"Broken Dreams" - Spoken Word Track

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  1. Everglaze

    Everglaze Hip Hop Enthusiast

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  2. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    I like the loop. Very clear voice. Flows well. I'm really diggin' this. I'm going to have to hear it a lot more times to get it.
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  3. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    But your page sucks ass. VERY TALENTED POET, but you suck as a webmaster...

    Hit me up when that poetry album was done. I liek the two on your soundclick page, so I'll cop one.
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  4. tk2oo3

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    ok um.. your commin wit some half assed shit you aint doin soulfull poetry nor rappin.. it jus sounds bad.. DONT FLOW WIT THE BEAT.. your fuckin racin over it.. slow down & do it soulfully dont even try to land on snares or some shit.. find a different beat thats laid back or somethin if you cant jus go witout flowin on it.. if that was rap id say you oversqueeze your words.. bad whichever direction you go..
    sorry but i jus had to say this shit..
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  5. Everglaze

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    Thanks for your opinion, to each their own.

    And I wasn't rapping and yes you're right...I did half ass.
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  6. tk2oo3

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    i know i sounded harsh yesterday but um try taking a second for a breath every now & then & read wit emotion & variate how you say the words etc.. have some pauses.. thatll get your poetry to where it needs to be.. i think your on the right track tho.. jus seriously racin over rap beats aint good.. you sound like twista attemptin poetry [funny]
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