"Distinguish A Tone Of Love In Life" By Alex Hornby aka TuNed RooT

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  1. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Distinguish A Tone Of Love In Life
    By Alex Hornby aka TuNed RooT

    Our Unwritten Love With Expanded Arms.
    The Angels Sung The Lines That Were Created Within Your Palms.
    Our Invisible Kisses Are Truth With Hugs, The Condolences.
    My Heart Is Filled With Love As My Chest Becomes Dense.
    I Plead To Have You Sacrifice Your Extra Rib.
    Or My Love Will Scorch All Of Mine.
    Mentally Blind As I'm Physically Athletic And Fit.
    I Seem To Have Described A Human With A Book.
    Don't Judge Something By Its Cover With A Certain Image.
    Because Deep Down You May Find It Broke And That You Overlooked.
    How Do I Find The Strength Of Having My Own Observers Never Leak?
    Like I Was Made Stone Unbroken.
    With Actual Pupils And False Rivers Down Cheeks.
    How Will I Begin A Sentence Upon Your Scented Presence?
    Let Alone Speak Of The True Feelings Dwelling Within My Spirit.
    Will My Body Ever Create An Eclipse Over Your Pure Crescent?
    Will My Hand Ever Stroke The Hair Of Our Own Seed?
    Of Our Own Blessing?
    These Questions May Drill Inside Of Me Forever, Like Construction.
    May Teach Me A Lesson Of Hope And Courage.
    Wait, Is Their A Chance Of Her Feeling The Same Way?
    I'll Be Back, For We're Amongst The Time To Ask.
    It's Time For God's Artwork Labeled Love To Emerge.​
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  2. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    See Alex you got me bent...I refuse to believe that you are 14..I just do..Come clean!!

    Anyway..you have excellent vocab and beautiful delivery! I wish I felt this one more..but uh..circumstances prevent that. Great piece all the same!!
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  3. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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  4. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    damn man, you only 14? Shit you got great talent. Beautiful work here

    one luv
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  5. CenTral AxiS

    CenTral AxiS New Member

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    Very nice. This was true poetry this was real deep and am not into this kind of stuff but I think I understood what it is that your saying.

    You seem to be in love with someone who your already really close or see quite oftern but never really show the way you are truely feeling about this gurl to her and it's making you feel really down the fact your to afraid and cant ever find the right moment to tell her. But then theres some hope because you realise maybe she feels the same so now you have the courage to tell.

    This is what I got anyways I could've got a diffent message from what your putting out_lol

    Peace
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  6. VerballyHostile

    VerballyHostile New Member

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    this was beautiful and deep, incredible word selection

    fantastic imagery, the lights and changes and feelings shine through like mad

    had to read it 3 times, its a word that doesnt exist lol, i know that cliche
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  7. VerballyHostile

    VerballyHostile New Member

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    by the way Im from Vancouver, washington

    WASHINGTON HOLDING HIP HOP POETRY DOWN :)
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  8. Lyrical B^tch

    Lyrical B^tch New Member

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    Wow...now that I know your only 14..I wanna hate on you..lol..I saw all the responses u left to other people stuff..and the way u spoke so eloquently I assumed u was way older than me...Man when I was 14 i was on some hickory dickory dock type poetry..lol..so big ups to u for your vocabulary alone..lmao..but back to this poem..this was deep..mad nice...Although like i said after reading your responses I didnt expect anything much less than perfect..this is defenently what poetry is all about..ill vocab..crazy flow..yo this was just nice all around..I usually dont take the time to write no more than a few lines in anybody's joint..but I had to speak on this one...keep writin..and IM fa sho gon peep your next one..stay up..oNe
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  9. lewdDog

    lewdDog Life is are own illusion

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    i felt this sum what ... it was real good, n ur only 14 i wish i could write like that when i was 14. good shiz 1 luv.

    my fav lines

    "Deep Down You May Find It Broke And That You Overlooked.
    How Do I Find The Strength Of Having My Own Observers Never Leak?
    Like I Was Made Stone Unbroken."
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  10. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    welcome to the realm!


    this is serious....lovin this piece u got here..would pick out my

    fav lines...but there were so many

    hope to see more from you soon

    UP
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  11. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Thanks ya'll for the positive comments. I'll be dropping my new piece probably in a couple days just because I want as much feed on this, as possible. One Love..
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  12. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    What's up Nephew? I just wanna say that you really are talented, especially being as young as you are. I read you're last comment, and I just wanted to say if you write...Write because YOU love to do it...don't worry about writing for accolades, that'll come in due time. Now as for your joint, I'll be totally honest and say I wasn't really feeling it too tough simply because I think you overdid it a little on the vocab...It was a nice piece don't get me wrong, I'm just being honest. I think if you flowed with it a little more naturally, it would be smoother. I'll give it a thumb and a half.
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  13. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    ^^ Thanks aungee for being honest. Although, NO, I ain't doing it for the "praise of others". I do it for myself, I just lend ya'll an ear in my poetic knowledge and pieces, feel me family? Plus, who doesn't want people to like their joints, yam sayin'? I also love the constructive feed, as you've given me of the vocabulary, so that's another reason I up it. Anyway, I'll try working with that vocabulary, although that's my style and I just like digging into a deeper definition of what I'm trying to say, na'mean? I just don't want a simplistic word that can't describe what I'm feeling, but whatever. Thanks for your opinion, all respect and love. My blessings..

    Uppin' one last time, before my next piece drops..
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  14. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    It's all good...just droppin my 3 cents here and there.
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    milLion by way of Kansas City

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  16. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    wonderful imagery.....you seem to choose your words carefully and theres not a single word wasted in this piece.....beautiful use of language.....peace and blessings
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  17. Poetic N Nature

    Poetic N Nature New Member

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    this was very nice work... I would rearrange a couple lines to put more of a punch to the poem... but in all it was very well written and felt....

    good drop... will try to read more when I can....

    7.5/10
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