CHAMPIONSHIP: 1. Mr. Mynd 12-2 Vs. 2. Vigil 26-17

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  1. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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    RSTL RULES AND REGULATIONS

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    The Standard League Rules will still be Enforced

    Due Dates

    VERSES DUE: Saturday, 11:59PM PST/2:59AM EST
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    Topics: http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=1015180
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  2. Vigil

    Vigil Im infinite consciousness

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    what's up

    good luck
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  3. Mr. Mynd

    Mr. Mynd The British Guy

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  4. Mr. Mynd

    Mr. Mynd The British Guy

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    ”To All Those Dreaming Of A White Christmas ..
    .. Be Careful What You Wish For.”


    TOPIC: Terrorists Mindstate...

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    December 25th, 2006


    North Korea’s defiance is blatant,
    As it attempts to try the patience, of the United Nations ..
    .. by meeting their final statements,
    With a blind negation, some would find evasive.
    Inside the vacant,
    High containment, chambers of their Silo bases ..
    .. lies a latent,
    Wildly dangerous, warhead filled with nitric agents.
    Primed and stationed,
    Behind the tight embrasures, of this silent haven ..
    .. Until a sirens brazen,
    Tiresome wailing, interrupts the entire engagement!
    The hired assailants,
    Quite frustratingly, had not surmised the dangers ..
    .. of their vile dictators,
    Mindless nature, and self-righteous hatred.
    When suddenly, the site awakens -
    And the Missiles rising hastens,
    .. Displaying sides emblazoned,
    With North Korean flags on the vibrant casing.
    Not highly favored,
    By the neighboring, countries that lie adjacent ..
    .. Kim Jong the Second,
    Their highest patron, decided too much times been wasted.
    Korea would strike the States with its missile ..
    .. Killing hundreds of thousands,
    And leaving New York looking like their own troubled surroundings.
    A great mushroom cloud would rise up -
    Filling the sky!
    Whole entire cities were fried, in the blink of an eye.
    The pure radiation,
    Burning the flesh, of vermin and pests ..
    .. American servicemen - Vets - were undeservedly next.
    Innocent children were lost.
    Those poor bastards were toast,
    For the uprising ash and the smoke, that the disaster evoked.
    Those ‘merely’ poisoned grasped to the hope, of what praying could do ..
    Willing to chance a religion they never believed in,
    If it could save them from doom.
    But with the wicked face of the moon, came the coldest of times ..
    .. and a Nuclear Winter emerged,
    Where so many died.
    With no hope for survival, the raging rays bore their flesh ..
    .. Victims realized they were more of less, caught up in the jaws of death.
    Good people had the skin STRIPPED from their bones in a tragic waste ..
    .. before Nuclear Clouds reigned down patterned flakes of ashen-gray.
    These were all that were left of the dead,
    Save for distant memories.
    These burnt embers, that settled over a city they’d never see.
    Drifting,
    Shifting,
    Settling,
    The crisp cinders waltzed the nights sky ..
    .. over what America would later call “Ground One” -
    But not at this precise time.
    As one with the wind,
    These special specks were all that was in sight ..
    Falling like snowflakes,
    Until a blanket of white, had vanquished the night.
    And a pure carpet had covered the ground in those white wisps ..
    .. I bet Bing Crosby never dreamt of seeing a White Christmas like this.


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    One countries Heroes, are anothers cold-hearted Killers.
    The victims are often the innocents, who have had to witness the deaths of their loved ones through wars they don’t agree with.


    Write A Story Using These Four Characters
    The Killer
    The Victim
    The Witness
    The Hero

    Calm before the Storm

    Finding Pleasure In Pain


    The worst thing in this world, next to anarchy, is government.
    Henry Ward Beecher

    Anger is a killing thing: It kills the man who angers, for each rage leaves him less than he had been before- it takes something from him.
    Louis L'Amour

    A man begins cutting his wisdom teeth the first time he bites off more than he can chew.
    Herb Caen

    Peace cannot be achieved through violence, it can only be attained through understanding.
    Ralph Waldo Emerson
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  5. Kryptikal

    Kryptikal Soulstice.

