"Deliver Me"

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  1. Novaman: RaWKiLLa

    Novaman: RaWKiLLa New Member

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    "Deliver Me"

    Who am I that You should hear my prayer?
    Even sometimes I wonder if You're there
    -It seems when tmes get hard
    --And the path ahead gets dark
    I know that You will hear my call
    Be there to catch me when I fall

    What am I that You love me so?
    Even sometimes I don't care to know
    -That You loved me before all time
    --Before I was born I was on Your mind
    I'm hoping You will hear my plea
    Come now, O Lord and deliver me

    Cause I'm caught out in the rain
    Left naked in my shame
    Left alone and cold in my pain
    --Come now, O Lord and deliver me

    I'm tire of crying these tears
    Tired of running from my fears
    I just desire to draw more near
    --Come now, O Lord and deliver me

    Who am I that You love me so?
    To wash my sins as white as snow
    -You came and made that sacrafice
    --For my sins you paid the ultimate price
    When I called Your name, You heard my plea
    Come now, O Lord and deliver me
    test
  2. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    good shit i like that a lot. i think every one can relate to this.
    i wish i had skills like you

    stay up and keep doing your thing much love
    test
  3. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    good shit . i think every one can relate to this. great job i wish i had some of the skill that you have.

    stay up and keep hit us with great stuff like this much love PEACE
    test
  4. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    "I'm tire of crying these tears
    Tired of running from my fears
    I just desire to draw more near
    --Come now, O Lord and deliver me"

    I can most def relate to that stanza right there. Alot of emotion in here. Glad to see you posting something

    one luv
    test
  5. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    ^yep . this was beatiful
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  6. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    nice piece..i can feel this.
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  7. Brahman

    Brahman Mel Van Peebles

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    poetic, yet pathetic
    i've become apathetic to your continuous christian rhetoric
    elevate, we must
    look within yourself and not what supposedly lies beyond the dusk
    there's no horned man underneath the earth's crust...
    ...constantly tugging you with tools such as jealousy, envy, and lust

    elevate, we must

    look within ourselves...
    test
  8. this was good, i'd imagine it would make a good hymn, if the format was chnaged around a little. I liked how you was very open with your feelings, and how you made personal direct statments, and described your doubt and guilt. It showed how your faith was being tested..

    i think you can find many of the answers you seek, just by the fact you write things such as this..

    take care man
    test
  9. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    This is a good piece in format and style, and the tone is definitely there. I may have used slightly different punctuation to get certain points across, considering the rhythm and meter of the piece, but an artist's decision on such matters cannot be questioned.

    And don't mind haters as to the content. Anyone who hates on a given belief system instead of just opting not to believe has larger problems than are readily apparent...
    test
  10. Brahman

    Brahman Mel Van Peebles

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    some of us would like to have others freed from a matrix that they've either (a) created for themselves or (b) had imposed upon them since childhood.

    human brains enshackled in chains is not a pleasant picture to me.

    elevate we must.
    test
  11. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Different rhyme scheme, as well as a different structured format you had put together for this one. Feeling the concept overall and I felt the words were powerful from what you brought to this piece, at least. Other than that, nice, strong, straight to the point joint here, family. My blessings..
    test
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