City Tales Silence

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  1. ILL SEEKAH

    ILL SEEKAH Deaf to Depths of Death..

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    Sirens tune strumming its melodic strings
    cosmic scenes
    huslters airbrushed in polished dreams
    painted in a solid color green
    where the columns breath
    in thick cigar fumes
    swarm through like a smoke screen
    a stars gloom posted
    beyond hopes theme...too far to mearsure
    grey skyline a dawned treasure
    spreads its worn edges,
    sunset hold its breath hince
    being in the presence
    city plagued with insomnia
    where they toke the ganji up
    stay a float,mindset calmly plucked
    infamous knowlegde
    pages scribed with ancinet lines
    target
    passengers with jaded eyes
    browsing
    vaccant cries of the alleys
    or that stranger bowing
    beneath the lamp post
    stance low speakin with the gravel
    a damp soul
    heat that deepens the shadows
    buidings rested like legions of castles
    winds weeving through lassos
    to craft roots
    of tension catered street tales
    feel the minutes fadin'
    thats if you read brail
    test
  2. SNC

    SNC ~ Untouchable~

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    I was feeling this, it was a little hard for me to follow at first, but nonetheless good and your imagery was on point
    test
  3. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    This was dope....

    Bomb concept, something different then the norm, which in my eyes is always good to see, and the imagery was great throughout, it had a nice rhythm to it as well, I could picture this being said over a chillin beat....nice work

    much love

    peace
    test
  4. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    ^word, this was make a nice spoken word joint. It flowed so well. You should post more often

    one luv
    test
  5. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    nice drop...at the begining i thought the rhyming was being a lil forced but twords the middle u stoped rhyming like that and the poem really blossomed.....very nice imagery...loved the flow of the poem...very smooth...keep it up
    test
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