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    Welcome To The Realm, And I Hope U Drop More Pieces...this Was Very Good ..it Mades Sense And The Wordplay Was Good...very Original And Real

    ~keep Writin So I Can Be Readin~
    ~one Love~
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  9. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    thank you soo much everyone thank you awesome board and i will stick around this board seems awesome peaceee
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  10. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    yes stick around i enjoyed this poem ^
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  11. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    thank you man i love this place thank you so much
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