Denial - Rap

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  1. n0rahs

    n0rahs New Member

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    Okay, I admit that my my rapping skills/lyrics aren't the best, so no hate please.
    But can I please have some advice on how to write good lyrics?
    And can someone help me rap my raps for me? x

    https://soundcloud.com/sharon-liu-1

    [VERSE 1]
    Seeing her leave, it’s that moment of pain
    Knowing that you won’t see her again
    It’s always the same, she tells you that she
    Has her own ways…
    It’s that heartbreak, you don’t know what to think
    You don’t know how to feel, how to keep it real
    Maybe just fake a smile and one day
    It’ll pass, just pretend everything’s okay

    But you’re here with nothing but emptiness
    You’re tearing up photo graphs, tryna forget
    The past, she left you with so many scars
    It’s hard to live when you’re torn apart
    You’re tracing the name that you carved
    In your arms, self harm, don’t care bout anything
    Just keep calm, but you can’t,
    Face reality
    No, not like this
    It’s a nightmare come true

    [CHORUS]
    Love, denial and the memories
    Wishing you hadn’t seen what you’d seen
    Only if you hadn’t heard what you’d heard
    Cos all those words just left you hurt

    Love, tears, and the heartbreak
    Never knew the affect it could take
    She already took your heart, took your soul
    Wish she’d take your life, and just let you go

    [VERSE 2]
    You’re screaming, raging, you’re going crazy
    You’re crying out her name, you’re dying, inside
    But you tell her that you’re fine, it’s a lie
    You’re going completely out of your mind

    But she don’t care, you’re not worth her time
    You spent your life putting up a fight
    For her, and lost it, these years got wasted
    From tryna keep her in your sight

    But this time, you know you crossed the line
    It’s another fall from another climb
    It’s like a dive from kilometres
    High, escape life though suicide

    You wake up and then realise
    You’re broken to the core, but you survived
    Tryna convince yourself it’s just tonight
    And tomorrow, things will be alright

    [CHORUS]
    Love, denial and the memories
    Wishing you hadn’t seen what you’d seen
    Only if you hadn’t heard what you’d heard
    Cos all those words just left you hurt

    Love, tears, and the heartbreak
    Never knew the affect it could take
    She already took your heart, took your soul
    Wish she’d take your life, and just let you go


    [BRIDGE]
    No, it’s can’t be this way
    You’re on your knees, begging her to stay
    Pleading “don’t leave me, I love you, just see it”
    You’ve written out a whole essay
    On how you’ve loved her
    Since the day you’ve met her
    But all you did was feel dejected
    Cos she rejected
    Your heart
    But it was fully expected
    And you can’t contain your emotion,
    Tryna constrain yourself from
    Reaching the blades
    No, you’re not playing games
    No more, you’ve gone insane
    Over someone who once kept you tame
    She doesn’t understand it’s not the same
    Without her, pain, it’s burning
    You need something to wash it away
    It’s stained you, red,
    It’s made you hate yourself

    [CHORUS]
    Love, denial and the memories
    Wishing you hadn’t seen what you’d seen
    Only if you hadn’t heard what you’d heard
    Cos all those words just left you hurt

    Love, tears, and the heartbreak
    Never knew the affect it could take
    She already took your heart, took your soul
    Wish she’d take your life, and just let you go
    test

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