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  1. DethStryque

    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    I sense you...waiting, silent. Hunkering. Hungering.
    Stygian shadow spawned maws and claws soul sundering
    You've split skulls underwing as you went foe a-plundering
    Bringer of Woe and Suffering, I hear your cold utterings
    But here I am...amid lightning flash and crash of thundering
    Hearing you trundling between Here and Beyond...with Otherlings
    You draw near Here with your tunneling...writhing, riving, shuddering
    And just beyond Here I hear your armies clustering;
    Nigh innumerable in numbering
    Against the hordes you command I stand with war sword in hand.
    For if you think Warriors have rejected Man and left this land?
    Then...

    COME

    Come. Bring your Legions. Arm them with tridents, flames and flails
    Come. Bring your Demons...highest Violence, Pain, Betrayal
    Come. Bring your heathens. Tell them the might they wield prevails
    Come. For I'm the reason...you all will kneel, yield and fail

    COME

    Laugh at our mortal flesh, and how swiftly we pass from Here to Gone
    Mock our struggles, our strivings our strife, our fears and the tears we spawn
    Revel in our heart break and the hard breaks I and my peers have drawn
    With all this helping you, it should be no problem for you to take us on.

    COME!

    Fly into feeding frenzies as we foolishly fight our fellow man
    Feast on our souls, gorge yourselves on our flesh n marrow and
    Your scorching anger makes torture chambers of our lives' narrow span
    Cavort and escort our spirits to Hell, we're sered imperiled, damned...
    At your merciless mercy; O King of Harrow and Pharoah of Feral Lands
    But my heart quakes not. With sword in hand I stand on sterile sands
    For if your nether hate embalms us in Darkness from which we'll never wake
    And you fear not the slash of my rod nor the Wrath of God, and you'll never break?
    If...come what may...you deny and deprive us of a better Fate
    Then...why do you stop just shy of Here?...
    ....and hesitate to taste my blade?

    COME!!
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    L u c y (Administrator) SWERVE

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    alliteration agogo - powerful powerful writing.

    I pictured a man stood raging at the sky ..... and how he raged.
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  3. DethStryque

    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    Thank you very very much. Such high praise from such a literate, knowledgeable, experienced person as yourself is rare indeed and I treasure it...thank you!!
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    L u c y (Administrator) SWERVE

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    I know nothing of poetry/writing, I'm quite intimidated by it for that reason. You linked me I read it & said what I thought.
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    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    Woulda never guessed. Your comments on other threads are usually so incisive and perceptive.
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    patrown student for life

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    completely entertained.
    besides the very appealing mechanics, its familiar tone is growing on me.
    right as I faltered,
    Then...why do you stop just shy of Here?..

    manipulated until the end. Can't ask for more.
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  7. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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    I have an erection now
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  8. Mikaella Ocean

    Mikaella Ocean Well-Known Member

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    Its cool but no need to sound so "smart"



    feelins with come thru regardless for a writer like you
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    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    Come. Bring your Legions. Arm them with tridents, flames and flails

    great line...

    This had some attitude and a certain confidence. twisted its way out
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  10. DethStryque

    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    Thank you so very much! Your keen and critical eye rarely misses a thing, and I've seen some of the drops you have in the RSTL. You're a straight up talent, and I respect and appreciate your work.
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    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!! Whaddup mayne? Thank you for that hilarious comment and compliment!!
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    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    I think I grasp what you mean by sounding so "smart", and for that caution? I thank you. I appreciate your candor and I hope you liked the piece. Most importantly? I'm glad you read and comment. Your words are always welcome, however supportive or critical they are.
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  13. Jai-Z

    Jai-Z Bangem, Jai

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    That was fucking sick bro! Soundz like u were an arabian god asking believerz to stop wavering and no Im here, and any1 that doesnt test there faith can die where they stand anywhere. Deep shit bro! I heard and seen u crying out!
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  14. Mikaella Ocean

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    No prob... looking forward to more
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  15. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    death reminds me of one of the Ysraelites who is very zealous and loves his craft...taking his work in a childish wonder and glee and it's contageous...right on death, keep you craft up bro.
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    ~Eloquent Narcissistic....

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    COME

    Come. Bring your Legions. Arm them with tridents, flames and flails
    Come. Bring your Demons...highest Violence, Pain, Betrayal
    Come. Bring your heathens. Tell them the might they wield prevails
    Come. For I'm the reason...you all will kneel, yield and fail


    its like to imagine all what the silent and suffering really have to say,
    and you know theyve seen and witnessed way more than they want to tell you
    i was imagining this as a track
    it seems to have a real nice hook complementary to the verses i mean im sure you could write from days on end though....
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    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    Coming from you--undoubtedly in the Top 10 best writers in RSTL and Poetry section history--that is a truly rare honor. Sijumbo.
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    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    Greetings my Eloquent friend! Your sentiments about this piece being a song is precisely how it "came" to me. I didn't know for sure what was happening when I keystyled this piece, I just let it...COME...to me. Lol. And there was music to it.

    The most interesting thing? Everyone's comments so far on this poem...everything from a man raging at the sky, the silent masses suffering and long hidden righteous wrath battling with a huge life throttling despair, the Ysraelites, an African-Arabian War God inspiring and terrifying legions of believers and backsliders in their faith, and much more...all these images flashed through my mind as the song challenged my fingers to keep pace with it.

    I am...humbled...that my fellow poetic souls heard and still hear the call, and all of you will never fail to...COME...when you are needed.
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  19. K KiLL

    K KiLL KiLLaH 203 Project

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    haha my nigga deth calling out the devil himself nice poem KiLLaH has COME!! but on a peaceful tip glad to see you still doing ya thing after all these years
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  20. DethStryque

    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    Whasssuuppp dawg! Been years man! Lol Deth and a Killa in the same place.
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