Dane-Jerus & Revile - Illegal Emcees

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  1. Paragraaaf

    Paragraaaf New Member

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  2. KamikazeLyricist

    KamikazeLyricist The Kamikaze Lyricist

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    listenin ... beats tight ...
    vocals are a lil too high ... first Mc has a good flow but get rushed in the flow a lil bit at times .... it was aight not bad ...
    second Mc .... seemed like he was spittin wit no emotion ...
    jus readin or somethin ... needs to work on delivery .... overall not too bad jus needs to polish up a lil ...
    hit up mine ...

    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=913630
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  3. Paragraaaf

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    thx

    ya revile got a real different style, he actually spits with a ton of emotion but his accent takes away from it

    and i, of course, came correct in every way lol

    uppin
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  4. Dice

    Dice Still One Of A Kind...

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    First guy, I like the voice, I think you should practice your verse more before you record it. There were some spots that flowed real nice and others that probably looked a lot better on paper than they sound recorded.
    Second dude, nice voice, the accent takes away a little, I think maybe you should work in rhymes based off your accent, Does that make sence??? Listen to coppertpot for an example of what Im sayin.

    Overall not bad, vocals are a bit too loud. but with some fine tuning this could be a real good track.

    Return the favor
    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=915700

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  5. Paragraaaf

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    ill let him know ya said that

    uppin for the 4 year olds who still are sleepin
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  6. Paragraaaf

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    btw, the only part that i really rushed was when i said "dane-jerus and revile" and thats cuz i originally wrote it sayin another dudes name but he stabbed me in the back so a collab not happening pretty much went without saying...so i stuck his name in a rush a little...if i didnt say "and" it wouldnt have been rushed lol
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  7. Dice

    Dice Still One Of A Kind...

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    its all good, I've left peoples names out of verses on collabs before... If its that big of a deal then FUCK EM. Not saying that about anyone in particular, just in general. My names been left out a couple times too, it really aint that big a deal,

    Make sure you hit my shit up homie

    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=915700

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  8. Paragraaaf

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    ya my bad homie...ill hit it up in a bit
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  9. Dice

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    kickin this to the top for you man, good lookin out on the listens.

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  10. Paragraaaf

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    thx homie

    if ur gonna keep comin back in here at least peep my other tracks hahahahahaha
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  11. Paragraaaf

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    "i never sleep, cuz sleep is the cousin of death"
    -Nas

    people should be more like nas and STOP SLEEPIN!!!
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    "im like a cum stained mattress dont sleep on me"
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  13. TOOBxSOCKS

    TOOBxSOCKS Code of the Samurai

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    aight....beats tight as shit...some afu-ra/rza type shit.....

    dane-jerus: flow seems kinda shaky here and there...not too bad though....dlivery was the same....content was straight....

    revile: flows on point....pretty smooth...coulda been a little more energized with it...ya lyrics were cool...

    overall this shits nice....only thing i could say i think would make it better is to turn the beat up more and fix the flow a little....

    hit this up: http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=915264
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  14. Paragraaaf

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    dope feed nuk thx

    and uppin

    and ill hit up ya link in a sec

    and eturnal is wack as fuck

    HOLLA!!!111!!!111!!!!!!!!1!11111
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  15. Paragraaaf

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    like loyal christian girls its impossible to touch me
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  16. Paragraaaf

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    im not stoppin till i get 5 posts of good feedback
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  17. BrotherOfMalice

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    wow its been awhile since i been here..

    well since u im the muhfucker who mixed all ur shit down for u, i guess i can leave feed.

    compared to where u used to be... this is mos def ur better drop. but like i sed before right now the only thing thats holding u back is ur voice,

    just suck a little more dick and u should be fine lololol...

    now.. back to our punchline based aim convos
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  18. Stable

    Stable insolent white devil

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    "just suck lil more dick n u should be fine"

    seems like he knows all about how sperm change the voice... lol

    *i deep throat dot com victim*
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  19. Stable

    Stable insolent white devil

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    fuck brother of malice
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  20. BrotherOfMalice

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    LOL.. and you are?
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