"Blind Love"

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  1. JBB Sports Man

    JBB Sports Man New Member

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    Its funny how all my beliefs could be torn in shambles…
    Burnt from beginning to end…
    Shredded to a fine point of every minuscule angle…
    When we said we’d be together, I’d figured for forever…
    Late nights beside each other…
    Eased each other’s burdens…
    And when one cried, the other leant a shoulder…
    I knew you inside and out…
    And vice versa…
    And each day was like Heaven, but its funny how Satan works huh?...
    Each tender kiss, and when I held u it was like holding an angel…
    Embraced in the warmth of two, away from life’s dangers…
    Away from temptations…
    Away from the sinners…
    Away from the people who were certain our love wouldn’t linger…
    And I’m not one to be naïve but of us I was sure…
    We knew not of what was impure…
    Only that true love was a disease which knew no cure…
    I wrote you poems and sheltered your pain…
    Stopped the tears which used to flow down your soul’s window pane…
    I never knew someone could make me smile so easily…
    Cuz one look at you and I felt all queasy…
    For once the mind and heart worked together as one…
    I put all my faith and trust in you, how could my heart be wrong?...
    Then that one weekend came…
    Under the influence, used and abused…
    By some dude who knew exactly what he was doing…
    Knew he’d be King and I’d be the one losing…
    And you were all helpless, your conscious was sleeping…
    A slave to this one man in desire of just one thing…
    So now in a few hours our whole lives were destroyed…
    My whole trust broken to pieces by one lone pathetic choice…
    And each day at night I can still hear your voice…
    Pleading and begging me to give you a second chance…
    To take you back…
    And let it slide…
    How you ruined us being forever for one other damn guy…
    And it pains me and hurts me whenever I think about you…
    So I dropped you…Lost you…
    For now I’m just a lost soul, all shaken and confused…
    I hate love, I can no longer need someone else…
    Because when I think I do, I remember how I felt…
    To get that call from you exposing the truth…
    No excuses…
    No excuses…
    No excuses…
    You ruined me with you…
    As well as my whole perception of true love and truth…​
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  2. J-Smooth

    J-Smooth The Smoothness Playa

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    yo! dog your peom was deep good job
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  3. MizzMaryJ

    MizzMaryJ New Member

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    I luv this!
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  4. quotive

    quotive 3

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    "How you ruined us being forever for one other damn guy…"

    *sighs*

    Yeah.. sad shit.
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  5. SmokeyMcBluff

    SmokeyMcBluff New Member

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    never cease to amaze me...again just ridiculous...i always feel the words when you write...i mean i feel your pain this time around...been here before...an hour of your bliss is a lifetime of my pain huh?...this shit here moved me somethin serious...

    the beauty pain can bring...as seen here...gimmie more.
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  6. BrokenSoul8604

    BrokenSoul8604 Apparently Emotionless

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    "And each day was like Heaven, but its funny how Satan works huh?..."

    indeed...true words.....

    painful....i feel ya, bruh....

    God Bless
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  7. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    ...................................................................

    .............ouch

    this hit waaaay to close to home for me.....I can relate with this poem big time yo

    like how you brought this in....how beautiful love is at first....caught up in the moments....the power of passion....and the blind love speaking of being together forever blah blah....only lieing to ourselfs

    And the ending was cold....I myself can relate because I can never look at love the same anymore

    I know we gotta move on but still....ya know what I mean

    thanks for sharing this with us....this sounded very personal

    PEACE AND GODBLESS
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  8. Sole Sovereign

    Sole Sovereign Hungry But Never Starving

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    Your Poem was great here, I wrote a poem dealing with the same shit not too long ago, was too personal I felt to post, but after reading this, i'll share it with you.. since we're partners and all

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    To them…
    You aint nothing but a party favor, 
    get you fucked up drop you off and call you later
    whether small or greater, their love aint the same
    They don’t debate your name with mine and their hearts aint stained
    With love and it don’t break when you arent around
    And they don’t talk to death without making sounds
    
    To you…
    I guess im just a sniveling bitch
    With nothing but dreams of living it filthy and rich
    But shits a miss cause im calling out and thinking of quits
    Cause breakfast aint the same if you aint fixing my grits
    Why the fuck did you do it? You said they were worth it
    So I guess to you.. this man is totally worthless
    
    To me …
    The sun sets and rises and each day is filled with surprises
    Of your smiles n niceness, All I can see is your teeth’s pearly whiteness
    And the shadows carry your likeness, especially now since your dark and cold as isis
    No thoughts for me, no hope for us…. never thought I’d be treated with trifeness
    
    To them Im To you What you are to me
    And I can say right now you’ve broken me whole heartedly
    Apart from free, enslaved to my pain
    Staying in rain, never to know the joys of holding again
    The one that was to me everything you wasn’t to them
    Just know you’re the one who brought about the end….
    
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  9. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    This was a real heartfelt piece man. The pain you gave of was mos def felt, espeically to those who can relate to this story. Think the ending was really cold.

    "Stopped the tears which used to flow down your soul’s window pane…"

    ^My favorite line man.


    One luv
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  10. JBB Sports Man

    JBB Sports Man New Member

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    thanks yall...appreciate it...
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  11. JBB Sports Man

    JBB Sports Man New Member

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    yo forword, ur piece was very compatible with mine..nice work...
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