**around the way**

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  1. synical

    synical Blow Gang/ESP

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    She from around the way
    i ran into this bad lil shorty just the other day
    what can i say
    i wanna know her name
    she gave me conversation but shorty wont give me play
    but im a find a way she from around the way

    i seen her at the club and met her at the bar
    her body looking right shorty dressed like a star
    i said excuse me miss i seen u from a far
    my name sosa i wanna know who u are
    she said my name michelle from new rochelle
    im diggin ur style and i know u well
    i said... what u mean how u know me well
    she said u all about urself it aint hard to tell
    with them faragomo glasses and prada shoes
    polo shirt on who u tryna fool
    i said u got me confused with them other dudes
    i tried to come humble but u kind of rude
    why u frontin ma u know u like these shoes
    these shades and this shirt, u can wipe ur drool
    she tried to play it cool but i ruined her mood
    little did i know i would see her soon
    test
  2. Chase Murda

    Chase Murda hostile enviroment

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    this was a nice track short but long enuff to get the point across good job son
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  3. synical

    synical Blow Gang/ESP

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    good looks b
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  4. bagglad

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    wow just too short but excellent rhyming dude good imagtry keep up the good works make a part two on this one man i was getting off into this one for real
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  5. synical

    synical Blow Gang/ESP

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    good looks on the reply i appreciate it
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  6. Radical Sun

    Radical Sun New Member

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    Def. a cool story man.
    Could have been a bit longer like they said but then ppl don't look at it cuz it's too long. Double edged sword sh!t.
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  7. synical

    synical Blow Gang/ESP

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    thank you for showing love i appreciate it, this is a 16 bar verse and chorus from a song i did
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  8. Ithaca City

    Ithaca City New Member

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    post the rest of the song that shit is hot
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  9. the omega man

    the omega man so, it goes

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    cool little story, nothing spectacular but it was alright...keep doin you
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  10. Ace the Prophet

    Ace the Prophet A Prophet to the Game

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    Kinda what omega said. Was cool for what it was. I would say try some better word choice to rhyme with. To me they seemed all pretty basic, but that can work in your favor too at times. Flow was there. Could maybe use a little work but you definitely got some flow to this. Definitely could see this as a club track so everything would fit well with that. It was cool, i'd just say tweek some things here and there and upgrade your word choice. Keep shit up and keep elevating bro. 1
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  11. synical

    synical Blow Gang/ESP

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    thanks for the love
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