"Brokenhearted" By RealMS & King Tony

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  1. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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    Brokenhearted
    By RealMS & King Tony
    3/20/04



    King Tony:
    U feel the sadness
    Deep inside your soul
    You feel tha ache in your heart
    Like it's been ripped out
    Like it's no longer a part
    Of your tormented body
    A thousand seas you've wept
    And now you're as dry as tha desert sands
    You've no more tears to cry
    You're trying to think clearly
    But your only thought is, why????????
    You're tha desolate run down building
    In tha busy city street
    Your hope has escaped u
    Yet u had the whole world at your feet
    People surround u
    But loneliness is your best friend
    Tha dark clouds that engulf u
    They get worse they never end


    RealMS:
    Bottled inside this capped jar, of agonized pain
    Focusing on what moved far, yet never left his place
    Words spoken sounded too foreign,
    Had to comprehend what it was I was hearing
    A minute later I gave up, no more,
    Tired of love appearing clear,
    Only to blind its true meaning
    Evading from what is real,
    Due to the lack of courage
    His heart has wonderful games to play,
    Including past experiences freely remerging
    Letting go of my pride,
    As another love released its beauty
    Lost track of mind state during the process,
    We're diverging, looking for separate healing
    I question "why,"
    Unprepared for the answer,
    If only you knew HOW MUCH,
    Your heart to me seemed more
    Essential than water, even air


    King Tony:
    that's what happens when tha heart dies
    when tha pain is too much to bear
    when tha strength you had is gone
    and there is only weakness there
    your cup that used to be full
    is now empty and has shattered
    that's what happens when tha heart dies
    when everything is gone that mattered


    RealMS:
    I can honestly say with no regret,
    Love took its turn to leave me hexed
    And where on the other side,
    I wonder how you've been
    'Cause happiness you display,
    Can't top sadness I fell in
    But I thought it was love I fell for,
    As soon as I chose, why did you change????????
    Didn't request much, just to share your love,
    I'm sure I'm still strong enough to dry from rain
    If I could only imagine, the drops hit like acid,
    Burning the open heart, until dissolving pain-
    Takes time for complete closure
    A transplant was denied,
    To replace what was in the beginning never stolen
    Because I gave you my heart,
    I just had no idea you'd think to return it,
    Much rather give it back broken
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  2. x_M@miChul@_x

    x_M@miChul@_x Just Do It

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    [​IMG] I really loved this :) Very good peice u guys Mad Love :)
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  3. WIkidd

    WIkidd always movin up

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    liked this alot..these are what most i liked about it
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  4. illpoetical

    illpoetical raising the bar everyday

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    you guys killed this, it was tight your styles intertwined really well, i liked the whole flow as well

    stay up
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  5. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    Damn...this piece was dope...can definetly relate to this! Both of you expressed your selves so well...each line, each stanza spoke wonders to me!! Damn this was truly truly beautiful!! Three thumbs up!!

    mad love
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  6. MarQuise*

    MarQuise* Can You Hear Me*

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    :frown: When i read the opener i was like :frown: not coz it wasnt well written, coz i felt a lil sad lol, it was a really good drop, as usual! the Collabo was hott, you fed off each other well.
    Much Lv
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  7. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    "that's what happens when tha heart dies
    when tha pain is too much to bear
    when tha strength you had is gone
    and there is only weakness there
    your cup that used to be full
    is now empty and has shattered
    that's what happens when tha heart dies
    when everything is gone that mattered"


    I felt that stanza so much, You have no idea how much I just felt that, every word in there seemed to be tailor made and injected into my life cause that's how feel right now. Damn man the emotion you bring is un matched.


    Anyways the whole piece was was fire, shit there after I exited this thread there is going to be smoke coming out of it, cause ya'll blew it up. 2 of the best new poets of the realm doing a crazy collabo, it's just crazy. I love both of your writing and to see it showcased together as one big collabo it's just unexplainable, the emotion level is so high in the words. Incredible job both of you, I think the poerty realm has been blessed by many just well written pieces lately, and this is just another one of them.


    Stay Up, Much Love, Peace
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  8. Oracle3301

    Oracle3301 New Member

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    real dope piece kinda different had a diferent feel from soome of tonys other shit i read, but a very nice piece....
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  9. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    lovely piece...eh been there...not a good feeling...

    oh and btw...king...cheer up dammit!lol
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  10. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    great.. thanks for sharing
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  11. Chimi

    Chimi Hate Me...

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    Man my nig King Tony really got some ill skills...lonely poet eh??...pure niceness..both came correct..ay tony holla at ya fem aight playa...pz...uppin for ya...
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  12. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    said it great...I thought I replied to this one already, but I guess not...anyhow, good drop...the both of you, Imma have to collab someday when I'm not running around like a chicken with my head cut off.
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  13. j$crILLa

    j$crILLa ~$crillVille~

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    "Didn't request much, just to share your love,
    I'm sure I'm still strong enough to dry from rain
    If I could only imagine, the drops hit like acid,
    Burning the open heart, until dissolving pain-"

    favortite part above^^^^

    great collab yall
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  14. da_after_shock

    da_after_shock New Member

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    felt like this many times...:( cheer up lil ones... lol

    both expressions were wonderful...really had me in the same mindframe as you guys..keep it up
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  15. blaquest

    blaquest Yodel At Me

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    king tony is my idol great peice
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  16. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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    it was great workin' with u realms. thankz everybody
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    Six TetraHydroCannibinol

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  18. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Could have sworn I replied to this already. I seem like all I see is King Tony's name posted up in the realm. Heartfelt piece you two came up with. Chemistry was pretty good.

    one luv
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