Do you write? Do you like reading writing?

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  1. illipsis

    illipsis Ill Collector

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    Been a minute since anyone posted in this thread so I figured I'd make myself write something again

    Ill youth spitting this
    The sun spills through my mildew chrysalis
    The butterfly effect is still too intricate
    It's that type of hubris that killed you Icarus
    Sensitive pussies, y'all are still too clitoris
    I've never been shook of no degenerate rookie
    Without the presence to push me
    Spinning guilt through innocence
    A battle of words and I am still too literate
    They said that I should be
    Isolated in mental wards, taking a metal sword
    On my way to the record store
    Now ask yourself is that a blade or a metaphor?
    It's just Satan taking angels to Heaven's door
    It's just me with your dame in a pretzel form
    Her labia getting warm while I'm making her forget
    That some lame was ever born
    What the fuck did I expect?
    One word becomes an earthquake; butterfly effect

    Butterfly effect, this is gutter dialect
    I'm a tempest you a zephyr in the summer time at best
    See nobody I respect stayed squandered in obscurity
    Wandering tourists in want of honour for security
    I've gone to university, found it asinine
    Now I'm passing time watching God for his infirmities
    Freeze frame while he's making some nachos
    Like fuck a cheap blade my cheese grater's a Hanzo
    These lames see that my peace game is just awful
    One hit'll orbit them, they can meet aliens pronto
    No sidekicks, faced with the greatest odds
    I'm strafing a major squad
    Til they're basically Jason Todd
    And if you're thinking Jason Todd ain't dead, good
    I'm white as fuck and truthfully this shit never read hood
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  2. EmceeGoddess

    EmceeGoddess Disgruntled Man

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    i started this hanzo shit
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  3. Type_Z_480AZ

    Type_Z_480AZ youtube.com/typezmusic

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    Heres somethin I wrote yesterday...started off as a random verse, ended in some battle shit cuz i felt like it lol

    My rhymes got the mind of a war vet/
    applying the force of the evil thoughts inside to come say hi to your doorstep/
    I wasn’t like this before, it derived from a source that required a normal life To be formed by sleeping behind a wall of piling corpses./
    No door to walk out, I was lost inside forever/
    a mind built on the foundation of all the body’s I dismembered/
    Its Raining blood of the victims and I’m still caught inside the weather/
    Ive lost my mind in in the knots ive tied from the string honest lives I’ve severed./
    I untie the knots but its still shows as a flatline/
    The hearts of those that I capsized/
    Are Like an Ocean without tide/
    No blue moons can put the buzz back in that life./
    My rhymes got A psychotic disorder/
    With a mind of a god and a body like a bionic transformer/
    So Thoughts come off as optimus when they brought his life back into order/
    So I might snap like a quarter-back and see live shots coming toword ya./
    Why stop with the torture?!/
    A psy op is in order/
    When I walk like Cyclops with eyes off to the side to catch this guy off in the corner/
    Pull out a nice saw, not the kind yall would slice open a board with/
    Im talkin the gun so big I brought a tripod to support it!/
    Take out targets with no emotion like im posted On a shooting range/
    Finger always on the trigger like I Own a Call of duty game/
    If each round here was a sequel then you know what ima do today/
    Im winning all 3 of them so now you can call me lui kang.
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  4. Ravenous510

    Ravenous510 Well-Known Member

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    Ayo....everything you guys have been posting is bananas...

    Illipsis always posts some dope shit...

    I just posted this in the RBL against this kid T.a.C.;

