Controversy (Feedback will be returned, Drop Links)

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  1. TheMassiah

    TheMassiah New Member

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    Here's a track from my latest mixtape Killing 3 Personalities: Volume 1

    A collaboration joint I did with the homie and local seattle MC, Khingz.
    You can check his shit out at KHINGZ

    Drop feed and I will return

    Controversy | Massiah

    Controversy | Massiah

    SoundClick artist: Massiah - Massiah is a uprising hip-hop musician from the Northwest.


    Lyrics:

    Verse 1:
    (Massiah)
    My mind is military, these rhymes are getting scary
    These eyes are never teary, mistakes made very rarely
    While wasting a 9 mili, waiting for them to kill me
    My patience is getting weary and I mean that really
    Always reaching and speaking to the people so they always hear me
    But deceiving and creeping on me is lethal, so they fear me
    Go on a shooting spree on every mc that I see
    Reducing 3 every light speed, sippin hennessy
    Trippin enemies, sun setting your family
    Being the remedy while repping the dub-cee
    Sticking my dick in you bitches mouth but it ain't misogynistic
    Its just fuck what you got to say because I ain't listening
    Drake can get a rake to the face, teeth replace
    Raped and maced then repeat it in the same place
    Now I'm contradicting what I'm spitting but dude
    Until I make a million this is what you'll be listening to

    HookMassiah)
    Now from the west coast to the east coast (WADDUP)
    Bump this thang until your shits broke (SHUT UP)
    Is what you say to those who think they know (HANDS UP)
    If you down to ride till you get ghost (STAND UP) x2

    Verse 2:
    (Khingz)
    This is a disrespectable the effort grown behind my spectacles rep the soul
    In my northwestern home, my rhymes fight like 90's mike tyson
    Kill the stupid and bring dumb death to you blind mices
    Feeling ruthless, you need more aides then eric wright if
    You want to try this, I'm a lion eating bars up
    When I start up industry cats run like cheetara
    You ain't sick, get your sars up
    Pardon but your irrelevant
    Yeah you like Pac, minus heart and intelligence
    Lightweights, I'm iron elephants
    Stampede running shit, what you fucker spit
    Almost sound like republicans, yeah you pretty soft
    I'm on the ugly rougher shit, sick city on a southern tip
    Sick gritty fuck the government, written thunder spit
    I'm what I say you just staring in wonderment
    Truth is my path, you just pave under it
    Yeah, mutha fuck a bitch

    Hook

    Verse: (Massiah)
    If it doesn't belong to me then I'm stealing it
    If it walks and breathes then I'm fucking killing it
    If its illegal then I'll be concealing it
    And if its lethal I'll be the first dealing it

    Bring that bullshit here dawg, I dare you to enter
    Get fucking rolled on from beacon hill to white center
    I'm always bringing that ember, you always bringing that nothing
    So write it down and remember dawg, end of discussion

    (Khingz)
    Khingz from king and massiah
    Outside our names don't cross us like rivers made of fire
    ?????? rival gang I'm a rider
    Where the high on cocaine or the fame thats beside the
    issue, look within you, is you honestly making music your whole soul can live through?
    Would you want your daughter to be the women you spit to
    Want your son to be who you pretend you are, is that hard?

    (Massiah)
    When I'm verbally hurting ya to the point where I murder ya
    I leave the whole scene cleaner then Martha stewarts furniture

    (Khingz)
    Killing stars like murder, ca blH BLAH BLAH serpents up

    (Massiah)
    There ain't no deadlier duo then Khingz and the Massiah

    (Khingz)
    If you homicide hoods we holocaust empires

    (Massiah)
    So, come and fuck with me if you ain't a punk

    (Khingz)
    Popping shit partna ain't no problem to pop, OPEN THE TRUNK

    Hook x4
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  2. Virginian Gent

    Virginian Gent East Coast Bastard

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    Real nice. Very Eminem-style sound both with the beat and your delivery. The back and forth at the end sounded good. I was surprised because his voice seemed very different from yours but it worked very well.

    I like to break down critiques a bit so I can help people improve but I have nothing really to bring up that I think could be done better. This is good to go.


