Chase murda phantom files......the eye is the key

Discussion in 'Open Mic' started by Chase Murda, Mar 19, 2013.

  1. Chase Murda

    Chase Murda hostile enviroment

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    im hot nigga,fuck wit chase ill let them shots hitcha,
    jus cuz u look like rondo dont mean i wont take u to da doc rivers,
    when u floatin itll soon change ya mood when da shock getcha,
    why..cuz u slipped its niggaz not n.i.g.g.e.r.s,
    i mean seriuosly,when u people gonna cut da racist bullshit,
    yea we say it to each other but u do it to be on some BULLSHIT,
    indians was the first to discover this part of the planet,
    so if anybody should be bitchin is them goddammit,
    im sick of da back an fourth bickerin,
    all that..behind da back snickerin when they see a nigga win,
    try to do anything to destroy em in the worst way,
    it hurts ey..u the ones that brought em over here in the 1st place,
    now u want us out what the fuck is that shit about,
    what u want us to do..rally up an burn down ya house,
    ohhhh no u wouldnt like that youd act quick an strike back,
    now another black mans life taken for tryin to go on the right path,
    nobodys race is perfect we all have people thats good an bad,
    shit we made u who u are people u should be glad,
    while we arguin with each other these foriegn countries is plottin,
    north korea alreadys been talkin about gettin shit poppin,
    its all a plan we been designed an trained to hate our brothers,
    god left da world to man we failed an cant look in da face of our mothers,

    ohhhhh shit .....people better wake up the new world order is coming stop being blind open your eyes young nation.......i dont care if u white black green whatever lets join and get this country back
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  2. Chase Murda

    Chase Murda hostile enviroment

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    Will i ever stop hahahaa
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  3. kyothechemist

    kyothechemist New Member

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    Human pain and struggle is human pain and struggle, by you defining this to certain races I feel it is completely counter-productive with the message your trying to send.
    I'm not hating; Just trying to drop some things I feel you could do better, but do what you do.

    When you write and type, if you use better grammar people will take you much more seriously, and your words will hold a lot more stance, even if your using slang terms. The difference between "U" and "You" could make or break the tone of the context your trying to portray.
    Also your rhyme schemes in this are pretty predictable, and you are constantly rhyming slang/cuss words with each other, this just makes the entire infrastructure of lyrics kind of overplayed and simple; not hollow though neccesarly.

    Again, not haitng, just putting out some feedback.
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  4. Chase Murda

    Chase Murda hostile enviroment

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    Let me explain how I work on this site...these post that I put are thoughts from the head they are not writtens...i repeat they are NOT writtens so of coarse they could be formated if written...i dont write I can but I dont..jus off the top
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  5. HAS Productions

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    the topic is a decent one at best, need better ideas though, and some of your cultural facts are a little off, all-in-all what home boys trying to say is, even if its off the top, if you come correct youll get your point across better, and reach listeners, it doesn matter if its off the top or written on a piece of toilet paper. That's what youre trying to do right? ebonics and slang is for audio because the eyes perceive words differently than the ears.

    on to the writing, I dig it, but consider all the race themed raps, its been done a lot so you have to come up with some more unique points. flow is nice, vocab isn't bad. stay up

    p.s. look up a 'human migration pattern' documentary. If youre interested in the topic in general I think youll love the fact that by genetics 100% of us are from Africa, around 90% of us are from the middle east and then 'we' (humans) branch out from there.
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  6. Resilient.

    Resilient. .. . ..

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    You've been garbage for years.. What the hell is wrong with you?
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  7. Chase Murda

    Chase Murda hostile enviroment

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    Res...havent u learned yet that u cant defeat me give it up junior hahahaha
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