    See, T’s a weak rookie; he’ll fold-
    Cops apply pressure - he’ll drop a dime - a solid guy? Never!
    This cheap pussy’ll roll!
    On that funny shit - so T.A.C. couldn’t see a key
    If he was runnin’ with E-A-Ski, but if he plays me -
    I’ll be soft and debonair like Fred Astaire ‘til tempers flare and shots from weapons air
    Metal tears and flesh is pared ‘til he drops and his death’s declared
    The ghost rider - I rode fire - you’re lost in my penance stare
    Hold it now - slow it down
    I said the ghost writer - I wrote fire - you’re lost when my pen is dared!
    See, this man’s never seen in sessions
    ‘Cuz his morphemes are morphine
    Mine? Amphetamine injections!
    I spit acetylene - shit, my pedigree’s impressive
    Pinky dick thinks he’s sick? - It better be infectious!
    See, this gelatinous kid’s a masochist – or a mindless simpleton – tryin’ to strip a win from Ravenous!?
    I dead emcees in seconds!
    It's endgame and my pen’s lacin' his wack style -
    There ain’t a doubt – my torture tactics’ll lay him out like floor ceramics
    And the sensation is TACtile!
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  5. SiegeSupreme

    SiegeSupreme Well-Known Member

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    The Reaper enchained...
    I speak to the grave, fuck what believers would say
    The type to call Fresco a faggot & The Saurus Pete to his face
    I epitomize the heathens you hate...
    I'm a demon, deranged, needles & pain, I'm too evil to save
    Peoples are slaves these days, blinded by "trust"...
    ..Or blinded becuz I snapped and took a knife to their mug
    The sight of their blood excites me & heightens the rush
    I'm seeing images in my head - I must be in alliance with Chuck
    These voices frequent-ly speak to me...I've got the devil inside
    Bipolar, seventy sides...I feel like Jekyll & Hyde
    Raise the golden eagle in the air like Mexican pride
    & pull the trigger, never would cry as I tell 'em goodbye...
    I'm not human....I swear to you I was never was normal
    That's why I don't live by the same ethics & morals as the rest of you mortals




    Not done tho'
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  6. EmceeGoddess

    EmceeGoddess Disgruntled Man

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    thats really good if you're like 14-18
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  7. Ravenous510

    Ravenous510 Well-Known Member

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    Don't let EG fuck with you...

    I liked it...it was a good read, and the last 6 bars or so impressed me, tbh...

    Everything from "these voices" on should be considered dope writing, imo...
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  8. DeathProof

    DeathProof Past zooted.

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    random scheme bump =/

    step back n' stagger, Muddy Waters off the honey lager
    Redman the rapper? nah, Red Man the baccer
    chem addict swagger, Stimpaks and Mentats for after
    left handed keg standin', ex-champ of Tapper
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  9. Ravenous510

    Ravenous510 Well-Known Member

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    Just posted this in the RBL against some kid named "Ah Swoop Pen", (ass woopin'...stupid ass name, I know)...

    Shit, I’m back to assert dominance!
    If you lack the assured confidence
    And wit to master your words – stop, desist!
    ‘Cause I’m sure to discredit guys
    With poor and decrepit lines -
    I spit lavish absurd opulence!
    I’ve seen one verse from you -
    Against the kid Namix -
    And I sense the grim fact is
    He done murdered you!
    See, some enjoy longevity’s reign -
    Some live in doubt and fizzle out -
    Destroyed - tossed in brevity’s flame!
    And your spot in a casket depends
    On if you squab and scrap ‘til the end -
    So this meek coward’ll remain undiscovered
    ‘Cause I’ll devour his weak frame – just another lost flash in the pen!
    Any set that he claims? Fictional!
    Respect he retains? Minimal!
    All I need is a reason to beat him to death –
    Leave this geek’s brain a grease stain! Critical!
    He regains physical means – great! – Grip the tool
    And forty-five him – immortalize him like a freeze-frame visual!
    Light him up, then pipe his slut
    Show her my man sabre -
    Fold her and pancake her -
    Mertilize her dreams and fertilize her seed like a landscaper!
    This kid's ethered!
    Your homicide's set - I personify death -
    The Grim Reaper!
    And I knew the Lord of the Flies was patient -
    Swoop’ll rue and scorn his human form
    Being chewed and torn in the fires of Satan!
    What will "Ah" do then?
    'Cause the usual funeral pires are blazin’ –
    Waitin’ for when “Ah” (I) Swoops in!
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  10. DeathProof

    DeathProof Past zooted.

