Are You Poetic?

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by AzeussuezA, Oct 3, 2003.

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  1. AzeussuezA

    AzeussuezA The Mods Are Gay

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    What is this poem about?


    I spit flames my thought dream mames pains within the brain's veins.
    Test me for evidently my history's mysteries isn't evidence enough.
    I call your bluff then snuff your egotistical stuff and bury myself within the promiscuous muff.
    Scuff your soul with just one role of my dice like lice I infiltrate your satin sheets.
    And join you for a dance......


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  2. Blunted Reality

    Blunted Reality Still Blunted on Reality

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    you got an ill rhyme scheme...loved the word play and multis...keep it up.
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  3. AzeussuezA

    AzeussuezA The Mods Are Gay

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    But did you figure out what it's about?
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  4. Blunted Reality

    Blunted Reality Still Blunted on Reality

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    lol...damn I didn't even see the question. It looks to me its about flat out fuckin' but I could be wrong since most of the time thats all I'm thinking about anyway.
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  5. AzeussuezA

    AzeussuezA The Mods Are Gay

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    Nah

    LoL

    It's not about fuckin
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  6. mavrik...

    mavrik... Lyrically Transparent ...

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    ill flow my mans ... is it about dreaming about a girl or something of that nature??? sort of vague ... maybe a little to short to get the point accross? but still, it's nice ... tell us what the subject is!! lol
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  7. eatemup

    eatemup New Member

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    I would say it is about gambling but then again like mavrik... said it is kinda too short to tell at least to me all in all it is a nice drop
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  8. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    death? i dont know maybe if it was a lil longer i'll be able to understand it more..but i'm seein death for some apparent reason

    one luv
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  9. unspoken1

    unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen

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    Crabs??? anyway i like it...nicejob on this man
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  10. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    nice peace right here something i would write deep and to the point nice bro but yea i think somethin about maybe gambaling? or something .
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  11. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    a creator/destroyer

    dunno
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  12. shaztik

    shaztik New Member

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    Power....and love???? nah i dunno..nice though
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  13. Sun_Flower

    Sun_Flower Bluez By Loves Eye

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    Not sure would like to know. Nice piece!
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  14. Royallyraggid

    Royallyraggid New Member

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    Test me for evidently my history's mysteries isn't evidence enough.
    I call your bluff then snuff your egotistical stuff and bury myself within the promiscuous muff.



    these lines were tight...nice rhyme scheme for sure...
    diggin it..
    i cant really say whats it about either from such a short drop but maybe somethin about like the muse you use to produce your words?...thats kinda what i was thinkin...
    regardless...nice spit...

    peace.
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  15. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    I got a couple ideas. But none that i find substantial. Maybe i could dig deeper, but i don't feel like doing that right now.

    It feel akward once or twice. The 'chains' between words a bit rusty/broken.

    A fairly intense piece. A short burst, which was good to read.

    ...resp...
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  16. marc antony

    marc antony It's all about da ass....

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    Puts on thinking cap..........

    maybe it was a callout to his own self asking if he himslef was poetic????

    so he challenged himself in verse to say that he was calling his own bluff to himself...

    thinkin cap bursts into flames and short circuits.....
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  17. AzeussuezA

    AzeussuezA The Mods Are Gay

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    It's a personal attack.
    (THIS) is how I battle freestyle which is why I told Salar he can't fuck with me when it comes to battlin.



    "I spit flames my thought dream mames pains within the brain's veins."

    (This line right here means my ambitions and what not "mame" or dismember the pains that I deal with day to day within my mind..
    In other words "Poetry" is my release")

    "Test me for evidently my history's mysteries isn't evidence enough."

    (Basically I'm sayin right here: "You think I'm playin? Test me...I'll leave you dizzy within the maze of rhymes)

    "I call your bluff then snuff your egotistical stuff and bury myself within the promiscuous muff."

    (At this point I'm sayin I'll call his bluff and take his slut of a woman too.)

    "Scuff your soul with just one role of my dice like lice I infiltrate your satin sheets.
    And join you for a dance......"

    (Right here I'm sayin, that I used to attack people's beliefs and devour their spirit just because I could if they chose to play my game of "craps"..."like lice I infiltrate your satin sheets" is a subliminal attack on an individual's lady....I'm basically sayin "I could fuck your lady anytime I want" while at the same time sayin she's diseased...

    Join you for a dance is another way of sayin:
    You want a war, ight. Let's do it.
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  18. marc antony

    marc antony It's all about da ass....

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    i got it right....i win

    (claps and takes well deserved bow)
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  19. marc antony

    marc antony It's all about da ass....

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    O......never mind (shamely slumps shoulders and saunters off)
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  20. NAiT

    NAiT myself

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    you should check out the Micranots track, "Analyze".

    I-Self-Divine breaks down himself in one of the most honest intelligent tracks I've ever heard. Get the whole Obelisk Movements album if you don't have it.
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