"Are You My Enemy" - BY: Epic Savier/ILL Poppy

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  1. Epic Savier

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    "Are You My Enemy" By:Epic Savier/ILL Poppy

    I have been told, keep your friends close, an enemies even closer,
    Yet i've tried, an been unable to keep my composure,
    But then I look around, of my friend to be, really a enemy,
    An see all the wrong things they've said to me,
    "Kick his head", "Hit that shit", "I got your back",
    The same 1's who wasn't there when the cops was dispatched,
    I kept my silence, names were said as much by flying people as I spoke,
    The same 1 who said, hand it to him for $20, its just soap....

    But friend are you my enemy?

    I've walked with you all my life, made decisions based on yours,
    Yet i've gotten shot at, nearly stabbed, an placed behind locked doors,
    Have gotten drunk past function, smoked beyond remembrance, amongst other's,
    You have decided to steal, rob, an fight with both brothers,
    Almost killed, plead guilty, hurt people, commit robbery,
    Yet gave my all to those I care about, hopes still inside a me,

    But conscience, are you my enemy?

    You have let our streets be stricken with poverty, young die young,
    Ordered murder to a murderer, guilty!!, the guy hung,
    Sent battle ships, to battle ships, only to wage war,
    Who die under your order, reason: the few men there being brave for,
    Have stripped some of there speech, an encased them in walls unjustly,
    Streets collapse, bridges grow old an begin rusting,
    The common cold still uncured, studies have stopped on the vaccine,
    But still the chain of commerce stays alive, an most are civil in actions,

    But president, are you my enemy?

    You have given us light, given us the reason to know right from wrong,
    Given us intelligence, a environment, an gift of life prolonged,
    Along with war, death, leaders chosen who kill at will,
    Still hope, the power to say nope, an beautiful hills in brazil,
    Given us love, desire, ambition, an still famine an plague,
    War trench's, prison systems, las vegas, whole city gambling away,
    Chaos, Silence, Tolerance, billions of other species,
    Bombs, solar systems, tree's, an even Mitsubishi's,

    But god, are you my enemy?
    But friend, are you my enemy?
    But conscience, are you my enemy?
    But president, are you my enemy?
    Or self, are you my enemy?
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  2. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Dawg, reply to others and the others will show you more love, trust.. But anyway, I believe all your pieces are just completely different each and every time, which keeps me reading and up to date on your drops. This one meant something to me, because I felt at times as if my friends were the enemies and I needed someone else to look to for guidance and love, na'mean? Plus, I must respect the way you stay onpoint throughout your piece and once you milk one for all it's worth, you move on to the next subject of the same area of what you're trying to talk about, feel me? This piece was like that, once you just filled up the meaning with all that was building up inside of you, you moved to the next enemy of sorts. Great piece, indeed. My blessings..
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  3. Epic Savier

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    I read other's, they just loose my interest here an there so I dont want to reply with only reading half the poem. An I prefer longer poems, where you get to read/imagine more.. an I havent really seen many of them around here, the 1's I have peeped have been really short.

    But my pieces, I try an make each 1 completely different. Before I write the poem, I think of a concept to use, an usually it comes with in seconds once I decide I feel like making a poem. So with all the stuff out there in the world, history ect. ect. I will never run out of material. I have a new form I will be trying out later as well....

    So thanks for the replies, I appreciate the feedback.
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