apologiz'n

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  1. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    Why do you look so discontented?
    Am I not what you expected?
    Am I too short, too tall,
    too big, too small?

    I Apologize

    Am I too blunt and outspoken?
    because my spirits aren't broken.
    Am I too loud, adn proud,
    too weird, too feared?

    I Apologize.

    I'm sorry you were born without
    a mind large enough to comprehend
    the tangiblility of this world.
    I'm sorry you have to hide behind
    your wall of fabrications.
    but most of all, I'm sorry
    I have to walk this Earth
    full of closed minds and opened hands.
    This world, lessened by the misconceptions
    of the weak, confused, and descepted
    that wander this plane of existence
    searching for acceptance.

    I Apologize.
    test
  2. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    woah i LOVED this.......(i dont say that often).........it sort of had a maya angelou feel to it.....

    but most of all, I'm sorry
    I have to walk this Earth
    full of closed minds and opened hands.
    ^^^
    dope line


    peace and blessings
    test
  3. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    All I can say is I'm sorry for sleeping on this, for reason unknown...I give it 2 snaps.
    test
  4. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    yeh, really liked this, nice twist, strong
    test
  5. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    yo thanks for the look out ppl

    STAY up and much LOVE peace!
    test
  6. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    I'm sorry you were born without
    a mind large enough to comprehend
    the tangiblility of this world.


    dope....liked those lines....ima have to start checkin for you....
    test
  7. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    Very nice...

    ..depicting how shallow and flakey (amongst other things) this world can be (and in general, is)...in a very simplistic yet so well put way...

    ...er...nothing more to say...(?!?>!)...yep, that said it all for me..

    ...resp...
    test
  8. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    nice! i really liked the message in this
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  9. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    i'm glad i stumbled upon this piece... i've always wanted to write a poem like this and u did the idea justic. nice job.
    test
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