"Call It What You Want...It's All Life To Me""

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  1. Definit_

    Definit_ P0ETiiCLiiCHE'

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    If it wasn’t for bad luck
    I’d have no luck at all

    Plus I struggle to practice what I preach
    & my congregation of words
    aren’t all saints, so I seek confessions,
    secret blessings, where I go to the
    booth to retreat aggressions

    I’m just sick of being judged
    by “The Judge”.
    So just spare me the verdict
    cause I’ve already heard it,
    about a million different times reworded

    & It’s getting harder to drive
    cause there’s too many signs
    sending me in the wrong directions.
    & it’s not by accident that I’m caught
    in between lanes,
    on the highway to…

    Hell, even the blinds-folded
    the cards they were dealt.
    yet im all in, betting with cards
    that are off-suit.
    cause frankly, I’m just not suit-able
    to attend my funeral all casual

    & I’m starting to get sick of this life
    Doubt this Dr.’ll Phil my prescription
    for this coffin.
    & often times they’ll proceed
    with the Silent Treatment.
    They say it’s good for the blacks.

    It’s hard living on this earth.
    Everyone including gravity
    wants to bring me down

    I’m just trying to fit-in to this life
    & every store I’ve gone to
    never seems to have my size.
    It’s either I’m too tall
    or it’s just the waist of my time.
    Doesn’t even matter cause my
    life doesn’t measure up to
    what it’s suppose to be.

    & come to think,
    I’m not a writer,
    I’m a biter, easily inspired
    by the next mans piece.
    So, call it what you want,
    it’s all life to me

    Bless.

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  2. B-Nasty

    B-Nasty New Member

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    Hell, even the blinds-folded
    the cards they were dealt.
    yet im all in, betting with cards
    that are off-suit.
    cause frankly, I’m just not suit-able
    to attend my funeral all casual


    Pardon my language, but I fucking loved that part. The "word play", if you may, involved there just had me going "That's sick". Overall I loved this piece. I'll probably come around and read it a second time just 'cause...It's one of those :)

    Peace Out & God Bless
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  3. Definit_

    Definit_ P0ETiiCLiiCHE'

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    Appreciated..


    Bless.
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  4. shrek

    shrek New Member

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    Im actualy tryin to quote which part was my favorate... c to me when you cant quote your favorate lines it would mean the poems complete! I enjoyed everything about it but mostly I enjoyed your play with words expecially the part about life never measuring up to what its supose to be. good work man
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  5. Definit_

    Definit_ P0ETiiCLiiCHE'

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    Respect.. Jump
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  6. Nebulaz

    Nebulaz fear God, not man

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    Definit, Definit, Definit. Absolutely brilliant. Bookmarked actually. I could not believe what I had read when, during and after I read it. The kind of clever, witting puns you pumped in are the kind that you normally would hear/read in a hiphop verse not a poem. They were literally so fresh I smelt good after this piece. I am so inspired by this I'm go write something.
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  7. eatemup

    eatemup New Member

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    I'd have to agree with ^^
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  8. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    I’m just trying to fit-in to this life
    & every store I’ve gone to
    never seems to have my size.
    It’s either I’m too tall
    or it’s just the waist of my time.
    Doesn’t even matter cause my
    life doesn’t measure up to
    what it’s suppose to be.


    beautiful...i really loved this piece....and often times feel like this myself...hell im a bite too because im pretty sure im now inspired to write a peace

    mad love
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  9. Poetic Concept

    Poetic Concept New Member

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    You had word play written all over this piece in every stanza you used them differently to convey different meanings to words that would have been used but in different context in a more conventional poem good write
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  10. Definit_

    Definit_ P0ETiiCLiiCHE'

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    Thank You Veryy Much..Appreciated
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