Dane-Jerus - I Control The Soldiers PRODUCED BY ********

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  1. Paragraaaf

    Paragraaaf New Member

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    http://www.soundclick.com/danejerus

    Top Song..."I Control The Soldiers"

    Produced By...the one, the only, my homie, forever real and never phony...who concocts some weird ass beats in his chrome piece...********

    http://www.soundclick.com/shadowvilleproductions...(as if u didnt know the link already)

    LEAVE ME SOME LOVIN PEOPLE
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  2. Paragraaaf

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    SLANT1ZE...thats whats in the ** marks

    ugh...can someone please get rid of that stupid feature
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  3. Paragraaaf

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    Nap Times Over You Pre School Bitches
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    Beat is uplifting and revolutionary sounding. Chorus is solid, but could have been better if you put more time in structuring the positioning of the lyrics. Flow is interesting and unique, just needs polishment. Delivery and presence needs to be elevated. Metaphor is cool, but lyrics didn't appeal to me.
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    wheres taiyamo denku when u need his damn feedback? lmfao
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  8. Infinite Skillz

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    returning the feed: your overdubs are distracting. the tone of your voice is mad different from your top vocals. not sure if you did that on purpose for effect but it wasn't work for me. some of your lines seem like you wrote the lyrics before you picked the beat. even in the chorus it seems like you were rushing it a little bit. rather than speed up to get it all in, drop some syllables. solid drop but keep working on it
    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=910363
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  9. Paragraaaf

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    ya i did that on purpose...experiementing, feel me?

    uppin
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  10. Highst

    Highst Captain Nutyness

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    Your voice sounds unoriginal. No dissing, just work on finding your style. Lyrics are cool. Beat is def sick. Yeah, backgrounds are way diff pitch than your main vocals. Not bad though. Keep it up. Check my shit...
    http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/ivmob_music.htm
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  13. CosaNostraProd.

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    ahh props on makin this shit, but work on ur voice and flow then go from there
    sta yup
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    ^^flow is fine and i cant do shit about my voice, but thx anyway

    uppin for you heavy sleepers
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    yall are marks
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