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  11. pill grim

    pill grim CHRONNIE SPARKO

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    quick quick

    times are a-changin' - i feel indifferent though
    a while back "instagram" meant your dealers didn't loaf
    but yo, i don't suffer from drug addiction
    fuck no, i'm comfortable once i'm trippin'
    my secret stash, high chiefin' hash
    watch the eye bleeds that visine can mask
    tabs, shrooms, speed, coke, crack fumes, weed smoke
    stab wounds, please know that's you - breathe slow
    on some stupid shit, indica's ripe for buddha hits
    lucid trips, i'm in the cut like a Junior Mint
    happy pleadin' the fifth, treat it as if
    it's the greeziest piff, that means keepin' it zipped
    slap the cuffs on me...first you see me then you don't
    too sneaky for the police, Houdini it and GHOST

    missing 2 lines. whatever, fuck it
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  12. Ravenous510

    Ravenous510 Well-Known Member

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    This made me lol and say "DAYUM" simultaneously...
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  13. Ducking Angels

    Ducking Angels Good bars> Bad bars

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    These are quite Gothic and dark- if you are into that stuff:

    I got a nickname, it's the Mic assassin
    Find two guys called michael and start head bashing

    I'll snot vomit in yo gin and tonic
    my modus operandi is to piss in your shandy
    I'll make your whole stash of chronic turn bubonic
    and I'll make your brandy and your pussy get sandy

    I'M BACK AND I'M BLACKER THAN CHRIS TUCKER
    BLACK LIKE JACK AND I'M JACKING A MOTHER FUCKER
    POWERFUL AND SASSY, YOU CAN CALL ME OPRAH
    HIGH OFF THE CHRONIC AND I'M CHUGGING GRAPE SODA
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  14. Ribo Nuke

    Ribo Nuke Audiodidact

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    That's one of the weirdest verses I've ever read. Thanks
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  15. grandgroove

    grandgroove New Member

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    Damn illipsis. Just read your 13 April post. I can imagine that shit to one of those bugged out jazz horn Beatminerz type of instrumentals from the 90s. You have a talent, bro. Thanks for the post.

    Love life. Let it love you back.
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  16. grandgroove

    grandgroove New Member

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    And an equally amazed shout to pill grim. That's the kind of blurred vision style I love.

    Love life. Let it love you back.
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  17. MisterE

    MisterE Look @ His Face Now!

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    REALLY happy with this thread right now. Some of you guys are so talented, its fucking nuts.

    Who am I kidding. This wordplay punchline shit is my root. I'm evolving and dedicating my life to mastering honest heartfelt emceeing and possibly singing, intending on really making it my career and life. Truthful, relatable emceeing is a completely different talent. But I'm gonna start working on a track with that deep pen game though. It's too fun.
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  18. MisterE

    MisterE Look @ His Face Now!

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    U know what we need tho???

    Some more Yogsothoth...it sounds like a mixed drink for christmas
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  19. pill grim

    pill grim CHRONNIE SPARKO

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    thanks for all the kind words, i don't think my verses are all that, really but positive feedback is always a plus!

    :pignosesmile:

    and for anyone wondering...yes, i do make music but none of it is online yet. lolz

    the project i'm working on with my buddy is moving fuuuuuuuuucking slowly, it should pick up by the end of the year...mostly cuz he's working on his solo debut album and another EP with someone else right now. once it clears up we should rip through it though, already have all the beats picked out and everything and two tracks of it are already recorded (just not mastered)

    oh! and hopefully i'll have a track featuring this dude dropping sometime before the end of the year, already reached out to him it's just a matter of finding a beat/subject to rap about haha

    [youtube]GySbyia9v9M[/youtube]

    oh and sheeeeeeiiiiiiit, there should be a posse cut involving everybody in here at some point 'cause there's a lot of fire that's been posted and i wouldn't mind being a part of that collab fo really reals

    ...this is probably the most i've ever written on rapmusic, wow aite i'm done, peace for now boils & ghouls
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  20. illipsis

    illipsis Ill Collector

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    Thanks man! Definitely appreciate the kind words.
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