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  6. Vigil

    Vigil Im infinite consciousness

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    Best of Both Worst Worlds

    The worst thing in this world, next to anarchy, is government.
    Henry Ward Beecher


    Is it freedom of the press or freedom to oppress?
    We're given multiple choices to fool us we have a freedom to a guess.
    We depend on news anchors who only pretend to know
    and they can't contend the flow of the current so we get send below.
    The bar is set high but the trends are low,
    so the gap is somewhere between head to toe,
    and its being filled with tabloids and soundbites
    that get on-air but never get off the ground right.
    Broadcasters joke when they say "lets procede to a slow feed"
    cause they shove it down your throat like roast beef at coast speed.
    The upcoming election is a race for your seat
    and Right vs.Wrong are neck and neck
    but one's a giraffe with a closed lead.
    Info is short for infomercial and knowledge is forbidden out of spite
    in a nation of screens, everything gets screened & hidden out of sight.
    If the media is a test on our culture then its scoring F's
    the nation's glass is half empty
    & most of it is from the GOP elephant in the room thats pouring sweat.
    The left is ignoring the threat, unaware there's more to the debt
    and they bit the hand that dealt its cards so its not winning anymore of the bet.
    This generation is witnessing the consequences of incompetence
    in a nation that's without borders yet the majority is on the fence.
    War is nonsense and last week it concurred to me
    that countries don't make nukes for their security
    but instead for their insecurities. Its obscurity.
    Congress is filled with rats trying to prey on birds
    politicians steal bases cause they've done dirt & are afraid to stay on first.
    They take us for a spin but never bring us back around the curb
    its time they start getting off their high horses & come back down to earth.
    Every leader today is a tiger on his toe trying to see his turn
    if these deceitful liars put their feet to the fire only then they'll feel the burn.
    But the real concern is this nation is beneath itself,
    demeaning its people's health while leaching to keep its receding wealth.
    In this age of unprecedented credit rate the stress is great
    yet we wait and let every threat to penetrate.
    The heroes that will set us straight from the line that seperates
    will be the leaders who are willling to cross the head of state.
    And the words that will set us loose will be the ones,
    that's said with weight.
    It's not time to medicate but meditate
    cause a nation thats in the state of awaked has met its fate.
    This nation defeated child labor, slavery and segregation
    its a sleeping giant & these neocons can only test its patience.
    Its future is high-tech, green techonlogy and peaceful resolution
    it doesn't need a revolution to achieve its evolution.
    This nation's mood is at fever pitch
    all it needs now is good leadership.
    America is the best of both worst worlds, the east and the west
    its second to none, home to the least and the best.
    A nation unbreakable, based on anarchy and government
    holding it self together with the help from all of its elements.



    The best thing in this world, is anarchy next to government.
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  7. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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    Baron, several of your topics don't directly tie into your piece, but okay. Lol, I also see that you have an ending statement at the end of your verse. I thought you said that was unfair. Isn't that why you bitched to Pent last week? Well, despite of that, this verse was pretty nicely written. The flow was on point and some of the lines were developed nicely. Not enough imagery for the pics you used to display the colorful schemes of a nuclear war. The narration got boring as it lacked that aspect to paint the visions you provided with the pics. Pretty nice though.
    Vigil, your piece had a lot of nice lines when going over them one at a time, but most of it is saying the same thing. There's some redundancy in your verse that just repeats what your saying in different witty lines. It was poetical in an advocate for political freedom way, but conveying some different ideas of the government that follow your scheme would of helped develop your subject better.

