double dose of random topped with a topic

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  1. T.R.C....

    T.R.C.... New Member

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    the first one is somethin new i wrote the second and third i posted on here they got like 50 plus views but no comments and they goin onto the second page so they might not ever get feedback so i figured id repost them


    try not to be bitter but i'll get ya bouncin like tigger
    and if you object to that well you can suck my dick sir
    or ma'am possibly both its hard to tell with all the chronic i chronically smoke
    illogically my logics revoked a result of my not bein properly dosed
    unconsciously dope i spew rhymes without thinkin like rap tourettes
    im cutthroat only cuz i'll bring an axe to your neck
    my flow is gourmet slice through flesh like it was warm clay
    rappin isnt a hobby its a forte so i never ever drop a forced spray
    in theory im ethereal if you dont fear me though then ya not thinkin clearly so
    i'll dip you radioactive waste til you have an erie glow
    dont know what that'd accomplish but if you lived it'd be a miracle
    so here we go another set of relentless rhymes in which ive invested time
    and designed to not only sound ill but to bend the mind quick freeze the frame
    look close ive got a seamless game gettin under ya skin like i breeched a vein
    about to blow believe im primed to ya know this'll spread faster than the swine flu
    lyrically ive got a fine brew never stop these rhymes cuz im not inclined to
    thinkin im through yeah but only cuz i got six lines of ten fives to do


    my lyrics are cause for the floors to be populated with jaws
    an walls stained with brains from a flow without any flaws
    an i hardly pause to take a breath or give my lines any thoughts
    rhymes so cold they'll get you covered in frost but dont sweat it forget it
    call the paramedics slit their throats snatch some meds and ingest it
    an yes im advocatin all the shit that im sayin abuse perscription pills kill a cat an fillet it
    im a sick individual my actions are criminal my conscience unconscionable
    so fuck you is my response if you think im responsible im lyrically gifted my spits are pheonominal
    hate on my shit man thats comical my rhymes always hit like electric shocks
    an the flow falls into place like fuckin tetris blocks so yes im expectin props
    shouts of respect for this excellent drop an dont pretend that its not thats a fatal deed
    so just shove the criticism in ya ass and plug it up with some anal beads
    fuckin shit this profanity is damnin me its beyond absurd this kind of insanity
    but dont panic see i just do what the voices in my head are demandin of me
    not above punchin a bitch square in the mouth til my fist is stuck in her lips
    but enough of this shit im losin my edge ima go get me somethin to sniff


    whenever i take a look outside shit seems to be hopeless
    then i crank up a beat and its bring back some focus
    i just try not notice an hide from a world in turmoil
    where most will turn away without the slightest concern for you
    we supposed to be civilized but theres nothin civil in the way we live our lives
    priorities shifted stick to your own business an stay the hell out of mine
    of course thats a wish not based in reality not the direction we're movin
    come on i mean who are we foolin its too late for a plan to bring about a solution
    too many consumed with fears never figure the big picture in a million years
    guess nobody cares that intelligence is rampant but wisdom is scarce
    im not sayin nothin new just givin my shares i'll be done before long
    just dont think im bein cynical cause i truly pray that im wrong


    http://board.rapmusic.com/open-mic/1238180-closer-death.html
    http://board.rapmusic.com/open-mic/1238151-how-did-get.html
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  2. dsp2k5

    dsp2k5 Dime Sack Pimp

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    well ... nicely done once i caught on to it ... very nice homie ... good job
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  3. T.R.C....

    T.R.C.... New Member

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    thanks man
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  4. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    lots and lots of heat.. fav line in first verse was

    "possibly both its hard to tell with all the chronic i chronically smoke
    illogically my logics revoked a result of my not bein properly dosed"

    nice wordplay
    test
  5. cram oremor

    cram oremor New Member

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    you are right about random but I LIKE it! Nice job bro.
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  6. T.R.C....

    T.R.C.... New Member

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    well the third one isnt random but thanks for the feedback
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