    By the way, you had a small typo in the lyrics though...
    "Bring that bullshit dawg"; you said "bring that HERE dawg" on the track

    Shows you I was paying attention lol


    oh and mine:
    http://board.rapmusic.com/post-ya-a...4595-can-anyone-give-me-tips-my-delivery.html

    I would appreciate if you took a few minutes to tell me how to improve. Your delivery is on point and you could probably teach me something


    Thanks
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  3. TheMassiah

    TheMassiah New Member

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    Actually I said bring that shit here dawg lol, but thank you for pointing that out.
    test
  4. TheMassiah

    TheMassiah New Member

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    bump, anymore?
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  6. !ntrospect

    !ntrospect New Member

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    damn, this beat is dope.. "if you made it this far into the mixtape" haha i liked that.. first verse has a sick flow, and the delivery is dope as fuck.. it does remind me of old eminem as well, and your voice kinda reminds me of pac.. the chorus is sick, the mix sounds amazing.. second verse is solid as well, flow and delivery is all on point.. third verse is also solid as the rest.. overall, i really enjoyed this.. everything sounds very polished/professional, top notch material.. i got this on repeat for now.. where can i download the mixtape?

    hit me back..
    http://board.rapmusic.com/post-ya-audios-videos-here/1275729-untitled-verse-drop-links.html

    thanks
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  7. DjFatalityBeatz

    DjFatalityBeatz www.BeatsForStars.com

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    For some reason that track reminds me of something tupac would do or eminem like homie above said. Flow is dope and whatnot, usually I'd drop a pro & a con but I can't really find anything bad about the track lol. Good job bro
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  8. TheMassiah

    TheMassiah New Member

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    Thanks for the feed! And I got you back.
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    DeathChamberz From the Page to da stage

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  10. kid grebo

    kid grebo New Member

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    Nice lyrics bruh, keep them coming!
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  11. GrapeCloud

    GrapeCloud New Member

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    the intro was very interesting, a lot more creative than most I have heard

    the lyrics are pretty good

    the flow at some points seemed rushed

    the beat is good

    the mixing on the voicing could of been better

    Overall good job
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  12. McGuire

    McGuire ..Mr.100..

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    Tight work, doc. Dope lyrics and you rode the beat like a champ. Stay up.
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  13. !ntrospect

    !ntrospect New Member

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    by the way.. who produced "maybe i'm crazy" ??? that song is sick.
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  14. TheMassiah

    TheMassiah New Member

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    LOS Productions from soundclick.
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  15. Ult1matum

    Ult1matum New Member

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    I like the beat, the intro is interesting.
    first verse, flow is good, lyrics are nice, lot of multis and internal rhymes, but more importantly its all making sense and not just lines for the sake of having lines.
    Second verse, diff rapper.. hes alright, i really dont like this verse as much, alot of the lines seem to be there just to be hard/ make it seem like some amazing complex lines when its not really like these for example eh

    "Yeah you like Pac, minus heart and intelligence
    Lightweights, I'm iron elephants
    Stampede running shit, what you fucker spit
    Almost sound like republicans, yeah you pretty soft
    I'm on the ugly rougher shit, sick city on a southern tip
    Sick gritty fuck the government, written thunder spit"

    the lines are okay, but its almost like they are there just to rhyme with not much connection or follow on from the line before.. anyway thats just my opinion.

    hook is alright, works well for this kinda track. overall the track is good, but yea just the second verse fell down in the parts i mentioned imo, parts of it were sick.

    return the feed please
    http://board.rapmusic.com/post-ya-a...hour-rise-fall-drop-links.html#post1068379765
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  16. TheMassiah

    TheMassiah New Member

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    Good looks with the feed. And I just got you back.
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  17. TheMassiah

    TheMassiah New Member

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    drop your links ya'll!
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  18. littleslimlocc

    littleslimlocc New Member

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    this shit was pretty nice, rockin a nice beat no doubt

    flows are dope, i prefer the first verse to the second, but i fuck with the track overall - the hook works pretty well too - production soundin pretty solid

    this is some solid work right here

    keep it movin fellas

    return the favor please

    http://board.rapmusic.com/audio-emcee-hook-ups/1277322-waiting.html
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  19. TheMassiah

    TheMassiah New Member

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    i got you back
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  20. TheMassiah

    TheMassiah New Member

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    drop ya links!
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