    Vote Baron

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  8. Insanevillian

    Insanevillian STILL in CHARGE

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    [hide]two politically charged pieces at the top of this RSTL heap...

    baron mynd, i think i gave u your first defeat way back in the day... lol... but anyways, i enjoyed your piece as it was told straight forward with alot of multis thrown at me and it was enjoyable... i liked the foretelling of what the future could bring, even though it is dark, it may open up some more eyes to what could happen...

    vigil, me being an activist, i really enjoyed your piece as well, even though it didnt say anything i didnt know, but i do agree with. i think i would have enjoyed your piece more if... u exuded more emotion. its like your just TELLING me your ideals, but your not putting your anger or feeling into as much as i like and ive followed your writing since u were teamed up with the HOUSE in the tag tourney and before that... so it makes it a dryer read, even though it could still beat most of the kids in the rstl today...

    vote baron mynd, because i liked the story over the essay... simply put. but this one will probably be close...[/hide]
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  9. R3DRUM

    R3DRUM Bloody Mary Jane

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    [hide] ima go wit mynd damn his shit was so much more deep to me and went good wit tha pics...vigil u had ur ups n downs, him too but more ups...good match tho[/hide]
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  10. SacriFICE

    SacriFICE TRUspeak

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    Mr. Mynd: Holy fuck... another perfectly written piece. This however i easily your best piece as far as construction and rhyming progression throughout the piece. Your word power is incredible, you truly do make every word count... not even I can do that shit ALL THE TIME, but it just feels like a flawless account of your ideas when I read your pieces. You hold nothing back, utilize almost every rhyming in the scheme you're using, and every single image is CRISP as can be... Not only that, but every single topic you posted up there seemed to fit. Brilliant piece.

    Vigil: A good piece here... a statement about government, which is funny because I almost wrote a similar type of piece this week... I'm glad I didn't now. Anyway... it starts off flowing nicely, cool rhyming and cool ideas in your words, then toward the middle it becomes more specific, yet less appealing as far as the rhyming... One thing I notice about your pieces if that you start off flowing nicely, with decent syllable placements, but then I feel like you stop caring about how the verse reads and you start to concentrate all on content, which is ok, because you rhyme well and the flow seems to not go too crazy.. but alot of times when I'm reading your stuff, I feel like I'm reading too different writers from beginning to end, yet still you. Anyway, enough about that... Good piece, good ideas and good presentation for the most part.. But you met one of the better pieces I've read in this league since I started observing...

    Vote: Mr. Mynd - It's going to take alot to dethrone Mynd at this point, if he keeps up this quality of writing, if he's always written like this, whoever gave him his 2 losses deserved it, because like I said in my critique, I have never found any significant opinion altering flaws in any of Mynd's writing.. it is seemingly flawless, concise and a joy to read... too bad your ass doesn't actually rap (I assume this is true), I'd love to have that kind of writing on one of my tracks.
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  11. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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    i dont wanna be rude or blunt... even tho i respect both of you... but i read Mynd's verse.. and then I read Vigil's verse... and i see an obvious one-over-the-other rhyme....

    Mynd - amazing... colorful, very well-depicted, imagery is very high... well narrated however... from a psychological point of view (being south korean) not everything you describe as far as the nature of the north korean soldier/general is really all that accurate... i dont know if that itself dampens the whole overall exhibit of this rhyme... but mechanics-wise... it was very convincing and interesting to read

    Vigil .... i think the topic for this made it a bit harder for me to digest .... i think the way you presented the topic did no real significance in carrying you over mynd's verse.... its nothing negatory on your part.... i felt mynd was too one-step-above on his presentation alone... that alone convinced me that MYND gets my VOTE....

    no disrespect its more of who wanted this the most... and i felt that while your on par with content, narration.... it didnt drive me enough from an emotional level in which MYND did just that.[/hide]
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  12. Mr. Mynd

    Mr. Mynd The British Guy

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    Great battle Vigil, UPPING!
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  13. Lord Notik

    Lord Notik The Mind is a Scary Place

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    [hide]Vigil
    Your verse was pretty vivid man, imagery was definitly the strong point of your verse.i got caught up in your flow a few times though, seemed like you would use too many syllables in certain places...but you approached the topic very well...nice showing for a match of this calibur.

