Dreaming in an Illusion

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  1. OldSkoolPervert

    OldSkoolPervert Who is Marcy?

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    Living in a dreamworld...
    This is my home
    A place where reality doesnt exist
    But why banish reality?
    Because my reality is not the way I like to live


    Shady people...
    Numerous critcisms...
    Depression...
    Torment...
    Deception...
    Closed mindedness...
    Ignorance...


    In my dreams, I am happy
    In my dreams, reality doesnt exist
    Reality is so harsh on my soul I dont like living it
    I dont want to live it


    I want to dream
    where I can be in a world of complete ecstasy
    No troubles...
    No pain...
    Just happiness...


    Some people see the dreamworld as an illusion
    Not me...
    I live it every day of my life
    Sometimes reality takes over,
    but only when I want it to


    Lately, the dreamworld has been my tranquility
    from all of the problems that go on here
    Until this changes, I will remain in the dreamworld


    I will keep my mind and eyes open for anything that may come along
    But I will shut out the torture until it stops
    Only then will I return to reality
    Peaceful...
    Loving...
    Caring Soul
    test
  2. amille

    amille New Member

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    word

    i peeped ya shit
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  3. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    this was a unique piece definetley....looks like ur are starting out nicely...keep w riting....~one love~
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  4. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    damn babe this was a good one

    In my dreams, I am happy
    In my dreams, reality doesnt exist
    Reality is so harsh on my soul I dont like living it
    I dont want to live it
    ^^those are my fav lines....reminds me of when you say my life isnt reality...well now you know i dont wanna see reality...great piece though
    love you babe [heart]
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  5. OldSkoolPervert

    OldSkoolPervert Who is Marcy?

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  6. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    like mocha said, a very unique piece. Loving your work

    one luv
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  7. j$crILLa

    j$crILLa ~$crillVille~

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    i gotta agree it was unique and i liked how u structured it... nice work.. holla
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  8. marc antony

    marc antony It's all about da ass....

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    usually i like to quote closers because sometimes that is the only ill thing in a poem......

    you had a nice stanza here.....VVVV


    Some people see the dreamworld as an illusion
    Not me...
    I live it every day of my life
    Sometimes reality takes over,
    but only when I want it to

    ^^^^^that was my highlight....the wording of the poem was simple but the concept was far from it....the title was nice......

    as far as i can see...the only thing that needs to be worked on is the wording of the poem....other than that it was a nice concept and a good read.......

    so continue to write............

    and work on your wording......pce..
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  9. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    Uppin for my baby
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  10. Rekar

    Rekar Old Glory

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    Thanks but i got it
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  11. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    fine....... :attitude:
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  12. Rekar

    Rekar Old Glory

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    lol....Blah
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  13. illpoetical

    illpoetical raising the bar everyday

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    this is good i like it
    1ne
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  14. Rekar

    Rekar Old Glory

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    Thank you
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  15. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    I Was Dreaming Last Night And I Woke Up To Realize I Was Sleeping
    Tight Peace Girllll, Watch Out For My Pieces Dropping To A Computer Near You
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  16. IvyG

    IvyG New Member

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    "Reality is so harsh on my soul I dont like living it "

    I couldn't have said it better myself... I really like how you structered this as well... awesome piece
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  17. Rekar

    Rekar Old Glory

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    1) im not a girl....


    2) thanks for replying to my stuff
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  18. Rekar

    Rekar Old Glory

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    Uppin....
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  19. eatemup

    eatemup New Member

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    no doubt a very tight piece you have here liked it dope drop
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  20. SNC

    SNC ~ Untouchable~

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    I loved this piece because it describes how I feel. Im a pisces so I rather live in my dreams than deal with reality, most times anyway. But this was hot, keep it up
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