Devil's Breath - Kinda Lengthy but a good read

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  1. Johnnie French

    Johnnie French Voodooradio.podomatic.com

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    I haven't been around as much since I stopped mod'n the Poetry Realm... but I'ma try to stop by and peek in and drop stuff more often so here's a poem from my collection I hope to all you enjoy :).

    It’s a dark ravenous pit
    Eyeless creature keeps look over
    Bare skeletons dance in air
    Moving to each breath
    Along a solemn deep rutted path
    Road traveled by many times
    Seen by few
    Slowly creaking in the blackness
    Horse drawn carriage trotting quietly
    Driver eyeing any and every direction
    Eyeless yet reassuring
    Guiding the frightened
    The horse draws to a stop
    Driver looks then drops to the sticky muck
    His toes already frozen through his tattered shoes
    Hands worn from not just the reins he holds but
    Worn from life
    Troubled youth at his time
    Hands used to grasp his drunken father
    Begging for the departures to stop before the arrivals home did
    Helping his mother in the garden
    Dashing barefoot finding the fattest vegetable
    Now they are used for the completion of man’s creation
    This stone here that stone there
    It’s a dead doe
    Now he uses his hands dragging this doe
    Cold from the devil’s breath
    He pauses thinking of the fawn
    Motherless as he was fatherless
    He cried, cried so much but humans shed tears
    Unfortunately that the fawn doesn’t have the capabilities
    Yet it tears away inside to produce an unearthly sound
    I feel and understand you fawn
    Slowly cold tears glide on a frozen cheek
    Each tear for a child that cries but has nothing visible
    Tears there for an instance they’re gone with the last breath
    He re-ascends
    He proceeds through the devil’s breath and shameless bones
    Wading deeper into the river Styx
    He thinks of his illustrious life
    How lackluster it really is
    Filled with pain, distrust, and longing
    Last breath before descending, plunging forth
    Mother, Doe, and my Father
    Soon I should sit with you on stone pillars
    Drinking eternally with no liver
    Forever dead with pain
    So I give a kiss to my guide eyeless
    Bow to the dancing bones
    Then proceed to the final step
    With the Devil’s Breath gently on my neck
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  2. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    nice to have you drop by the realm again... nice piece,
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  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Damn yo this was some ill shit. Great imagery, i remember when you use to post back in the day. Glad to see you back. One luv

    "Bare skeletons dance in air
    Moving to each breath"

    those were my favorite lines
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  4. Johnnie French

    Johnnie French Voodooradio.podomatic.com

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    Thanks :) btw Eyeless is the moon and Bare skeletons are trees without leaves and the Devil's Breath is the wind.
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  5. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    i figured it was a metaphor(sp) for something
    ill shit
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  6. Johnnie French

    Johnnie French Voodooradio.podomatic.com

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    Well a lil hint about reading my stuff I have meaning buried behind just about everything I can possibly get it behind. :) Unless it's a romantic/erotic.
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  7. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    nice! i like the abstract-ness in this (is that a word? lol) imagery you used was great...i could see everything you described....had a dark lonley feeling to it...i liked the part about the fawn :)
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