Anthropomorphic Sacrifices...

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  1. Thaumaturge

    Thaumaturge New Member

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    Hearts lost in lost chambers of lost art past alters forsaken,
    Now a replicated image of falsehood lying on calamanco blankets.
    Sagacious thoughts spread across rejection on beryl skin,
    Breezes injecting the air of sin, now recognizable on unaffectionate narrow grins.

    Dust of eminent hell covers skeleton cells, attitudes adjusted outwards,
    As pretentious pleasure is substituted for deep rivers immediately after.
    Responses from a crepuscular mind buried in nebulous patterns,
    Upon the presence of an oxygenized message of death my breath couldn’t capture.

    Caliginous barriers synchronize leaving the once innocents’ areas meek and blind,
    My spirit diminishes fearing the brink of time where my existence is merely realigned.
    Ink supplies philosophical classicistic articles brief restrain from siderosis,
    Brainwaves of ekistics noting the inhabitance of soil claiming the different lobe shifts.

    Neocortical reversal, resonant loops contain no vibration…
    Horizontal anguish captured in vertical citations upon poetical pages.
    Sadness in emotion, faces left with abrasions from glass emitted focus,
    Flesh stabbed and hindered open…pacifists are soaking in bloodbaths of crimson oceans.

    Unmasked to written omens quoting the future of inescapable submergence,
    No last words…No way to blur the imprecation that blocks the surface.
    Souls overcome by combustion,
    Ecstasy’s whirlpool corrodes broken gums with its suction.

    Folds to none…liver gushing, body can’t be cleansed from the defective addiction,
    Circulating through Satan asserted blood streams forming an efferent prison.
    Humanity’s loss of truth, now a gold folded napkin temporarily concrete,
    The following reflection becomes an abstract depression buried in the deep.

    The shallow results in a battle with one’s self to try and justify the feeling,
    But nothing hides from seeing the end result, body frozen in black ice, surmounted by suicidal demons…

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  2. quotive

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    I liked this, but hmm

    WHAT THE FUCK did it mean? I feel hella retarded.. I had no clue what half of this shyt means.. *grabs the dictionary*
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  3. BrokenSoul8604

    BrokenSoul8604 Apparently Emotionless

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    this was pretty ill..kinda agree with quotive lol but i was diggin it....keep us thinkin

    God bless
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  4. Thaumaturge

    Thaumaturge New Member

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    hhaa, wow, wasnt exactly the responses i was expecting, but thanx for peepin it none the less
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  5. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Your writing style kinda reminds me of an poet that use to post here by the name of Nebulaz. Whenever you have the time you should go back some pages and check out his work.

    This piece had alot of quotable lines. It was kinda hard to pick a favorite, but I think this line stood out the most to me.

    "My spirit diminishes fearing the brink of time where my existence is merely realigned"

    ^sick.

    I gotta say I didnt fully grasp the meaning of this poem though. Prolly would have liked it alot more if I did know. Do you though

    one luv
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  6. ~Eloquent

    ~Eloquent Narcissistic....

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    i didnt fully grasp the meaning either
    but i really digged your witty wordplay
    you really pieced it together nicely

    "Neocortical reversal, resonant loops contain no vibration…
    Horizontal anguish captured in vertical citations upon poetical pages.
    Sadness in emotion, faces left with abrasions from glass emitted focus,
    Flesh stabbed and hindered open…pacifists are soaking in bloodbaths of crimson oceans"

    very cleverly worded
    ill have to read it maybe a few more times before i can fully understand it all
    but an interesting piece,nonetheless
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  7. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    I'm not to sure myself on where this poem is going but I like it?

    the word-play and the way you was flowing your words I cant lie had me at the edge of my seat

    I lvoe writings like this...complex deep metaphor rhymes galore stuff leaving us begging for more jaw dropping to the floor type of poem

    much props

    BIG UPS

    PEACE AND GODBLESS
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  8. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    Got dangit, who in the world are you!? JP, in other words, I haven't seen you here before and for you to come and lay such a piece like this-I'm kinda amazed. I guess we're all within this "black hole" or so my chemistry likes to tell me sometimes, because I too could not fully understand this whatsoever. I had to swipe out good ol Merriam-Webster for this one.

    But-after reading it over and over, I gotta ask, is this poem somewhat about lust?
    No last words…No way to blur the imprecation that blocks the surface.
    Souls overcome by combustion,
    Ecstasy’s whirlpool corrodes broken gums with its suction.

    I ask this because ^^^this part was probably the one I really understood, and that was the first thing that came to mind.
    -Much Love
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  9. Black Liquid

    Black Liquid New Member

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    word that was a 3 figure vocab there, you could do the same thing for 5 bucks and these cats wont sleep, cuz you got skills, but then again, so does canibus
    -Liq
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