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Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by CenTral AxiS, May 27, 2003.

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  1. CenTral AxiS

    CenTral AxiS New Member

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    Do I deserve to work for this worthless purse
    Wages obserd empty pockets seem cursed with first,
    For the filling of paper rather sooner than later
    Wishing to create a lota feeling that's greater,
    I believe I'd be happier with more money to spend,
    I'd achieve a happiness never lonley more friends.
    Surrounded by porsperity my pokets never empty,
    My dreams have eventualy somhow been sent to me
    But wait lets step back and take a look at the truth,
    Analiyze them facts that have been misunderstood,
    The fact being I don’t need anything to be happy,
    Happiness is seeing the good in whats already around me,
    Am as compete now as ever I can smile if I choose,
    I’ll Relax cos no misery can make me feel the blues,
    test
  2. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    The meaning of this poem is detailed and laid out infront of your eyes, which I like. It makes you think, though as well. Just how you put together what could make you happy, although, in the long run doesn't. The organization I felt was there and easy to read, which is a must for any reader of Poetry or writer. Nice piece overall, family. My blessings..

    *return the favor by dropping some knowledge on my piece.

    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?s=&threadid=575322
    test
  3. CenTral AxiS

    CenTral AxiS New Member

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    Thanks for the input on this piece T R nice one.

    pz
    test
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