"Dont Take Me Lightly"

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  1. Phene

    Phene High Off Life, LLC.

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    I posted the remix online before i posted the original lol.

    So here goes the original...done late 2004....
    #3 off of Rehabilitation

    http://www.soundclick.com/phene

    & the new mixtape We Got Next (Hosted By Medd-afore) will be out in a few weeks....
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  2. Rakuseki

    Rakuseki The Disgruntled Negro

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  3. Erattic

    Erattic New Member

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    listenen... cool beat choice im feelen it... and ur voice fitsa it well... nice come in... flow is straight.... but it gets kinda boring after a while but ir def on point... delivery is coo

    lyrics are cool... couldnt realy catch anything realy dope or quotable...

    but this track was dope man.... keep it up

    return the favour:

    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=919076
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  4. MC B-Dee

    MC B-Dee Guest

    filled wif ill punchlines...nice shit phene...
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  5. Drazy

    Drazy What You Lookin At Punk?

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    Ayy.. That shit was nice... Jadakiss - Checkmate Beat? ... You were RAW on it...really pulled it off... Hook was great.. nice n catchy... Tight lyrics... Can't front... thats good hip-hop... Holla Back

    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=917008
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  6. Elias_Returns

    Elias_Returns New Member

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    Yea this joint is hot. I've heard you before but that shit was a while ago. The hook sounded hot and Im feelin the lines, You have a pretty nice flow. The hook was hot cause it sounded like a switch up and i'm feelin how you came through in the 2nd verse right after the 1st one cause it just felt like a switch then switch back, Very smooth and for some reason I liked the switch up cause it blended well. Overall the joint was hot though I was feeling it, you got some nice punches 2 and the jadakiss beat complimented you.

    I didnt even notice it was checkmate til I read it from the guy who replied before me but I knew it was a LOX beat. Hot shit though and nice pick. Keep up the good work man and stay up.
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  7. E. Fate

    E. Fate Guest

    No, it would be 50 Cent - "Animal", but Jada used it for his diss, its from a 50 track though
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  8. DjayCasper

    DjayCasper Eh Fuck It.

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    NO
    it would be Big Noyyd Of Infamous Mobb - Air It Out which came out years before 50 got his hands on the beat



    buuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuttttttttttttttttt

    nice track phene i loved the whole album man
    waitin on the next one




    wonder if that one joint ever got finished? lol. oh well
    g'luck wit all the future plans as well.
    nice drop
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  9. DjayCasper

    DjayCasper Eh Fuck It.

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  10. BlackGhost

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    That plaque line made me chuckle

    I don't really like the beat but you rode it nicely which made it tolerable. Sound real focused on this. Looks like you got way better since Sr was up.

    Good track, homeboi
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  11. KamikazeLyricist

    KamikazeLyricist The Kamikaze Lyricist

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    listenin ... I like this beat ..
    flow was nice on this ... ryme scheme is tight in this ...
    plaques bad teeth haha word nice line ...
    Hook was aight not bad ...
    the verses were the best thing in this ...
    dope track !!!
    yo hit up mine

    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=913630
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  12. phenom2002

    phenom2002 GET YA MAFUCKIN HANDS UP!

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    destroyed it
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  13. Spectata

    Spectata No oustide links

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    Kind of a CL Smooth style... (I like CL Smooth...)

    Flow was on point the syncopated end of each phrase on the and of beat 3 of every line... took away from the Head Knod appeal of this jam...

    The hook could've been a little hotter homey... HOOKS are supposed to be something that IMMEDIATELY sticks in people's heads... they need to be EASY to memorize and spit along with the song (hence the term "hook")...

    The "celery" spit was FLAMES kid... love the way that came off...

    The actual content of the verses were well penned man...

    Rework the B side of the hook... and you may want to revisit the part A of the hook after that...

    Also, let some of those lines in the verse actually fall on beat 4 so the listener is more compelled to rock with you ...

    just my 2 cents...

    MAD potential in you man...stay at it kid...

    props given...
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  14. Higher Rhymes

    Higher Rhymes Active Member

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    always enjoy listening to ur tracks

    nice work, although i like the remix beat better same stuff lol its coo dawg
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  15. Phene

    Phene High Off Life, LLC.

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    Word thanks for the feedback ya'll...
    Preciate' it.
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  16. Dizem

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    Damn. Phene doing his thing. I never liked this beat but you made it work man. Nice lines in there man. You kept it real hype on this
    Dope shit
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  17. Phene

    Phene High Off Life, LLC.

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    thx holmes
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  18. Phene

    Phene High Off Life, LLC.

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    Up.
    The Boy Phene got play @ the rucker tournament this past weekend. Holla..
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  19. B!tchPlease

    B!tchPlease New Member

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    this is most certainly a winner...no doubt about it....when u got a nice flow everything else is cake....& that hook is killah, u freaked that way nice...im diggin it....push that mixtape hard....get it out there....it would be damn sham if it was stuck in the confines of cyberspace

    return the feedback playa, let me know what u think 'bout my joint
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  20. Phene

    Phene High Off Life, LLC.

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    haha word^^ good lookin out.
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