Beige

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  1. Cereal_Killer

    Cereal_Killer no ESCAPE

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    I can not breathe, which means
    I can not sigh
    Why does my chest feel tight
    I want to die
    It starts to fester deep
    So deep inside
    Lightening the pressure
    Clouding my mind
    Feelings have diminished
    As time stands still
    Only for a minute
    My life’s fulfilled
    Then another wave breaks
    Shaking my sins
    Into a state of rape
    Called submission
    My body doesn’t work
    I’m tired, I hurt
    I want the next high to hit
    Instead of flirt
    So I sit and I wait
    But it’s too late
    I’ve been struck by this beige
    I’ll die its slave

    Nausea

    Nausea

    Makes me vomit

    I’m sick to my stomach

    Yet I love it
    test
  2. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    Hmmmm...you have stumped me on this..

    I'm feeling the flow..but I am still kinda lost.

    Help me please!
    test
  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    remember the rules next time : )
    test
  4. flowz

    flowz warrior

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    yuhh all this really has is a nice flow thats all i see its alright 1
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  5. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    i really want to close this, but since malik left it open i will 2...

    this was nice..i always liked the way u put your pieces together..very uniqe

    Only for a minute
    My life’s fulfilled

    ...made me think

    nice job here man
    test
  6. Cereal_Killer

    Cereal_Killer no ESCAPE

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    ok i'll break it down,
    its someone dieing from heroin or as some call it beige.
    test
  7. InTheStars

    InTheStars Reflective

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    Well I have never experienced anything like that...but nice drop
    test
  8. babyangel17

    babyangel17 New Member

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    yea that was good the flow ..and i understood it ..the flow was good
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  9. quotive

    quotive 3

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    This was cool... didn't get it until you explained it. lol.

    Cool drop, keep writing man.
    test
  10. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    good writing man, i know about that beige!!
    unfortunantely my sister almost overdosed on it...........

    peace
    test
  11. Cereal_Killer

    Cereal_Killer no ESCAPE

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    thats all, sorry to hear that 2short
    test
  12. InFiNiT_EEE

    InFiNiT_EEE dreaming out loud

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    had no clue bout these new rules till ljus now...

    this one was kool had a good rythm to it...its true, u can luv somethin even if thing that makes u sick...
    test
  13. kyza soza

    kyza soza This way up.

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    I really liked this piece, i dunno bout the other people.. but i thought it captured the essence of a "junkies" habit quite nicely (no, im not one lol).. and i just love the last line

    Yet I love it

    I know a few drug addicts and i know that they always want to get off of the drg but they actually love the feeling too much..

    Dope drop man, im feeling it.
    test
  14. Cereal_Killer

    Cereal_Killer no ESCAPE

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    thanx to clear it all up i've never done it either i just know someone who has so i researched it..
    test
  15. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    ok, not only did you reply three times to your own thread, but there were several reminders to remember the rules...so, gotta do, what I gotta do...
    test
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