DEVILS SANCTUM...keystyle

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by lpoet, Nov 9, 2003.

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  1. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    been writting like a mad man lately..but im not sure if i should post the stuff i've been doing..so i decided to key something since i havent posted in a LONG time...



    Where shall I find my revelation
    Is there anything to even be known
    Are does one truly find self through
    Prayer and meditation……
    Admittedly
    The cold stares once broke my fragile heart
    But only temporarily detoured
    my determination and eventually
    I spoke and words slurred
    Drunk off the truths I had taken in
    I had visions of this being over and
    My soul peacefully ascending to heaven
    But those weren’t the thoughts of a rational man
    So I pushed them aside
    And began plummeting into the
    Depths of my mind and now feel
    As if I’m wide open
    Screaming for acknowledgement
    Questioning the very essence
    of this life and its end
    Aware that its began but I
    wanna go back to the start
    Trying to blindly follow my intuitions as if the
    Truth not etched atop my sin soaked heart
    I stood at the doors of the temple
    Acting as if this were some sort of conundrum
    The equations clearly written on the steps
    And I still try my hardest to evade them
    Turning my back to the heavens
    Eyes bloodshot
    Knees sunken into the ground
    Yes I enjoyed the thrill of the chase
    But I now want nothing more then to be found………
    test
  2. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    just about every word in this piece represents how i've been feelin lately. I see growth








    one luv
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  3. Dark_Angel

    Dark_Angel Dark_Angel

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    beautiful peice, u have so much talent, even in a keystyle...wow...i loved the emotion in this peice, great work
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  4. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    Bout time you dropped something...

    j/p I know you been busy but the piece was worth the wait..

    "I stood at the doors of the temple
    Acting as if this were some sort of conundrum
    The equations clearly written on the steps "

    Loved that part, maybe in a different kind of way but i can relate to feeling like that...wordplay was pretty good for a keystyle...

    "Turning my back to the heavens
    Eyes bloodshot
    Knees sunken into the ground
    Yes I enjoyed the thrill of the chase
    But I now want nothing more then to be found………"


    Feeling the ending the most but the whole thing is dope

    much love

    peace
    test
  5. mavrik...

    mavrik... Lyrically Transparent ...

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    ipoet, i've always felt your pieces since i've been coming here. this is no exception ... loving it...really nice composition you've come out with.
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  6. TrufDXaggerator

    TrufDXaggerator New Member

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    yeah i dont see as much of ure work as i would like but i do like wut i get to see. I liked the images in this and could picture a painting from the words. Again another Deep keystyle dat i cant see myself being able to compose.Dope!
    Truthfuly Speakin and Truf Fuly SpittinOUT
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  7. SAMARA

    SAMARA truth is a sword

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    lpoet, hot drop.
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  8. eatemup

    eatemup New Member

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    began plummeting into the
    Depths of my mind and now feel
    As if I’m wide open
    Screaming for acknowledgement
    Questioning the very essence
    of this life and its end

    ^^fav lines , anyway this was off the hook yo liked this piece here you drop some good shit yo
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  9. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    Trying to blindly follow my intuitions as if the
    Truth not etched atop my sin soaked heart


    Beautiful piece....i really enjoyed this...i had to read it twice to get the feel of it...but it was a wonderful poem as usual!

    mad love
    test
  10. Brown_Menace

    Brown_Menace Honey Hitta

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    i liked it, very descriptive and i liked the detail in the peice as well. but when are you droppin the collab, did you do your part yet?
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  11. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    "I spoke and words slurred
    Drunk off the truths I had taken in"




    That stuck out like a sore thumb to me, but nonetheless it was hot. Anyway, this piece was nice and it told a story, and that's whats nice about a lot of the pieces that people aren't posting anymore...They are just wining and complaining but never really saying what's going on...good shit...
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  12. FukkedUPKidR

    FukkedUPKidR Guest

    Ahhh, this was awesome lpoet! !!!!

    I loved the end..honestly. Keep writing..
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  13. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    thank you
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  14. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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  15. Los Esposito

    Los Esposito New Member

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    Like the visionary approach...

    when you said "..drunks off the truths I've taken in..."

    I didn't know whether to reference the line to alcohol, stress or pain...
    it made sense as I reinacted the poem thru me saying it out loud basically I figured it was a pain or stress analogy...

    I likez tho'...

    1
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  16. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    means a lot coming from u man...UP
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  17. nice drop here LPoet, you vented your frustrations well, i liked the drunk of the truths part alot.
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  18. IvyG

    IvyG New Member

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    I REALLY liked this piece.. the bold hurt my eyes and it took me a few times to get thru it because I am sitting in the dark but .. it was awesome and I am glad I came back to it to finish reading it...

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    But I now want nothing more then to be found………
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    such an awesome line....
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  19. DaJackle

    DaJackle ThoughtS ProcessinG

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    this is deep man, then again you're pieces are always deep...i always enjoy reading poems about growth and desire to be something better than your previous self; basically to evolve. This piece is really good...you know what i see missing alot in this board is that people to tend to put everything into one stanza. I guess it's easier that way, but when reading it...i felt that you missed places where there should be a pause, or a break...you should try putting each ideas and image into stanzas, that way it'll stand out more and become more noticable than all clumped up together...but none the less, i enjoy....nice read, nice flow to it...and the concept is something i could relate to
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  20. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    i feel some of the best pieces i read in the realm are keystyles because they give you a straight emotion from a right now frame of mind. this was no different and it was real nice.



    Stay Up, Much Love, Peace
    test
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