    Baron i think you utterly destroyed this piece...from the flow to the content..shit i could spit that on any beat it seems...i liked how you used the picture and then mixed in the quotes at the end to kind of underlay the tone of the piece...very well done. on the overall enjoymet tip...VOTE BARON[/hide]
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  14. MrMister

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    [HIDE]vote - Mynd

    Mynd - this started of kinda weird didnt really pull me in
    but after the first several lines I got into it and how you went back
    and forth with making it look as if you were talking in the past tense
    and then went back to the future tense kept it interesting

    Vigil - this was a nice piece I liked how you did it
    you made it look real bad but at the same time made it look
    good and that you should be happy to be there but make sure
    you see what is going on I liked it what stood out most
    was the flow and how it read away this was a nice piece

    This was a real nice battle both came on point
    your skill level is damn near the same so it just comes down to
    the feeling of the story and how it was written and while with writing
    vigil took this with just pure enjoyment I have to go with mynd
    so there you go[/HIDE]
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  15. TheReturn

    TheReturn Life of the Party

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    [hide]Daaaaaaamn, lemme read these again...

    Mr. Mynd:
    Enjoyed this verse a whole lot, I'm actually writing a Cause-Effect paper on the after effects of a nuclear attack on America, so this was pretty cool to see. The writing was solid as always:

    .. Killing hundreds of thousands,
    And leaving New York looking like their own troubled surroundings.

    Those ‘merely’ poisoned grasped to the hope, of what praying could do ..
    Willing to chance a religion they never believed in,
    If it could save them from doom.

    The crisp cinders waltzed the nights sky ..
    .. over what America would later call “Ground One” -
    But not at this precise time.
    As one with the wind,
    These special specks were all that was in sight ..
    Falling like snowflakes,
    Until a blanket of white, had vanquished the night.


    Loved all of those lines, awesome imagery and everything was just solid.



    Vigil:
    Well, I said I hadn't seen much of your work in my interview and damn this was a good piece to be judged on. Not as eloquently written as Baron's, but the message was certainly here. I'm not usually as keen on government verses because the topic is beaten into the ground, but this was a very nice flip to the topic, that ending line really sealed the deal for me.

    In this age of unprecedented credit rate the stress is great
    yet we wait and let every threat to penetrate.
    The heroes that will set us straight from the line that seperates
    will be the leaders who are willling to cross the head of state.
    And the words that will set us loose will be the ones,
    that's said with weight.

    America is the best of both worst worlds, the east and the west
    its second to none, home to the least and the best.
    A nation unbreakable, based on anarchy and government
    holding it self together with the help from all of its elements.

    The best thing in this world, is anarchy next to government.


    Those were your strong points in my opinion.


    Damn, this is a hard as fuck battle to vote on. Baron I loved your verse, but at the same time I think you really overdid it with all the topics you incorporated. Some of them didn't pertain to the topic as well as other and I think it would have been alot more effective if you had just used the two pictures. And even the first picture, although it is a nuclear explosion, the part of the picture that makes it effective is the peace sign, and I didn't see much in your verse about peace. I think you went kind of overboard on the topic selection, and though the part about the 4 characters to the story was dope, it didn't rhyme and really seemed kind of Fold-ish, but apparently that's legal. Anyways, I think you would have been better off just using a single topic because some of them were just overdraft to make it look like a lot of topics were used when they didn't pertain very well to the piece itself. Vigil on the other hand used one topic, flipped it really well at the end and delivered a solid message in his piece although it wasn't as well written necessarily. I just felt like Vigil's was more deserving here, dope pieces by both, it just came down to a message behind the piece and a dope flip against a very well written piece with some unused topics that left alittle to be desired. Like I said I have to give this to Vigil, props to both on a nice championship battle though.[/hide]
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  16. ConstantFlows

    ConstantFlows New Member

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    im not allowed to vote in this battle, so ill vote somewhere else, peeping
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  17. Got Life?

    Got Life? Resident Megalomaniac

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    Baron...the flow was solid and I like what you did with the story...it progressed pretty well dealing with relevant circumstances...not the best i've read from you, but not a bad verse at all...

    Vigil...i'm honestly just bored of these pieces from you...kind of like Immortal Technique...great artists, but the subject matter just eventually gets bland...i'd like to see you expand your realm and see something fresh from you...

    Vote = Baron for being "fresher"?

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  18. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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