Back with a new track "Breakin me Down"...dope track over YoungRider beat

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  1. Envizioneri

    Envizioneri Gifted n' Prolific

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    Check out this new jawn from me and my boy (together we called Ill Grafix). This Young Rider beat inspired a really deep track. It's hot, so peep that ish.
    I do the intro and first 8 bars
    Imosi does the second 8 bars (after that yall should know who's who)

    http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=246535

    I return favors.

    Peace,
    Envizion
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  2. RiggsofHTI

    RiggsofHTI New Member

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    i liked it...the beat was hot real soulful..flow was on point,lyrics were cool ,good song..lil advice though if u wanna attract more people..make it a lil more fast pace
    besides that it was a good song..keep up the good wrk

    -Riggs
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  3. Envizioneri

    Envizioneri Gifted n' Prolific

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    I got some fast-paced stuff, too....don't fear bro....that's comin
    thanks for the feed
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  4. littleslimlocc

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    bookmarked this, im headin to bed, will hit this tomorrow
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  5. Envizioneri

    Envizioneri Gifted n' Prolific

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  6. Diztinkt

    Diztinkt New Member

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    Returning The Fave...


    Sample On The Beat Is Nice, First Dude,,,,,Flow Sounds Solid, Lyrics Are Cool, Topic Is Obviously Good, Very Relatable. Overall, Decent Track, A Lil More Quick Pace Woulda Sounded Mad Nice Too But This Track Came Off Pretty Nice, Keep Doing It!

    ~!oNe!~
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  7. Slums

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    this is cool...everything sound cool..But i aint feelin the hook...juss kinda annoying..othe then that..good shit..
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  8. Envizioneri

    Envizioneri Gifted n' Prolific

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    when you say you don't like the hook, do you mean, you don't like the rotating effect I put on it or the hook in itself?? That rotating effect was a last-second decision, and I'm still no sure how I feel about it myself
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  9. SKeeM 2

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    i think i head this beat before..if not sample or suttin..

    first dude lyrics were strate..flow was ight...like ya 2nd verse better

    2nd dude, i think flow could be lil better...its not bad though, i also thitnk a lil more emotion could be used

    feelin the hook...tracks ight not bad

    stay up
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  10. SPuL

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    beat is pretty nice really liking.......


    first dude, i like your voice. You got good prescene on the mic, good delivery. Flow was coo..... lyrics were ok, could have been better but still nice, nah mean? Overall on track kept it solid everything there really

    second dude, ehh ain't like your flow too much, could be upped, but still aiight. Your lyrics pretty coo, upp the emotion......... overall it was aiight

    Hook, nice catchy liked it

    overall, a pretty nice track. Good listen. not bad job fellas. 8/10
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  11. ceson

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    topic:was nice yo...
    1st dude-delivery was nice...sounds kinda like a christan rapper cause of the delivery n the topic...flow is coo...would sound nicer wita faster pace...good tho
    2nd dude-sounds alil sleep...kinda monotoned....lyrics is coo..flow is ight....wake up alil bit...

    beat is nice except that lil voice gets annoyin afta a while....hook is coo tho..nice panin

    overall this was coo...2nd dude could hype up alil bit...but this was a ight joint.....

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  12. pressence

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    1st dude good delivery flows alright... i like the beat alot ... 2nd dudes cool needs alittle more energy. hook is cool but is seems panned or somethin. 2nd vearse from firt dude is better then the the first .2nd dudes 2nd needs more energy again but lyrics are good so it evens out. hook gets better towards the end
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  13. Envizioneri

    Envizioneri Gifted n' Prolific

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    thanks yall for the feedback.....
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  14. C B G

    C B G Eastside Villain

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    The beat is hard
    I like this shit even though here and there the flows from the doods was ehh
    I dunno but it reminds me of some old school shit nahmean
    The hook wasn't agreein wit me at first but as I listen it started to go well so good shit

    stay up
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  15. BZTactics

    BZTactics Up and Coming

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    Thanx for the feedback dog, just hittin ya back....beats nice and chill, first guy came proper, nothin amazing, but it did the job. Second guy sounds confused on how hard he wants to come on the track, he sounds aggresive, than soft, vox are a bit too loud on the hook, I'd say so on the verses too. Third verse I'm feelin the most so far. This track is real, so so far I'm feelin it. 4th verse, not feelin how you change your voice for the end rhymes. Pretty good, stay up man.
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  16. Envizioneri

    Envizioneri Gifted n' Prolific

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    thanks for the input yall
    uppz
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  17. littleslimlocc

    littleslimlocc New Member

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    i'm back motha fucka! lol

    lemme peep dis jizoint


    beats illy - that vocal sample is wickid - definetly diggin that, strings are sickening too - first cats decent, a bit simplistic and lacks some STRONG presence, but decent - second, sounds strange - not feelin the voice - wants to growl a bit in spots seems like - hook is decent - dont know why it seems to fade though

    not a bad cut fellas

    keep droppin em
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  18. DJ C-Boss

    DJ C-Boss LEGALIZE POLIGAMY

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    phat track man

    i like the guitar on this beat alot

    your deliverys and flow on this is nice, could use a little less drastic panning on the vocals during chorus and turn volume down a bit only on chorus though

    good shit man holla back


    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=955505
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  19. Envizioneri

    Envizioneri Gifted n' Prolific

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    thanks yall....I'll return the link
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  20. Envizioneri

    Envizioneri Gifted n' Prolific

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    uppz....dropped mad feed over the past few, return some favors
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